耐心— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is quite natural and well-structured, but you can improve by using more varied vocabulary and clearer linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas and try to be more concise.

示例: No, I am not very patient, especially when I have urgent tasks. However, I am trying to improve because patience is crucial for success. For example, I practice staying calm during traffic jams or when others are late, which helps me manage my frustration better.

建议: Your answer has several grammar and vocabulary errors that affect clarity. Try to use simpler, correct sentences and avoid repetition. Also, explain your feelings clearly with appropriate vocabulary.

示例: Waiting for someone has always frustrated me since I was a child. I feel very annoyed and angry when people arrive late or change plans without notice. I dislike such behavior because it wastes my time.

建议: Your answer is relevant but a bit repetitive and lacks linking words. Try to avoid repeating phrases and use connectors to make your answer more coherent.

示例: It depends on the task. If I enjoy it, I put in all my effort and knowledge. However, if I dislike the task, I usually feel frustrated and annoyed.

建议: Your answer has several grammar mistakes and unclear expressions. Try to speak clearly and use correct grammar. Also, avoid hesitation and organize your ideas logically.

示例: Currently, I am unemployed because I lost my previous job due to impatience. Therefore, I am working on improving my patience to succeed in my personal and professional life.

建议: Your answer is understandable but contains grammar errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct verb forms and smoother expressions to improve clarity.

示例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. I used to be impatient and get angry over small things. However, with time, I have learned to be more patient.

× Waiting for someone has always been so frustrating for me since why I was a child.

✓ Waiting for someone has always been so frustrating for me since I was a child.

The phrase 'since why I was a child' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'since I was a child' to indicate the starting point of the frustration in the past continuing to the present.

× It makes me so impressed and I'm also really furious when I wait for someone and when they do not arrive in time when they change dates for some plans.

✓ It makes me so upset and I'm also really furious when I wait for someone and they do not arrive on time or when they change dates for some plans.

The word 'impressed' is incorrectly used here; the correct adjective is 'upset' to express negative feelings. Also, 'in time' should be 'on time' to indicate punctuality.

× I really don't like it and I really don't prefer those people who do who do.

✓ I really don't like it and I really don't prefer those people who do that.

The phrase 'who do who do' is repetitive and incorrect. It should be 'who do that' to refer back to the previous action or behavior.

× Well, it depends upon the task.

✓ Well, it depends on the task.

The correct preposition to use with 'depends' is 'on' rather than 'upon' in this context for natural English usage.

× Well, it depends upon it.

✓ Well, it depends on it.

Same as above, 'depends on' is the correct phrase rather than 'depends upon' in this context.

× Right now I am a jobless person because once I had a job and I was fired from the job because of my impatience.

✓ Right now I am jobless because I once had a job and was fired because of my impatience.

The phrase 'a jobless person' is less natural than 'jobless'. Also, 'once I had a job' is correct but 'I was fired from the job' can be simplified to 'was fired'. The sentence is adjusted for clarity and naturalness.

× And I really thinking, I really am thinking of uh, improving my patient's liver so that I could get a personal and professional life best.

✓ And I am really thinking of improving my patience so that I can have the best personal and professional life.

The phrase 'improving my patient's liver' is incorrect and likely a mishearing or typo. The correct phrase is 'improving my patience'. Also, 'could get a personal and professional life best' is awkward; it should be 'can have the best personal and professional life'.

× Yes, I'm really a more patient person than when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I'm a much more patient person than when I was a child.

The adverb 'really' is less appropriate here; 'much more patient' is the correct comparative form to emphasize the difference.

× I used to be furious and I had frustrated at every little things.

✓ I used to be furious and frustrated at every little thing.

The phrase 'I had frustrated' is incorrect; 'frustrated' is an adjective here, so 'I was frustrated' or simply 'frustrated' is correct. Also, 'every little things' should be 'every little thing' because 'every' is followed by singular noun.

× So I'm more patient now than I was a child.

✓ So I'm more patient now than I was as a child.

The phrase 'than I was a child' is missing the preposition 'as' to compare the current state with the past state as a child.