零食— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 总体表达自然且信息明确，但有些重复（如两次使用“usually”），句子可以更简洁连贯。可以用连接词提高流畅度，并给出更具体的时间或频率。例如把“in the break of classes”改为“during short breaks between classes”并说明一周大概几次。避免自相矛盾（先说健康零食，然后又说吃糖果），可以解释原因。

示例: I usually snack while studying, mainly on healthy options like nuts, fresh fruit and yogurt. During short breaks between classes I sometimes have a small sweet, such as a candy, to quickly boost my energy about twice a week.

建议: 回答直接且内容相关，但句子结构略显简单，词汇重复（例如“snacks”多次出现）。可用连接词使逻辑更清晰，并用更准确的表达替代“milk with low calorie”。加入具体例子或频率会更有说服力。

示例: Yes, I think my snacking habits are healthy because I mostly choose low‑calorie milk, fresh fruits and raw vegetables. I rarely eat junk food like chips or chocolate, maybe only on special occasions.

建议: 回答结构清楚，但逻辑上有点绝对（“I stopped eating them”显得突兀）。可以用更自然的叙述说明变化过程，加入时间细节或频率词，并用连接词增强连贯性。避免绝对化表述，改为“reduced”更真实。

示例: Yes, as a child I used to eat a lot of sweets and biscuits. After my parents warned me about tooth problems, I gradually reduced them and only had treats occasionally.

建议: 回答内容明确且符合题意，但句式可以更自然、词汇更准确。“High fat milk”可改为“full‑fat dairy products”或“high‑fat snacks”。可以补充少量具体例子或偏好理由，使用连接词让表达更流畅。

示例: I like yogurt, cheese and raw vegetables because they are healthy and tasty. I tend to avoid high‑fat dairy products and sugary snacks like candies to keep my diet balanced.

× Additionally, in the break of classes, I usually eat some candies to maintain the energy.

✓ Additionally, during breaks between classes, I usually eat some candies to maintain my energy.

英文中表示“在上课间隙”应使用 during breaks between classes 或 during the break between classes，不能用 in the break of classes。并且“maintain the energy”不自然，需改为 maintain my energy（保持我的精力）。建议多用固定搭配：during + 名词短语，或 between + 名词。

× Yes I do because I usually eat some snacks such as milk with low calorie and vegetables and fruits.

✓ Yes, I do because I usually eat snacks such as low-calorie milk, vegetables, and fruits.

原句中“milk with low calorie”词序和形式不正确，正确应为 low-calorie milk（形容词-名词结构）。此外在列举名词时加逗号分隔更自然。注意在 yes 后加逗号。建议学习形容词修饰名词的常见形式（如 low-calorie, high-fat）。

× However, I hardly ever eat the junk food such as chips and candies and chocolate.

✓ However, I hardly ever eat junk food such as chips, candies, and chocolate.

“the junk food”在泛指时不需要定冠词 the，应为 junk food。列举项之间用逗号分隔更自然。建议掌握可数/不可数名词与冠词的搭配。

× Sure, when I was a child, I really liked to eat snacks, especially the candies and the biscuits.

✓ Sure. When I was a child, I really liked eating snacks, especially candies and biscuits.

原句中用 liked to eat 可以接受，但更自然是 liked eating；此外 “the candies and the biscuits” 在泛指时不需定冠词 the，应为 candies and biscuits。建议注意过去一般时的常用表达及冠词用法。

× Therefore I stopped eating them.

✓ Therefore, I stopped eating them.

句子时态本身正确，但在 Therefore 后需加逗号以符合书面标点习惯。建议写作时注意连接词后的标点以增强可读性。

× I enjoy eating snacks such as yogurt, cheese and vegetables which are not only healthy but also delicious.

✓ I enjoy eating snacks such as yogurt, cheese, and vegetables, which are not only healthy but also delicious.

在列举项之间应使用逗号分隔；定语从句 which 指代前面的整个名词短语，前面需加逗号。建议注意列举和定语从句的标点规则。

× However, I avoid eating some high fat milk and candies.

✓ However, I avoid eating high-fat milk and candies.

“some”与不可数或集合名词连用时要注意语义，这里不需要 some；“high fat milk”应改为复合形容词 high-fat milk。建议学习复合形容词的连字符用法并避免在泛指时多余使用 some。