耐心— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to avoid repeating phrases like 'I'm a patient person' and 'I'm a patient people.' Also, use singular/plural forms correctly. To improve, provide a concise topic sentence followed by specific examples or reasons, and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I can stay calm and manage my emotions effectively. For instance, I often help my friends and family solve their problems by listening carefully and offering thoughtful advice.

建议: Your answer has some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Avoid phrases like 'something happens on me' and 'I'm a patient people.' Also, try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Be more specific about why the task makes you impatient and how you manage your feelings.

示例: I feel impatient when I have to complete tasks assigned by my boss late at night because it disrupts my personal time. However, I try to stay patient by reminding myself that the work is important and by taking short breaks to calm down.

建议: Your answer is incomplete and lacks clarity. Make sure to finish your sentences and provide specific examples. Use linking words to connect your ideas and explain your feelings clearly. Avoid vague phrases like 'I can' without completing the thought.

示例: I usually remain calm when I have to work on a long-term task because I can manage my time effectively. For example, when my company assigns me a project that takes several weeks, I break it down into smaller parts to stay organized and reduce stress.

建议: Your answer has grammatical errors and incomplete sentences. Use correct plural forms and complete your thoughts. Provide specific reasons why patience is important in your job and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

示例: Yes, my job as a Mandarin teacher requires a lot of patience because I work with teenagers who have different personalities. I need to be patient to understand their emotions and help them learn effectively.

建议: Your answer is good but contains some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use past tense correctly and avoid phrases like 'too rush.' Also, explain more clearly how you became more patient and use linking words to connect your ideas.

示例: Yes, I am definitely more patient now than when I was a child. When I was younger, I was too eager and rushed things, which often led to failure. However, I learned from those experiences and have since become better at managing my emotions and being patient.

× I can handle my emotion and always stay calm.

✓ I can handle my emotions and always stay calm.

The word 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' because it refers to feelings in general, which are countable in this context.

× So I'm a patient people.

✓ So I'm a patient person.

The word 'people' is plural, but the subject is singular 'I', so it should be 'person' to match singular subject.

× When something happens on me like sometimes when I need to do a task from my boss which is in the midnight time, so I will feel impatient like he's stealing my time.

✓ When something happens to me, like sometimes when I need to do a task from my boss at midnight, I feel impatient as if he's stealing my time.

The correct preposition is 'happens to me' not 'on me'. Also, 'at midnight' is the correct phrase instead of 'in the midnight time'. The sentence was also simplified for clarity.

× But because I'm a patient people, I will restore back my emotion.

✓ But because I'm a patient person, I will restore my emotions.

Again, 'people' is plural and should be 'person' for singular subject. 'Restore back' is redundant; 'restore' alone is sufficient. 'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions'.

× I still stay calm when there is a long period task which I need to do.

✓ I still stay calm when there is a long-period task that I need to do.

The phrase 'long period task' should be hyphenated as 'long-period task' to function as a compound adjective. Also, 'which' can be replaced with 'that' for defining clauses.

× For example, sometimes when my company assign me a job, I can.

✓ For example, sometimes when my company assigns me a job, I can handle it.

The verb 'assign' should be 'assigns' to agree with singular subject 'company'. The sentence was incomplete; adding 'handle it' completes the thought.

× I always need to handle different kind of students and the students are very young they are teenagers so I need to be patient to handle their emotion.

✓ I always need to handle different kinds of students, and the students are very young; they are teenagers, so I need to be patient to handle their emotions.

'Kind' should be plural 'kinds' when referring to multiple types. 'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions' because it refers to feelings of multiple students. Added punctuation for clarity.

× Also I need to patient to know their.

✓ Also, I need to be patient to understand them.

The phrase 'need to patient' is incorrect; it should be 'need to be patient'. The sentence was incomplete and unclear; 'understand them' is a clearer completion.

× During my childhood time I'm too eager and too rush to get something, but it always failed, so I turned a new leaf.

✓ During my childhood, I was too eager and too rushed to get something, but I always failed, so I turned over a new leaf.

The past tense 'was' and 'rushed' should be used to describe past states. 'It always failed' is unclear; 'I always failed' is more appropriate. The phrase is 'turned over a new leaf'.

× Now I become more patient and can handle my own emotion and managed to do that.

✓ Now I have become more patient and can handle my own emotions and manage to do that.

'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions'. 'Become' should be in present perfect 'have become' to indicate change over time. 'Managed' should be 'manage' to maintain present tense parallelism.