耐心— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が多く、より自然で効果的な英語表現を使うことが必要です。また、文が長くなりすぎているため、簡潔にまとめる練習をしましょう。

示例: I am not a very patient person because I get frustrated when I have to wait in long lines, like at amusement parks. Therefore, I prefer activities that don't require much waiting.

建议: 内容が質問に合っていません。質問は「何があなたをせっかちにさせるか」ですが、回答は「我慢できる状況」について述べています。質問に直接答え、文法や語彙の誤りを修正しましょう。

示例: I feel impatient when my friends only talk about themselves and don't listen to me. It frustrates me because I want to share my own thoughts, but they dominate the conversation.

建议: 回答が不明瞭で文法的に誤りが多いです。もっと明確に感情を表現し、文を簡潔にまとめる練習をしましょう。

示例: It depends on the task. If I have to stand for a long time, I feel frustrated. But if I can move around, it is easier for me.

建议: 文法の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。学生としての立場を明確にし、簡潔で正確な表現を心がけましょう。

示例: I am still a student and have never worked before. However, as a student, I need to be patient because I have to sit at my desk for a long time.

建议: 文法と語彙の誤りが目立ちます。比較の表現を正しく使い、文を簡潔にまとめる練習をしましょう。

示例: I think I am as patient now as I was when I was a child because I still get frustrated when I have to wait a long time, but I can be patient when my friends are talking.

× I not very a person who can patient for a long time because when I visited amusement park I can't stand in long lines for attractions.

✓ I am not a very patient person because when I visit amusement parks I can't stand long lines for attractions.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'not very a person who can patient' which is ungrammatical. The correct form is 'not a very patient person'. Also, 'visited' should be 'visit' to maintain present tense consistency, and 'can't stand in long lines' should be 'can't stand long lines' as 'stand' does not require 'in' here.

× when I visited amusement park I can't stand in long lines for attractions.

✓ when I visit amusement parks I can't stand long lines for attractions.

The sentence mixes past tense 'visited' with present tense 'can't stand'. To maintain tense consistency, 'visited' should be changed to 'visit'.

× I can't stand in long lines for attractions.

✓ I can't stand long lines for attractions.

The preposition 'in' is unnecessary here. The correct phrase is 'stand long lines' without 'in'.

× I feel patient when I talking with my friends who only talk about themselves and don't listen to me.

✓ I feel impatient when I am talking with my friends who only talk about themselves and don't listen to me.

The sentence uses 'feel patient' incorrectly; it should be 'feel impatient' to express frustration. Also, 'I talking' is incorrect; it should be 'I am talking' to use the present continuous tense.

× I feel patient when I talking with my friends who only talk about themselves and don't listen to me.

✓ I feel impatient when I am talking with my friends who only talk about themselves and don't listen to me.

The verb 'talking' needs an auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense: 'I am talking'.

× I have a balanced composition.

✓ I have a balanced conversation.

The word 'composition' is incorrect in this context; 'conversation' is the appropriate word to describe balanced speaking exchange.

× I want to share my own thoughts and I have a balanced composition.

✓ I want to share my own thoughts and have a balanced conversation.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'I have a balanced composition' which is not appropriate. It should be 'have a balanced conversation' to express balanced speaking.

× sometimes I just want to express my ideas but they keep dominating the talk.

✓ sometimes I just want to express my ideas but they keep dominating the conversation.

The word 'talk' is less formal and less appropriate here; 'conversation' fits better in this context.

× when I have to work for a long time, which is umm the job which is the job that has to stay stand for a long time is feel frustrated.

✓ When I have to work for a long time, especially in a job where I have to stand for a long time, I feel frustrated.

The original sentence is fragmented and ungrammatical. It needs restructuring for clarity and correct verb usage.

× On the other hand the job that I can move.

✓ On the other hand, I prefer jobs where I can move around.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a main verb. It needs to be completed to form a proper sentence.

× Well since I'm still student so I have never worked before but as a student I the student needs to sit the disk for a long time so the job is need to needing to patient.

✓ Well, since I'm still a student, I have never worked before, but as a student, I need to sit at a desk for a long time, so the job requires patience.

The sentence has multiple errors: missing articles ('a student'), incorrect phrase 'sit the disk' should be 'sit at a desk', and awkward phrasing 'the job is need to needing to patient' should be 'the job requires patience'.

× I the student needs to sit the disk for a long time

✓ I need to sit at a desk for a long time

The phrase 'sit the disk' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'sit at a desk'.

× so the job is need to needing to patient.

✓ so the job requires patience.

The phrase 'is need to needing to patient' is ungrammatical. The correct expression is 'requires patience'.

× I think I have a same patient as child because I feel frustrated when I have when I have to wait long for a long time and I can wait when my friend's talking.

✓ I think I have the same patience as when I was a child because I feel frustrated when I have to wait for a long time, but I can wait when my friends are talking.

The sentence misuses 'a same patient' which should be 'the same patience'. Also, 'friend's' should be plural 'friends' and verb tenses need correction for clarity.

× I can wait when my friend's talking.

✓ I can wait when my friends are talking.

'Friend's' is possessive singular, but the meaning requires plural 'friends' and the verb should be 'are talking' for plural subject.