耐心— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is a bit confusing because you say you are 'passionate' instead of 'patient', which changes the meaning. Also, the sentence is long and repetitive. Try to answer directly and clearly, using correct vocabulary and shorter sentences.

示例: I am not a very patient person. For example, when my friends annoy me, I can get frustrated quickly. I am working on being more patient in these situations.

建议: Your answer is good but can be improved by linking ideas more smoothly and avoiding small errors like 'present perform'. Use linking words to connect your ideas clearly.

示例: I usually feel impatient in stressful situations, such as waiting for exam results or before giving a presentation. For example, before presenting, I often feel nervous and excited, so it is hard to stay calm and focused.

建议: Your answer has good content but some grammar mistakes and awkward phrases. Try to use correct grammar and clearer expressions. Also, avoid repeating words like 'for for'.

示例: Actually, concentrating on one task for a long time is easy for me because I enjoy long-term tasks. They help me focus and become more serious.

建议: Your answer is relevant but has some grammar errors and repetition. Use correct pronouns and avoid repeating words. Also, try to make your sentences clearer and more natural.

示例: I don't have a job because I am a student. However, I think school requires students to be patient because studying needs discipline and concentration.

建议: Your answer is good but can be improved by avoiding repetition and using smoother linking words. Also, correct small grammar mistakes like 'to to'.

示例: Definitely, I am more patient now than when I was a child. I used to be a reckless and hyperactive girl. Now, at almost 18, I have learned to be more disciplined and can focus on tasks for longer periods.

× even my friends can easily drive me crazy in situations that makes me feel exhausted and annoying

✓ even my friends can easily drive me crazy in situations that make me feel exhausted and annoyed

The subject 'situations' is plural, so the verb should be 'make' instead of 'makes'. Also, 'annoying' should be 'annoyed' to correctly describe the feeling experienced by the speaker.

× I don't think that I'm a passion person

✓ I don't think that I'm a patient person

The word 'passion' is a noun and incorrectly used here. The correct adjective to describe someone who can wait calmly is 'patient'.

× when I have to present perform

✓ when I have to perform a presentation

The phrase 'present perform' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'perform a presentation' or simply 'give a presentation'.

× it's hard to stay in calm and focused

✓ it's hard to stay calm and focused

The preposition 'in' is unnecessary here. The correct phrase is 'stay calm and focused'.

× I love a long term tasks and exercises as they can take all my attention for for a while and make me serious person

✓ I love long-term tasks and exercises as they can take all my attention for a while and make me a serious person

'Tasks' is plural, so 'a' should be removed before it. Also, 'long term' should be hyphenated as 'long-term' when used as an adjective. The phrase 'make me serious person' needs an article 'a' before 'serious person'.

× school also requires all his students to be patient

✓ school also requires all its students to be patient

The pronoun 'his' is incorrect when referring to 'school'. The correct possessive pronoun is 'its'.

× necessary, necessary studying process which requires people to be disciplined and concentrated

✓ necessary studying process which requires people to be disciplined and focused

The word 'concentrated' is incorrect here; the correct adjective to describe the state of paying attention is 'focused'. Also, the repetition of 'necessary' is redundant and should be removed.

× I was reckless girl who wasn't scared of anything

✓ I was a reckless girl who wasn't scared of anything

The singular noun 'girl' requires the indefinite article 'a' before it.

× can focus on task for extended periods

✓ can focus on tasks for extended periods

The singular noun 'task' should be plural 'tasks' to match the plural 'periods'. Also, 'on task' is correct but 'on tasks' fits better with 'extended periods'.