耐心— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more concise and grammatically correct. Avoid redundancy and use linking words to improve coherence. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then add supporting details with appropriate linking words.

示例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I can wait calmly for tasks to be completed. Moreover, I listen attentively when someone is speaking until they finish.

建议: Avoid filler words like 'umm' and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about situations that cause impatience. Also, complete your thoughts clearly.

示例: I feel impatient when I have to wait in long queues, such as at hospitals or cinemas. However, I try my best to control my impatience in these situations.

建议: Improve sentence structure and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Be more specific about how long tasks affect you and what you plan to do to improve.

示例: I feel overwhelmed when I have to work on a task for a long time because my attention span has decreased, possibly due to frequent social media use. Therefore, I am trying to develop more patience to focus better.

建议: Your answer is good but can be improved by using clearer linking words and more concise sentences. Also, avoid minor grammatical errors for better clarity.

示例: Yes, my job as a dentist requires a lot of patience. For example, when restoring a tooth, I must carefully complete the procedure and carve the tooth's anatomy precisely.

建议: Work on sentence clarity and grammar. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Be specific about how social media affects your patience compared to childhood.

示例: No, I am less patient now than when I was a child. This is because social media has reduced my attention span, making it harder to focus on one task for a long time.

× I am a person who is patient and I keeps waiting for the things that is to be completed by me or I will patiently listen to a person who is talking to me until he is completed.

✓ I am a person who is patient and I keep waiting for the things that are to be completed by me or I will patiently listen to a person who is talking to me until he is finished.

The verb 'keeps' should be 'keep' to agree with the subject 'I' (subject-verb agreement). Also, 'things that is' should be 'things that are' because 'things' is plural. 'He is completed' is incorrect; it should be 'he is finished' to correctly express the completion of the person's speech.

× like waiting for a long time in a certain institution, like in for a hospital or for buying a ticket in the cinema.

✓ like waiting for a long time in a certain institution, like in a hospital or when buying a ticket at the cinema.

The preposition 'in for a hospital' is incorrect; it should be 'in a hospital'. Also, 'for buying a ticket in the cinema' should be 'when buying a ticket at the cinema' to correctly express the action and location.

× But I will try my best to control my.

✓ But I will try my best to control myself.

The sentence is incomplete and missing the object 'myself' after 'control'. This is a sentence structure error; the reflexive pronoun 'myself' is needed here.

× Nowadays, my attention span is really reducing us.

✓ Nowadays, my attention span is really reducing.

The pronoun 'us' is incorrectly used here; the attention span is reducing (decreasing) itself, so 'us' is unnecessary and incorrect.

× I have to be patient till I complete my restoration and carve the anatomy of the tooth exactly the same way as it was before.

✓ I have to be patient until I complete my restoration and carve the anatomy of the tooth exactly the same way as it was before.

The preposition 'till' is informal; 'until' is more appropriate in formal speech or writing.

× I think I am not patient as today as I am a child because I already said that due to the social media, due to the reduced attention span, it's very difficult for me to patient and focus for a long time nowadays.

✓ I think I am not as patient today as I was when I was a child because, as I already said, due to social media and the reduced attention span, it's very difficult for me to be patient and focus for a long time nowadays.

The phrase 'not patient as today as I am a child' is incorrect; the correct comparative structure is 'not as patient today as I was when I was a child'. Also, 'to patient' should be 'to be patient' as 'patient' is an adjective here.

× So I keep on emerging in engaging in a variety of tasks.

✓ So I keep on engaging in a variety of tasks.

The phrase 'emerging in engaging' is incorrect and redundant. The correct phrase is 'keep on engaging in' to express continuous involvement.