耐心— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и естественным. Избегайте повторов и заполнителей, таких как "uh". Используйте связующие слова для логичности и добавьте конкретные примеры.

示例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person. For instance, even when my mother says harsh words or frustrates me, I remain calm and composed.

建议: Ответ должен быть более чётким и связным. Избегайте повторов и используйте более подходящую лексику. Добавьте связующие слова и конкретизируйте ситуацию.

示例: As a student, I often feel impatient when waiting for the final exam results, especially during graduation year, because the outcome affects my future plans.

建议: Ответ неясен и содержит много повторов и грамматических ошибок. Следует использовать простые и понятные предложения, избегать лишних слов и объяснять чувства более конкретно.

示例: When I have to do something for a long time, I often feel bored and tired. However, I try to stay focused because I know it's important.

建议: Ответ должен быть более чётким и структурированным. Избегайте заполнителей и повторов. Можно добавить информацию о том, как учёба требует терпения.

示例: I am currently a student, so I don't have a job. However, studying requires patience, especially when learning difficult subjects.

建议: Ответ должен быть более связным и завершённым. Избегайте грамматических ошибок и повторов. Используйте примеры, чтобы показать изменения в терпении.

示例: I believe I am more patient now than when I was a child. For example, as a child, I used to want snacks immediately, but now I can wait without any problem.

× Well, in my opinion, I am totally tolerant person because even if my mother uh, can say lots of bad words, uh, and she may be frustr, frustrate me, however I stay calm.

✓ Well, in my opinion, I am a totally tolerant person because even if my mother can say lots of bad words and she may frustrate me, I still stay calm.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'totally tolerant person' which is necessary for singular countable nouns. Also, 'frustr' is incorrect; the correct verb form is 'frustrate'. The phrase 'however I stay calm' should be connected properly without a comma and 'still' is more appropriate here to show contrast.

× Well, as a student I can easily say that uh, the impatience is about having the final results of final exams when you are graduating some year or great.

✓ Well, as a student I can easily say that the impatience is about waiting for the final results of final exams when you are graduating in some year or grade.

The phrase 'impatience is about having the final results' is incorrect; 'waiting for' is the correct prepositional phrase. Also, 'graduating some year or great' is unclear; it should be 'graduating in some year or grade' to indicate time or level.

× So in my opinion, I am impatient of final results.

✓ So in my opinion, I am impatient about the final results.

The preposition 'of' is incorrect after 'impatient'; the correct preposition is 'about'. Also, 'final results' should be preceded by 'the' as it refers to specific results.

× I am easily fed up with the feeling that I should to do that, I should do that, and of course, uh, I have to do that.

✓ I easily get fed up with the feeling that I should do that, I should do that, and of course, I have to do that.

The phrase 'fed up with the feeling that I should to do that' is incorrect; 'should' is followed by the base verb without 'to'. Also, 'I am easily fed up' is better expressed as 'I easily get fed up' for naturalness.

× So in my opinion, the two feelings in my body are fighting to each other.

✓ So in my opinion, the two feelings in my body are fighting each other.

The phrase 'fighting to each other' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'fighting each other' without 'to'.

× Then I should do, should have.

✓ Then I should do it, I should have done it.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks the object pronoun 'it' to clarify what should be done or have been done.

× Well, as I said, I am a student, uh, and I mean to just study not to work even if I'm uh, at this, I'm at 16 years old girl, umm, my mother do not require me to do work so I can't say about it.

✓ Well, as I said, I am a student and I mean just to study, not to work. Even though I am a 16-year-old girl, my mother does not require me to work, so I can't say anything about it.

The sentence has several issues: 'I'm at 16 years old girl' should be 'I am a 16-year-old girl'; 'my mother do not' should be 'my mother does not'; 'require me to do work' is better as 'require me to work'; 'I can't say about it' should be 'I can't say anything about it'.

× I think that when you are growing up you becoming more calm and is a going person than a child.

✓ I think that when you are growing up you become calmer and a more mature person than a child.

The phrase 'you becoming' should be 'you become' to match present tense. 'More calm' is better expressed as 'calmer'. 'Is a going person' is unclear; 'a more mature person' fits the intended meaning.

× When I I remember that when I was a child I really wanted lots of chips and crisps.

✓ When I remember that when I was a child, I really wanted lots of chips and crisps.

The repeated 'I' is a typo and should be removed. The sentence is otherwise correct in past tense.

× However now I just do not want it and maybe.

✓ However, now I just do not want them anymore.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Maybe' is left hanging without context. 'It' should be 'them' to refer to plural 'chips and crisps'. Adding 'anymore' clarifies the change in preference.