耐心— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 답변이 다소 모호하고 문장이 자연스럽지 않습니다. 질문에 직접적으로 답하고, 명확한 주제문과 구체적인 예시를 포함하여 답변을 구성하세요. 또한, 문장 연결을 위해 적절한 연결어를 사용하면 좋습니다.

示例: I am not a very patient person. For example, when I work on tasks, I tend to rush decisions instead of waiting calmly. However, I try to improve by thinking carefully before acting.

建议: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 문장이 길어 이해하기 어렵습니다. 간결하고 명확한 문장으로 감정을 표현하고, 구체적인 이유를 덧붙여 답변을 구성하세요.

示例: I feel impatient when I am anxious. For instance, if I make a decision quickly, I often doubt myself and wonder if it was the best choice.

建议: 답변이 다소 혼란스럽고 문장 구조가 불명확합니다. 주제문을 명확히 하고, 구체적인 방법과 이유를 연결어와 함께 자연스럽게 설명하세요.

示例: When I have to do something for a long time, I sometimes doubt if I am doing my best. Therefore, I create a schedule and set small goals to stay motivated and improve my performance.

建议: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 문장이 길어 이해하기 어렵습니다. 직업에서 인내심이 필요한 이유를 명확히 하고, 구체적인 상황을 예로 들어 설명하세요.

示例: Yes, my job requires patience because I often change departments and meet many people. This means I have to manage different relationships and sometimes endure difficult conversations.

建议: 답변이 불완전하고 문장이 어색합니다. 비교를 명확히 하고, 과거와 현재의 차이를 구체적으로 설명하는 문장을 완성하세요.

示例: I am more patient now than when I was a child. As a child, I acted on my instincts and made decisions quickly, which made me happy. Now, I think more carefully before deciding, even if it takes more time.

× I would look through the process of my works and try to think more before I make a decision.

✓ I would look through the process of my work and try to think more before I make a decision.

The word 'works' is incorrectly used here; 'work' as an uncountable noun refers to tasks or job duties. Using 'works' (plural) is incorrect in this context. Correcting to 'work' fits the intended meaning.

× But as a person, because I have been very alert to my works, I wouldn't say that.

✓ But as a person, because I have been very alert to my work, I wouldn't say that.

The preposition 'to' is incorrectly used with 'alert'. The correct phrase is 'alert about' or 'alert to' but here 'alert to my work' is acceptable. However, 'works' should be 'work' as explained before.

× I would say the anxious would be the biggest problem for me to feel impatient because whenever I do I would look back towards myself and wonder and keep questioning myself that was it a best decision I could make and.

✓ I would say anxiety would be the biggest problem for me to feel impatient because whenever I do, I look back at myself and wonder and keep questioning myself whether it was the best decision I could make.

The word 'anxious' is an adjective but here a noun 'anxiety' is needed. Also, 'look back towards myself' is awkward; 'look back at myself' is correct. 'a best decision' is incorrect; 'the best decision' is correct. The sentence is also incomplete and needs restructuring for clarity.

× I would first wonder I would I if what I do best for this whole time but I will try to make my own schedule and routine to work best and give myself a small goals so I can eventually make it better.

✓ I would first wonder if I am doing my best during this whole time, but I will try to make my own schedule and routine to work better and give myself small goals so I can eventually improve.

The sentence has pronoun confusion and awkward phrasing. 'I would I if what I do best' is incorrect. It should be 'if I am doing my best'. 'a small goals' is incorrect; 'small goals' without 'a' is correct.

× My changing keeps me to change my departments time by time and because I have to meet a lot of people, it requires me to challenge with some relationships or also endure myself with the conversation with my.

✓ My changing keeps me changing departments from time to time, and because I have to meet a lot of people, it requires me to face some challenges in relationships or also endure conversations with them.

'keeps me to change' is incorrect; 'keeps me changing' or 'forces me to change' is correct. 'departments time by time' should be 'departments from time to time'. 'challenge with some relationships' is incorrect; 'face challenges in relationships' is correct. 'endure myself with the conversation' is incorrect; 'endure conversations' is correct.

× I would say so, but I don't think it's a very great. Results because when I was little, I was more with my instincts and I felt happier with my decisions and I would haven't wouldn't think very much about my decision making as well but.

✓ I would say so, but I don't think the results are very great because when I was little, I followed my instincts more and felt happier with my decisions, and I wouldn't think very much about my decision making as well.

'it's a very great. Results' is incorrect; 'the results are very great' is correct. 'I was more with my instincts' is awkward; 'I followed my instincts more' is better. 'I would haven't wouldn't think' is incorrect; 'I wouldn't think' is correct. The sentence is incomplete and needs restructuring.