耐心— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is a bit long and repetitive. Try to be more concise and clear. Start with a direct answer, then add one or two supporting details using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid redundancy and keep your sentences natural.

示例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I usually think carefully before responding. For example, during exams, I take my time to answer rather than rushing.

建议: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas logically and use linking words like 'because' and 'when'. Be specific about situations that make you impatient and explain why.

示例: I feel impatient when I hear bad news, especially if it concerns my family or friends, because I worry about them and want to help quickly.

建议: Your answer is generally clear but a bit wordy and has some grammar mistakes. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' properly. Try to express your ideas more naturally and avoid awkward phrases.

示例: I find doing the same task for a long time tedious, so I prefer to break it into smaller parts. This way, I stay interested and avoid boredom.

建议: Your answer has some unclear parts and grammar errors. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words like 'because' to explain why your job requires patience.

示例: Yes, my job requires a lot of patience because I communicate with about 30 people, including stakeholders and my boss, regularly. Managing their different opinions needs calmness.

建议: Your answer is confusing and contains unclear words and grammar mistakes. Try to express your ideas clearly and logically. Use linking words like 'because' and 'but' properly. Give specific examples comparing your patience now and as a child.

示例: Yes, I am more patient now because my work requires professionalism. Unlike when I was a child and used to throw tantrums, I now control my emotions better.

× I will consider myself as a patient person as I tend to think a lot before answering any question and even when I give an exam and the people are very curious to know what the result will be and I think I'm not that of a very hastily person.

✓ I consider myself a patient person as I tend to think a lot before answering any question and even when I take an exam and people are very curious to know what the result will be, and I think I'm not a very hasty person.

The use of 'will consider' is incorrect here because the speaker is talking about a general truth or habit, so present simple 'consider' is appropriate (Grammar Problem Type 6). Also, 'hastily' is an adverb but should be an adjective 'hasty' to describe 'person' (Grammar Problem Type 13). 'Give an exam' is better expressed as 'take an exam' (Grammar Problem Type 11).

× I will consider myself as a patient person as I tend to think a lot before answering any question and even when I give an exam and the people are very curious to know what the result will be and I think I'm not that of a very hastily person.

✓ I consider myself a patient person as I tend to think a lot before answering any question and even when I take an exam and people are very curious to know what the result will be, and I think I'm not a very hasty person.

The phrase 'consider myself as' is incorrect; the correct form is 'consider myself' without 'as' (Grammar Problem Type 11).

× Sometimes, so whenever the bad news he's heard from someone, then I tend to feel impatient because I think it is a human nature that builds up out of the curiosity.

✓ Sometimes, whenever bad news is heard from someone, I tend to feel impatient because I think it is human nature that builds up from curiosity.

The phrase 'he's heard' is incorrect; it should be passive 'is heard' because the subject is 'bad news' which is acted upon (Grammar Problem Type 12). Also, 'a human nature' is incorrect; 'human nature' is uncountable and does not need 'a' (Grammar Problem Type 22). 'Out of the curiosity' should be 'from curiosity' (Grammar Problem Type 11).

× But if something bad is happening to my friends or to my family, then the automatically the trigger, it triggers the impatience of the human being and that is when we are going to make some.

✓ But if something bad is happening to my friends or my family, then automatically it triggers the impatience of human beings, and that is when we tend to act impatiently.

The phrase 'the automatically the trigger, it triggers' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'automatically it triggers' (Grammar Problem Type 12). 'The impatience of the human being' is better as 'the impatience of human beings' (Grammar Problem Type 1). The sentence ending 'we are going to make some' is incomplete and unclear; corrected to 'we tend to act impatiently' for clarity (Grammar Problem Type 26).

× So maybe in that case I tend to enjoy a little bit more and doing things in a modular way rather than completing all the things so that I do not get bored and I do not leave it alone.

✓ So maybe in that case I tend to enjoy a little bit more by doing things in a modular way rather than completing everything at once so that I do not get bored and I do not leave it unfinished.

'Doing things' should be connected properly with 'enjoy' using 'by doing' (Grammar Problem Type 8). 'All the things' is better expressed as 'everything' (Grammar Problem Type 14). 'Leave it alone' is unclear; 'leave it unfinished' is more appropriate (Grammar Problem Type 11).

× Because if the things has to be carried out for a longer period, then it tends to be boring and monotonous.

✓ Because if things have to be carried out for a longer period, then it tends to be boring and monotonous.

'The things has' is incorrect; 'things' is plural and should be without 'the' and use 'have' (Grammar Problem Type 1).

× So there are around 30 people that I communicate regularly on the weekend basis.

✓ So there are around 30 people that I communicate with regularly on a weekly basis.

'On the weekend basis' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'on a weekly basis' (Grammar Problem Type 14). Also, 'communicate' requires the preposition 'with' (Grammar Problem Type 11).

× So it is very much patience, full job.

✓ So it is a very patience-demanding job.

'Patience, full' is incorrect; the correct adjective form is 'patience-demanding' or 'requires a lot of patience' (Grammar Problem Type 13).

× I need to have a lot of patience while doing the job because I do not have to reconsider the bad.

✓ I need to have a lot of patience while doing the job because I do not want to reconsider the bad.

The phrase 'do not have to reconsider the bad' is unclear and likely incorrect; 'do not want to reconsider the bad' fits better contextually (Grammar Problem Type 12).

× Yes, absolutely, because, uh, nowadays I have to deal with a lot of poison and I have to so how pro so professionalism in the work also.

✓ Yes, absolutely, because nowadays I have to deal with a lot of pressure and I have to show professionalism in my work as well.

'Poison' is incorrect; the intended word is likely 'pressure' (Grammar Problem Type 12). 'So how pro so professionalism' is incorrect and corrected to 'show professionalism' (Grammar Problem Type 26).

× So that is the main reason I have to show and communicate with the better and formal way, even if I'm, I'm impatient inside.

✓ So that is the main reason I have to show and communicate in a better and more formal way, even if I'm impatient inside.

'Communicate with the better and formal way' is incorrect; it should be 'communicate in a better and more formal way' (Grammar Problem Type 11).

× But when I was child, I used to show some tantrum or so things to my parents and they were typically dealing with.

✓ But when I was a child, I used to throw tantrums or do such things to my parents, and they typically dealt with them.

'When I was child' needs the article 'a' (Grammar Problem Type 22). 'Show some tantrum' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'throw tantrums' (Grammar Problem Type 12). 'They were typically dealing with' is incomplete; corrected to 'they typically dealt with them' (Grammar Problem Type 26).