耐心— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more natural and concise. Avoid awkward phrasing like "training me"; instead, say "training myself." Also, use plural forms correctly, e.g., "clear decisions." Try to link ideas smoothly and avoid redundancy.

示例: Actually, I'm not naturally a patient person, but I've been training myself for years to become more patient. This helps me stay calm when I feel frustrated, which in turn allows me to make clear decisions. Overall, I think my life has improved because of this.

建议: Your answer addresses the question but contains some grammatical errors and awkward expressions. Use consistent verb tenses and avoid repetition. For example, instead of "I would not control my emotions," say "I cannot control my emotions." Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas logically.

示例: Normally, I don't get frustrated easily, but I feel impatient when someone keeps telling lies. Even though I know they are lying, they continue to do so, which annoys me. Unfortunately, I can't do anything about it, so I just feel angry inside.

建议: Your answer is relevant and shows personal reflection, but some sentences are a bit long and repetitive. Try to use more varied vocabulary and linking words to improve coherence. Also, avoid redundancy like "as fast as possible, as soon as possible."

示例: I feel okay when I have to do something for a long time because I believe good things take time. In the past, I used to rush to finish tasks quickly, but now I've learned to be more patient and focus on quality instead.

建议: Your answer is clear but could be more fluent and natural. Avoid informal fillers like "Yeah" and repeated words like "I I." Use more precise expressions such as "manage my emotions" instead of "hold on my emotional feelings." Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, my job requires me to be patient all the time. I need to manage my emotions and balance my feelings with clear thinking because I make many decisions when teaching students. Being a patient teacher is important because it helps students learn better.

建议: Your answer is relevant but incomplete as it lacks a clear topic sentence directly answering the question. Also, avoid informal words like "Yeah" and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

示例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because I have trained myself to control my emotions better. For example, when I feel angry or frustrated, I pause and take a deep breath before reacting, as I worry that my words might hurt those around me.

× Actually I'm not this kind of person but I've been training me for years to become more patient so that I can keep calm better in moments I feel frustrated.

✓ Actually I'm not this kind of person but I've been training myself for years to become more patient so that I can keep calm better in moments I feel frustrated.

The reflexive pronoun 'myself' should be used instead of 'me' when the subject and object refer to the same person. 'Training me' is incorrect; it should be 'training myself' to indicate the action is done by the subject to themselves.

× Patience provides me with calmness and clarity. I can make clear decision and I think my life's better now.

✓ Patience provides me with calmness and clarity. I can make clear decisions and I think my life's better now.

The noun 'decision' should be plural 'decisions' because it refers to multiple instances of making decisions. Using singular here is incorrect as the context implies more than one decision.

× I would not control my emotions if hearing someone say something which is a lie.

✓ I would not control my emotions if I heard someone say something which is a lie.

The phrase 'if hearing' is incorrect; it should be 'if I heard' to form a proper conditional sentence. Also, 'would not control' is awkward here; 'would lose control of' or 'would not be able to control' would be better, but the main issue is the missing subject and verb in the conditional clause.

× And yeah I know that is a lie, but they still keep saying something like that.

✓ And yeah I know that is a lie, but they still keep saying things like that.

The phrase 'something like that' is less appropriate here; 'things like that' better matches the plural subject 'they' and the context of repeated statements. Also, 'something' is singular and does not align well with 'keep saying' which implies multiple instances.

× That makes me feel annoyed but I could do nothing and I just feel angry inside me.

✓ That makes me feel annoyed but I could do nothing and I just feel angry inside myself.

The reflexive pronoun 'myself' should be used instead of 'me' when referring back to the subject. 'Angry inside me' is incorrect; it should be 'angry inside myself' to correctly express the internal feeling.

× I need to hold on my emotional feelings.

✓ I need to hold on to my emotional feelings.

The phrasal verb 'hold on' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object. 'Hold on my emotional feelings' is incorrect; it should be 'hold on to my emotional feelings'.

× So it's really important for me to be a patient teacher.

✓ So it's really important for me to be a patient teacher.

No correction needed here; the article 'a' is correctly used before 'patient teacher'.

× And I I think that a patient teacher can help students learn better.

✓ And I think that a patient teacher can help students learn better.

The repetition 'I I' is a typographical error and should be corrected to a single 'I'.