零食— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и естественным. Избегайте повторений и пауз, используйте связующие слова для логичности. Например, сначала ответьте прямо, затем объясните причины и последствия.

示例: I usually avoid eating snacks now because I am allergic to certain chemicals found in them. Therefore, I have cut down on snacks, including chocolate and some fruits, to prevent allergic reactions.

建议: Ответ должен быть более чётким и связным. Используйте связующие слова, чтобы объяснить причины и последствия. Избегайте лишних пауз и повторов.

示例: No, I don't think eating snacks is healthy for me because my allergies can worsen, especially in stressful situations. Although I like chocolate, crisps, chips, and fries, I try to avoid them to stay healthy.

建议: Ответ должен быть более грамматически правильным и связным. Используйте правильные времена и связующие слова для плавности.

示例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. I was very interested in chocolate, biscuits, and cookies, even though my mother forbade me from eating them. Nevertheless, I still enjoyed eating these snacks.

建议: Ответ должен быть более чётким и завершённым. Избегайте пауз и неоконченных предложений, используйте связующие слова для логичности.

示例: I like to eat chocolate the most because it has always been a favorite of mine. Additionally, I enjoy chocolate products like biscuits and cookies, which often tempt me to eat them.

× Oh, I'm a little bit allergic to snacks because they contaminate some, uh, chemicals that can cause my allergy.

✓ Oh, I'm a little bit allergic to snacks because they contain some, uh, chemicals that can cause my allergy.

The verb 'contaminate' is incorrectly used here; the correct verb is 'contain' to express that snacks have chemicals inside them. 'Contaminate' means to make something impure, which does not fit the intended meaning.

× So I just cut it down and cut off even chocolate and some fruits from my diet.

✓ So I just cut them down and cut off even chocolate and some fruits from my diet.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect because 'snacks' is plural; 'them' should be used to refer to plural objects. This is related to pronoun agreement with plural nouns.

× No, as I said that umm, I'm a little bit allergic and some in some stressful situations, uh, my allergy can be worsened and I think that it caused a bile snacks.

✓ No, as I said, umm, I'm a little bit allergic and in some stressful situations, uh, my allergy can worsen and I think that it is caused by some snacks.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'some in some' is redundant; 'can be worsened' is passive but 'my allergy' is better expressed as active 'can worsen'; 'it caused a bile snacks' is incorrect and unclear, corrected to 'it is caused by some snacks' to clarify causation. Also, 'a bile' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'by some'.

× Of course, in my childhood I really was interested in eating chocolate or some biscuits with cookies, and even my mother forbidden me, had forbidden me eat it.

✓ Of course, in my childhood I was really interested in eating chocolate or some biscuits and cookies, and even my mother had forbidden me to eat them.

The phrase 'forbidden me, had forbidden me eat it' is incorrect. The correct past perfect form is 'had forbidden me to eat them.' Also, 'biscuits with cookies' is better as 'biscuits and cookies' and pronouns should agree in number.

× I just really interested and ate it.

✓ I was just really interested and ate them.

The verb 'interested' requires the auxiliary verb 'was' to form the past tense. Also, 'ate it' is incorrect because the objects (biscuits and cookies) are plural, so 'ate them' is correct.

× Well, I think that it's chocolate because chocolate was like a ban of my life and, uh, some chocolate products like biscuits or even cookies, umm, just, uh, TR tempts me to eat it and.

✓ Well, I think that it's chocolate because chocolate was like a bane of my life and, uh, some chocolate products like biscuits or even cookies, umm, just, uh, really tempt me to eat them.

The word 'ban' is incorrect; the correct word is 'bane' meaning a source of distress. Also, 'TR' seems to be a typo for 'really.' The verb 'tempts' should be plural 'tempt' to agree with plural subject 'products.' Finally, 'eat it' should be 'eat them' to match plural objects.