耐心— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to answer the question directly with a clear topic sentence first. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use correct sentence structures and vocabulary to express your ideas naturally and clearly. For example, start with 'I am patient in some situations, but not in others.' Then give specific examples with linking words.

示例: I am patient in some situations, but not in others. For instance, I enjoy petting my cat, so I am very patient then. However, when my mum asks me to do chores, I sometimes feel less patient because I find them boring.

建议: Your answer is relevant but could be more fluent and structured. Avoid hesitations and repetitions. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then explain why homework makes you impatient.

示例: I feel impatient when I have to do tasks I dislike, especially homework. For example, if I make mistakes, I get frustrated because I want to do well.

建议: Try to organise your answer more clearly and avoid fragmented sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and explain your feelings with specific examples. Also, correct grammar mistakes for clarity.

示例: It depends on the activity. For instance, I am currently studying cyber security, which covers many areas. Although it takes a long time, I enjoy learning it because it interests me.

建议: Your answer is relevant but could be more concise and grammatically correct. Use linking words to improve coherence and provide specific reasons why being a student requires patience.

示例: Yes, my job as a student requires patience because I have to study many different subjects in depth, which takes time and effort.

建议: Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid repetition. Use correct tenses and linking words to explain your opinion with specific reasons.

示例: I think I am less patient now than when I was a child because I have more responsibilities and tasks to handle, unlike before when I could focus only on things I enjoyed.

× It really depends on what thing am I, what kind of thing am I doing.

✓ It really depends on what thing I am, what kind of thing I am doing.

The sentence has incorrect word order for indirect questions. In English, indirect questions follow the subject-verb order, not the question word order. So 'what thing am I' should be 'what thing I am'.

× if I am pasting like petting a cat and I will be patient through it because I like cats

✓ if I am petting a cat, I will be patient through it because I like cats

The word 'pasting' is incorrect here; the intended verb is 'petting'. Also, 'pasting like petting a cat' is confusing and incorrect. The correction clarifies the intended meaning.

× or if my mom tells me to do something, I will be really I will. I will.

✓ or if my mom tells me to do something, I really will.

The original sentence is incomplete and repetitive. The correction completes the sentence properly and removes unnecessary repetition.

× To do something that I really don't like or I don't want to do will make me feel impatient, especially when I when I am doing my homework.

✓ Doing something that I really don't like or don't want to do makes me feel impatient, especially when I am doing my homework.

The original sentence uses an awkward infinitive phrase and repeats 'when I'. The correction uses a gerund phrase and removes repetition for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× And if I got a few of them wrong, I will be, I will get a little bit, uh, mad.

✓ And if I get a few of them wrong, I will get a little bit mad.

The original sentence mixes past tense 'got' with future 'will be'. The correction uses present tense 'get' to match the conditional 'if' clause and future 'will get' for the result, which is correct in first conditional sentences.

× It depends on what am I doing.

✓ It depends on what I am doing.

In indirect questions, the word order should be subject + verb, not verb + subject. So 'what am I doing' should be 'what I am doing'.

× Cyber security has a lot large fields so I need to spend time on it so but I feel really good learning it.

✓ Cyber security has a lot of large fields, so I need to spend time on it, but I feel really good learning it.

The phrase 'a lot large fields' is incorrect; it should be 'a lot of large fields'. Also, the sentence needs commas to separate clauses properly for clarity.

× My job is being a student and a student we have to learn a lot in different kind of field, in a board field and deeply.

✓ My job is being a student, and as a student, we have to learn a lot in different kinds of fields, in a broad field and deeply.

The phrase 'different kind of field' should be plural 'different kinds of fields'. 'Board field' is a misspelling of 'broad field'. Also, commas are added for clarity.

× I think I became more impatient than I was a child because when I was a child I don't have this much things to do.

✓ I think I have become more impatient than I was as a child because when I was a child I didn't have this many things to do.

The tense should be present perfect 'have become' to indicate change over time. 'I was a child' needs 'as' before it. 'Don't have' should be past tense 'didn't have' to match 'when I was a child'. 'Much things' is incorrect; 'many things' is correct for countable nouns.

× I just have to focus on what the thing I what the things I like.

✓ I just had to focus on the things I like.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. The correction simplifies and clarifies the intended meaning, using past tense 'had' to match the time frame and correct word order.