耐心— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên tránh dùng từ không chính xác như "Personality" ở đầu câu và nên sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng để trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các liên từ để kết nối các ý và tránh lặp từ.

示例: I am not a very patient person because I tend to get angry easily. However, as I have grown older, I have learned to stay calm and maintain a positive attitude by practicing mindfulness every day.

建议: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng số nhiều/số ít (ví dụ: "situations" thay vì "situation"). Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể để làm rõ ý.

示例: Several situations make me feel impatient. For instance, when my friends misunderstand me during conversations, I feel upset. Also, if I start the day with bad coffee, it affects my mood and productivity.

建议: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ (ví dụ: "boring" thay vì "bored"; "depends" thay vì "depend"). Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng hơn và tránh dùng các từ không chính xác như "my reliable". Hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

示例: Honestly, I sometimes feel bored when doing something for a long time, but it depends on the task. If the work is related to my dream job and reliable, I feel happy to connect and collaborate with many people every day.

建议: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp, ví dụ: "requires" thay vì "required". Câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng hơn và tránh lặp từ. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để kết nối các ý và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể hơn.

示例: Yes, my job definitely requires patience. Every day, I try to stay calm and healthy. By working with a positive attitude, I can connect well with my coworkers and share useful information that helps us all.

建议: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng thì (ví dụ: "I have grown up" thay vì "I'm grow up"). Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, sử dụng liên từ để kết nối các ý và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn.

示例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because I have grown up and become more mature. Since I started working, I have practiced staying calm and handling various situations carefully in my life.

× I'm not the kind of patient person, I easily get angry and feel upset sometimes.

✓ I'm not the kind of patient person; I easily get angry and feel upset sometimes.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence. It needs a semicolon or a conjunction to separate two independent clauses. Using a semicolon improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× But now I grow up and I'm more mature.

✓ But now I have grown up and I'm more mature.

The phrase 'I grow up' is incorrect in present tense for a completed action. The present perfect 'I have grown up' correctly indicates the process of maturing up to now.

× I practice every day to keep my energy calm and stay healthy and smile more and more nowadays.

✓ I practice every day to keep my energy calm, stay healthy, and smile more and more nowadays.

The original sentence lacks proper conjunctions and commas to separate ideas. Adding commas and 'and' improves readability and grammatical structure.

× There are many situation that make me feel impatient.

✓ There are many situations that make me feel impatient.

The noun 'situation' should be plural 'situations' to agree with 'many', which indicates plural.

× Sometimes I have conversation with my friends and they misunderstand me.

✓ Sometimes I have conversations with my friends and they misunderstand me.

The noun 'conversation' should be plural 'conversations' to match the context of multiple instances. Also, 'have conversation' is better as 'have conversations'.

× For another example, if I start the day with bad coffee, I cannot work effectively that day.

✓ For another example, if I start the day with bad coffee, I cannot work effectively that day.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× Honestly, I can feel a little boring sometime, but it depend on what the thing I doing.

✓ Honestly, I can feel a little bored sometimes, but it depends on what I am doing.

'Boring' is an adjective describing something that causes boredom; 'bored' describes a feeling. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' for frequency. 'Depend' needs third person singular 'depends'. 'The thing I doing' should be 'what I am doing' for correct grammar.

× If I work for a long time and this job is my dream, my reliable, I still feel happy to share, to connect and work with many people every day.

✓ If I work for a long time and this job is my dream and reliable, I still feel happy to share, connect, and work with many people every day.

'My reliable' is incorrect; 'and reliable' is appropriate. Also, 'to connect' should be parallel with 'to share' and 'work' so 'connect' without 'to' fits better.

× My job required be patient.

✓ My job requires me to be patient.

The present tense 'requires' fits the current job. Also, 'required be patient' is incorrect; it should be 'requires me to be patient'.

× If I work with happy smile I can connect with many coworker and share with them a lot of meaning information that's help a lot.

✓ If I work with a happy smile, I can connect with many coworkers and share with them a lot of meaningful information that helps a lot.

'Happy smile' needs an article 'a'. 'Coworker' should be plural 'coworkers'. 'Meaning information' should be 'meaningful information'. 'That's help' should be 'that helps' for subject-verb agreement.

× Yes, as I said before I'm more patient now because I'm grow up and I'm more mature than I was a kid.

✓ Yes, as I said before, I'm more patient now because I've grown up and I'm more mature than I was as a kid.

'I'm grow up' is incorrect; the present perfect 'I've grown up' is correct. Also, 'than I was a kid' should be 'than I was as a kid'.

× Since I started working I try to practice my energy calm and stay healthy.

✓ Since I started working, I try to keep my energy calm and stay healthy.

'Practice my energy calm' is incorrect; 'keep my energy calm' is appropriate. Also, a comma after 'working' improves sentence clarity.

× I try to handle many situation correctly which come to me in my life.

✓ I try to handle many situations correctly which come to me in my life.

'Situation' should be plural 'situations' to agree with 'many'. Also, 'which come' is correct as plural verb matching 'situations'.