耐心— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence clarity by using correct grammar. Also, keep your answer concise and directly related to the question. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: I'm not very patient most of the time. However, when I work on important tasks, I try to be more careful and patient to avoid mistakes.

建议: Avoid vague phrases like 'that task' and clarify your ideas. Use linking words to connect your thoughts and avoid incomplete sentences. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary.

示例: I feel impatient when I have to deal with difficult people or challenging tasks. However, I try to control my anger in such situations.

建议: Improve sentence structure and grammar, and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'if' and 'otherwise' to make your answer more coherent and natural.

示例: There are two types of feelings when I do something for a long time. If the task is rewarding, I can continue easily. Otherwise, I feel bored and exhausted.

建议: Avoid repeating words unnecessarily and improve sentence flow. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details about your study routine.

示例: As a student, I need to be very patient because I study for 8 to 9 hours a day, often without breaks.

建议: Work on grammar, especially verb tenses and sentence structure. Use linking words to connect your ideas clearly and avoid repetition.

示例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. As I have grown older, I have become more mature and realized that patience is the key to success.

× Sometimes I lose my temper, especially when I make mistakes in important task or projects.

✓ Sometimes I lose my temper, especially when I make mistakes in important tasks or projects.

The word 'task' should be plural 'tasks' to match the plural 'projects' and to correctly refer to multiple items. In English, when referring to more than one item, the plural form is required.

× How about, uh, in some situations like when I'm working or uh, want something detailed, I try to be more careful and patient to avoid those.

✓ How about, uh, in some situations like when I'm working or, uh, want something in detail, I try to be more careful and patient to avoid those.

The phrase 'want something detailed' is incorrect; it should be 'want something in detail' to correctly express the desire for detailed information or specifics. The preposition 'in' is necessary here.

× Sometimes dealing with the people and sometimes doing that task, it really makes me impatient and I try to control in the situation 'cause as I mentioned earlier, I'm a furious person, so.

✓ Sometimes dealing with people and sometimes doing that task, it really makes me impatient and I try to control myself in the situation 'cause as I mentioned earlier, I'm a furious person, so.

The phrase 'the people' is incorrect here; it should be 'people' without 'the' when speaking generally. Also, 'control in the situation' is incorrect; it should be 'control myself in the situation' to correctly express self-control.

× There's two type of feeling that goes with me when I'm doing something for long.

✓ There are two types of feelings that go with me when I'm doing something for a long time.

'There's' is a contraction of 'there is' which is singular, but 'two types' is plural, so 'there are' is correct. Also, 'type' should be plural 'types' and 'feeling' should be plural 'feelings' to match. 'Goes' should be 'go' to agree with plural subject. 'For long' should be 'for a long time' for correct expression.

× The one. The one will be the reward.

✓ The first one will be the reward.

The phrase 'The one. The one will be the reward.' is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'first' clarifies the meaning and improves sentence structure.

× And if The thing is not interesting or not rewarding, then I feel bored and get exhausted.

✓ And if the thing is not interesting or not rewarding, then I feel bored and get exhausted.

The word 'The' should be lowercase 'the' as it is in the middle of the sentence. Articles should be lowercase unless starting a sentence.

× Mostly I'm doing study for 8:00 and 9:00 hours in a row a day, so I have to be very patient.

✓ Mostly I'm studying for 8 to 9 hours in a row each day, so I have to be very patient.

'Doing study' is incorrect; the correct form is 'studying'. Also, 'for 8:00 and 9:00 hours' is incorrect; it should be 'for 8 to 9 hours'. 'A day' is better expressed as 'each day'.

× Yes, with growing older I realized when I I were a child I was more impatient and I became more mature getting older and I felt like patient is the key to success and it makes someone more mature.

✓ Yes, as I grew older I realized that when I was a child I was more impatient and I became more mature as I got older and I felt that patience is the key to success and it makes someone more mature.

The sentence has multiple tense errors: 'with growing older' should be 'as I grew older' (past tense). 'I I were' is incorrect; it should be 'I was'. 'Getting older' should be 'as I got older'. 'Patient' should be 'patience' (noun). Also, 'felt like patient is' should be 'felt that patience is' for correct expression.