零食— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct basic grammar: use singular/plural properly and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific supporting details using linking words. Limit to 3–4 sentences. For example, correct articles and plurals ('this snack', 'a piece of fruit'), remove repeated words, and add a linking phrase to connect ideas.

示例: I usually eat a snack before my gym session, around 4:00–4:30. I usually have a cup of coffee and a small piece of dark chocolate because it gives me an energy boost. If I prefer something lighter, I’ll have a piece of fruit instead.

建议: Make the response grammatically correct and use linking words (however, for example) to make it coherent. State your main opinion, then give clear examples and a brief reason. Avoid hesitation and repeated words.

示例: Yes, I think snacking can be healthy if you choose the right foods. However, you should avoid sugary snacks like biscuits and candy; for example, fruits, coffee without sugar, or a handful of nuts are better alternatives because they provide sustained energy.

建议: Answer with a clear topic sentence about past habits, then explain with specific cultural examples and a brief reason for change. Use past tense consistently and link sentences (for example, but, so). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I ate snacks often when I was young because they are an important part of our culture. For example, traditional snacks often included very sweet sweets and salty treats. However, I stopped eating them frequently because I realized they were bad for my health, so now I choose healthier options.

建议: Be specific and avoid repetition. Start with a clear statement of preference, give two or three specific examples, and explain briefly why you like them using a linking word (because, so). Avoid vague phrases like 'very rich source of sweets'—use precise vocabulary (natural sugar, energy).

示例: I prefer dried fruits, such as dates and figs, and sometimes a few nuts. I like them because they contain natural sugar and fiber, which satisfy my cravings and provide quick energy before exercise.

× because this snacks makes me more energetic and and fresh.

✓ because these snacks make me more energetic and fresh.

'Snacks' is plural, so use the plural determiner 'these' and plural verb form 'make'. Also remove the repeated 'and'. Suggestion: match plural subject and verb (these snacks make).

× I usually have it as a cup of coffee and one type of sweet or dark chocolate.

✓ I usually have a cup of coffee and a piece of sweet or dark chocolate.

The phrase 'have it as a cup' is unnatural; use 'have a cup of coffee'. 'One type of sweet' is awkward; use 'a piece of sweet chocolate' or 'a piece of chocolate'. Suggestion: use natural noun phrases and articles (a cup of, a piece of).

× Other than that, maybe it's a one piece of fruit and that would be enough for keeping me.

✓ Other than that, maybe it is one piece of fruit and that would be enough to keep me going.

Use 'one piece of fruit' without 'a' before 'one'. 'Keeping me' is incorrect; use 'to keep me going' or 'to sustain me'. Suggestion: use correct collocations (keep me going).

× Yes, I believe that snacks is a very healthy habit that we can have it, but we have to make sure that it should not include a lot of sugar inside it, such as some type of biscuits or chocolates.

✓ Yes, I believe that snacks are a habit that can be healthy, but we must ensure they do not include a lot of sugar, such as some types of biscuits or chocolates.

'Snacks' is plural so use 'are'. Remove redundant 'it' after 'have'. Use 'they' to refer back to 'snacks'. 'Should not include' and 'must ensure' together are redundant; simplify to 'must ensure they do not include'. Suggestion: maintain subject-verb agreement and avoid redundant pronouns.

× And if it's a coffee or fruit or something like dry nuts, it is it would be very nice alternative for that.

✓ And if it is coffee, fruit, or something like dried nuts, it would be a very good alternative.

Remove duplicated 'it'. Use 'would be' for hypothetical recommendation and 'a very good alternative' with article. Use 'dried nuts' rather than 'dry nuts'. Suggestion: avoid duplication and use correct article with 'alternative'.

× Yes, in our culture our snack is one of the basic things that we have it and usually it contains a lot of excess sugar and traditional food such as sweets or salty dishes.

✓ Yes, in our culture snacks are one of the basic things we have, and they usually contain a lot of added sugar and traditional foods such as sweets or salty dishes.

Use plural 'snacks' with plural verb 'are' and 'contain'. Remove redundant 'it'. Use 'added sugar' rather than 'excess sugar' and plural 'foods'. Suggestion: ensure plurality consistency and remove unnecessary pronouns.

× But I have stopped these all habits because I have realized that it's not good for my health.

✓ But I have stopped all those habits because I realized that they are not good for my health.

'These all habits' is unidiomatic; use 'all those habits'. Use simple past 'realized' (or present perfect 'have realized') consistently; here simple past fits. Replace 'it's' with 'they are' to refer to 'habits'. Suggestion: use correct demonstrative with plural nouns and keep tense consistent.

× I'd love to have dry fruit snacks or things that have healthy source of sugar such as dates or fig because I will be already fulfilling my my cravings.

✓ I'd love to have dried fruit snacks or things that are a healthy source of sugar, such as dates or figs, because they will already satisfy my cravings.

Use 'dried fruit' adjective, 'a healthy source' requires article and 'fig' plural 'figs'. 'Will be already fulfilling' is awkward; use 'will satisfy'. Remove duplicate 'my'. Suggestion: correct noun forms, articles, and use natural verb phrases.

× At the same time I'm taking very rich source of sweets which give me energy to continue.

✓ At the same time I'm having a very rich source of sweets which gives me energy to continue.

Use 'having' or 'eating' instead of 'taking' for food. 'A very rich source' needs the article 'a'. 'Sweets' is singular subject for 'which gives' if referring to 'source', so use 'gives'. Suggestion: use correct verb for consuming food and ensure subject-verb agreement in relative clauses.