耐心— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 있습니다. 문장을 명확하고 간결하게 구성하며, 불필요한 반복과 어색한 표현을 줄이세요. 예를 들어, 주제 문장으로 시작하고 구체적인 예시를 덧붙이는 연습이 필요합니다.

示例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person, especially when I work as a veterinarian with dogs and cats. I always make sure to treat my patients carefully and thoroughly.

建议: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 문장이 완성되지 않았습니다. 문장을 완성하고, 이유를 명확히 설명하며, 연결어를 사용해 논리적으로 답변을 구성하세요.

示例: I feel impatient when mistakes happen during veterinary treatments, especially if a technician makes an error. However, I try to stay patient because staying calm helps solve problems more effectively.

建议: 답변이 불완전하고 중복된 표현이 많습니다. 문장을 명확하게 완성하고, 구체적인 감정이나 행동을 설명하며, 연결어를 사용해 답변을 풍부하게 만드세요.

示例: When I have to do something for a long time, I usually manage well because I am patient. I like to prepare everything in advance, so I can stay focused and complete the task efficiently.

建议: 답변에 문법 오류가 있고, 문장이 다소 어색합니다. 명확한 주제 문장과 구체적인 이유를 포함해 문장을 완성하고, 연결어를 사용해 자연스럽게 만드세요.

示例: Yes, my job requires a lot of patience because I work with many animals and collaborate with other people. Sometimes, I have to wait patiently for procedures to be completed.

建议: 답변이 다소 어색하고 불필요한 표현이 포함되어 있습니다. 명확한 주제 문장과 구체적인 경험을 포함해 간결하고 자연스럽게 답변하세요.

示例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. Through social activities, I have learned to cooperate with others, which has helped me develop more patience.

× Yes, I believe I am patient person, uh, when I work with younger people or as I am veterinarian, I work, I when I work with dogs or cats, I perform my patients in a full extent and.

✓ Yes, I believe I am a patient person. Uh, when I work with younger people or as I am a veterinarian, I work, I when I work with dogs or cats, I perform my patients to a full extent.

In English, singular countable nouns require an article such as 'a' or 'an' before them. 'Patient person' and 'veterinarian' are singular countable nouns, so 'a' is needed before them. Also, 'perform my patients in a full extent' is awkward; 'perform my patients to a full extent' is more appropriate.

× It happens when I work in this veterinary field. When my treatment or other technician do something wrong, I get so mad and be impatient but I try to be patient because.

✓ It happens when I work in this veterinary field. When my treatment or other technician does something wrong, I get so mad and become impatient, but I try to be patient because.

The subject 'other technician' is singular, so the verb should be 'does' instead of 'do'. Also, 'be impatient' should be 'become impatient' to correctly express the state change.

× I usually cope with the things that I have to do it for a very long time. That's because I am so patient and everything and I like everything prepared and when I when I have a long time, I just focus on.

✓ I usually cope with the things that I have to do for a very long time. That's because I am so patient and I like everything prepared, and when I have a long time, I just focus on it.

The pronoun 'it' is unnecessary after 'things that I have to do'. Also, 'focus on' requires an object, so 'it' is added to complete the phrase.

× Yes, it requires a lots of patience because it involves a lot of a animals and we have to Co work with other people and sometimes I have to wait for something is done.

✓ Yes, it requires a lot of patience because it involves a lot of animals and we have to co-work with other people, and sometimes I have to wait for something to be done.

The phrase 'a lots of' is incorrect; it should be 'a lot of'. Also, 'a animals' is incorrect; 'animals' is plural and does not need 'a'. 'Co work' should be hyphenated as 'co-work'. The phrase 'wait for something is done' should be 'wait for something to be done' to be grammatically correct.

× Yes, the patience is what I earned from my social activities. So I should say I am more patient than, uh, the childhood of myself. I learned to cooperate with other people and so on.

✓ Yes, patience is what I earned from my social activities. So I should say I am more patient than I was in my childhood. I learned to cooperate with other people and so on.

'The patience' is incorrect; 'patience' is an uncountable noun and does not need 'the'. 'The childhood of myself' is awkward; the correct expression is 'I was in my childhood' or 'my childhood'. This clarifies the comparison.