耐心— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb tenses, and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect ideas logically.

示例: I consider myself patient when dealing with animals because I carefully observe their behaviour and needs. However, when I have urgent plans, I tend to hurry to finish tasks quickly.

建议: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to improve coherence.

示例: I often feel impatient when I see long queues while shopping, so I prefer to come back another day. Also, if I dislike a task at work, I tend to lose motivation quickly.

建议: Your answer needs clearer sentence structure and correct grammar. Use linking words to contrast your feelings about different activities and provide specific examples.

示例: It depends on the activity. If I enjoy it, like writing poetry or painting, I can spend hours doing it without feeling tired. However, if I dislike the task, I quickly lose interest and become impatient.

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to directly answer the question, use appropriate vocabulary, and explain why patience is needed in your job with specific examples.

示例: In my previous job as a coffee maker, patience was important because I had to carefully prepare each drink. Although I enjoyed the aroma of coffee, dealing with impatient customers and staff could be challenging.

建议: Your answer has good content but needs clearer sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words to explain your reasoning logically and provide specific examples.

示例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because I have learned to think rationally and calmly after many experiences with different people and situations.

× It is hard to say because when I facing the animals, I was a very patient person and I were observing their behavior and their needs.

✓ It is hard to say because when I face the animals, I am a very patient person and I observe their behavior and their needs.

The verb 'facing' should be in the base form 'face' to match the present tense context. Also, 'was' and 'were' are past tense forms; since the sentence refers to a habitual action, present tense 'am' and 'observe' are appropriate.

× In January it might take a long time but when I have something to do like plan, I will be a very hurry to finish.

✓ In January it might take a long time but when I have something to do like a plan, I will be in a hurry to finish.

The phrase 'a very hurry' is incorrect; 'hurry' is a noun here and needs the preposition 'in' to form 'in a hurry'. Also, 'plan' needs an article 'a' before it.

× There is a lot of things will make me feel impatient when I was shopping and I see the long lines of people.

✓ There are a lot of things that make me feel impatient when I am shopping and I see the long lines of people.

'There is' should be 'There are' to agree with the plural noun 'things'. Also, 'will make' is changed to 'make' to match the present tense context, and 'when I was shopping' to 'when I am shopping' for consistency.

× I will quit to shopping and visit it next day.

✓ I will quit shopping and visit it the next day.

'Quit' is followed directly by the gerund without 'to'. Also, 'next day' needs the definite article 'the' to become 'the next day'.

× Umm also one night during the job that I don't like it, I will want to give up very quickly.

✓ Umm also one night during a job that I don't like, I wanted to give up very quickly.

'Will want' is incorrect here; past tense 'wanted' fits better to describe a past event. Also, 'the job that I don't like it' is redundant; 'a job that I don't like' is clearer.

× It depends on something what I do.

✓ It depends on what I do.

'Something what I do' is incorrect; the phrase should be 'what I do' to form a correct dependent clause.

× If I'm do something what I'm enjoy, it's like poetry or painting.

✓ If I do something that I enjoy, like poetry or painting,

'I'm do' is incorrect; it should be 'I do'. Also, 'what I'm enjoy' should be 'that I enjoy' to form a correct relative clause.

× I can sitting here for all day and can feel tired.

✓ I can sit here all day and not feel tired.

'Can' is followed by the base form of the verb, so 'sitting' should be 'sit'. Also, 'for all day' is better as 'all day'. The phrase 'can feel tired' contradicts the meaning, so 'not feel tired' is more appropriate.

× But if something what I don't want to do, I will very quickly lose my interesting and quick.

✓ But if it is something I don't want to do, I will very quickly lose my interest and become quick-tempered.

'Something what I don't want to do' should be 'something I don't want to do' or 'if it is something I don't want to do'. 'Lose my interesting' is incorrect; it should be 'lose my interest'. 'Quick' as an adjective is unclear; 'quick-tempered' or similar is more appropriate.

× In the last job I was a coffee maker and I think making coffee is a very enjoying job because the smell of coffee was so flavor and makes people relaxing.

✓ In my last job, I was a coffee maker and I think making coffee is a very enjoyable job because the smell of coffee is so flavorful and makes people feel relaxed.

'Enjoying' should be 'enjoyable' as an adjective. 'Was so flavor' is incorrect; it should be 'is so flavorful'. 'Makes people relaxing' should be 'makes people feel relaxed'.

× However, there's a lot of impatient things in this job like the staff.

✓ However, there are a lot of frustrating things in this job, like the staff.

'Impatient things' is incorrect; 'impatient' describes people, not things. 'Frustrating' is a better adjective here. Also, 'there's' should be 'there are' to agree with the plural noun 'things'.

× Yes, I think I am more patient now because after a lot of things and people, I start to learn thinking with rational and calmly and now we're dealing things with patient because I think it is.

✓ Yes, I think I am more patient now because after experiencing a lot of things and people, I have started to learn to think rationally and calmly, and now I deal with things patiently because I think it is important.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'start to learn thinking with rational and calmly' should be 'have started to learn to think rationally and calmly'. 'We're dealing things with patient' should be 'I deal with things patiently'. 'Patient' is an adjective; the adverb 'patiently' is needed here.