耐心— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，比如“out of patients”应为“out of patience”，且句子结构混乱。建议简化句子，避免重复和口语化错误，保持回答自然且有效。

示例: I'm afraid I'm not very patient. Sometimes I get frustrated when my husband does things that annoy me, and I find it hard to control my emotions.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误，如“people doing”应为“people do”，且表达略显重复。建议使用连词使句子更连贯，并用更准确的词汇表达观点。

示例: I feel impatient when people do things very slowly, such as speaking or moving slowly, because I think it's a waste of time and not efficient.

建议: 回答中时态使用不当，且句子结构不够清晰。建议使用正确时态，简洁表达感受，并避免口语化的“'cause”和“right”。

示例: When I have to do something for a long time, like taking a three-hour test, I feel a bit frustrated and stressed because it requires a lot of concentration.

建议: 回答中充满了填充词，影响流畅性。建议减少“umm”“uh”等词汇，使用更准确的词汇如“patience”，并完整表达观点。

示例: Currently, I am a master's student, and my main work is writing papers. This requires a lot of patience, although sometimes I find it difficult to stay patient.

建议: 回答结尾不完整，缺少具体说明。建议补充完整句子，使用正确时态，并详细说明原因，使内容更具体。

示例: Yes, I think I am more patient now. As a child, I could read thick books for hours, but now I have less patience, probably because technology like smartphones and video games distract me more easily.

× I'm I'm afraid not I often go mad and out of patients with my husband and I shot at him.

✓ I'm afraid not. I often go mad and run out of patience with my husband, and I shout at him.

这里的 'patients' 应为 'patience'，因为 'patience' 是不可数名词，表示耐心。'shot' 应为 'shout'，表示喊叫。

× but I just can't control myself when she when he keep doing something dumb or something made me anxious.

✓ but I just can't control myself when he keeps doing something dumb or something that makes me anxious.

代词使用错误，前后应保持一致，且动词需与主语一致。'she' 应改为 'he'，'keep' 应为 'keeps'，'made' 应为 'makes'。

× Umm I'm I just can't stand sometimes when people doing something very slowly and like speaking slowly or move very slowly, that will make me out of patience and I think it's a waste of time and not very efficient.

✓ Umm, I just can't stand it sometimes when people do something very slowly, like speaking slowly or moving very slowly. That makes me lose patience, and I think it's a waste of time and not very efficient.

缺少代词 'it'，动词形式错误，'doing' 应为 'do'，'move' 应为 'moving'，句子结构需调整使其更通顺。

× When I had to do something for a long time, for example to take a three hour test this afternoon, I feel a little frustrated and feels that sometimes feels stressful 'cause it's a really long period of time, right?

✓ When I have to do something for a long time, for example, taking a three-hour test this afternoon, I feel a little frustrated and sometimes feel stressed because it's a really long period of time, right?

时态错误，描述现在或将来情况应使用一般现在时。'had' 改为 'have'，'feels' 改为 'feel'，'feels stressful' 改为 'feel stressed'。

× Umm, currently I'm a student, I'm a masters student. Umm, so, uh, my major work is to write papers. So yes, it requires a lot of patient patience. Umm, but I sometimes, uh, really can't stand that, uh, I have to.

✓ Umm, currently I'm a student, a master's student. Umm, so, uh, my main work is to write papers. So yes, it requires a lot of patience. Umm, but sometimes, uh, I really can't stand that, uh, I have to.

'patient' 应为名词 'patience'，'masters student' 应为 'master's student'，'major work' 改为 'main work' 更合适。

× Yes, I think so. When I was a child, I can sit there to read a thick book for a whole afternoon, but now I don't have that kind of patience.

✓ Yes, I think so. When I was a child, I could sit there and read a thick book for a whole afternoon, but now I don't have that kind of patience.

时态不一致，描述过去应使用过去时态，'can' 改为 'could'。

× I suppose it's because of the development of the technology like the smartphone or the video games, which made me really.

✓ I suppose it's because of the development of technology like smartphones or video games, which really affect me.

'the technology' 应为不可数名词 'technology'，'the smartphone' 和 'the video games' 应去掉定冠词，且句子不完整，需补充谓语。