机器— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答时语法和用词有些不自然，且存在重复和语气词过多的问题。建议减少语气词，使用更准确的词汇，如将“restore”改为“store”，并且避免重复表达“drinks and some beverages”。此外，回答可以更简洁，突出重点。

示例: My favourite machine at home is the refrigerator because it is large and allows me to store a variety of fresh fruits, vegetables, and drinks. Whenever I open it, I feel comforted knowing my food is well preserved.

建议: 回答中表达不够清晰，存在语法错误和用词不当，如“do a lot of choices”不合适，应改为“do many tedious and boring chores”。建议使用更准确的表达，并减少语气词，句子结构应更连贯。

示例: Yes, washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they help me complete many tedious and boring chores quickly. This gives me more time to focus on activities I enjoy and am passionate about.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，如“artificial”应为“advanced”或“smart”，“avoid use them in a runway”表达不清。建议使用更准确的词汇和表达，减少语气词，使句子更流畅。

示例: Yes, sometimes I read the instructions carefully because machines are becoming smarter and more complex. This helps me use them correctly and avoid any mistakes.

建议: 回答中有语法错误，如“more smarter”应为“smarter”，以及“in a correct way”应为“correctly”。建议注意语法准确性，使用更自然的表达方式。

示例: Yes, it is important to read the instructions because modern devices are smarter and more complex. Reading the instructions ensures that I use them correctly and prolong their lifespan.

× it must be my refrigerator. Uh, it's so big, so I can, uh, restore a lot of fresh fruit, vegetables, drinks and some beverages.

✓ it must be my refrigerator. Uh, it's so big, so I can, uh, store a lot of fresh fruits, vegetables, drinks and some beverages.

这里的fruit应使用复数形式fruits，因为指的是多种水果。英语中当表示多种类的水果时，通常用复数形式。

× Every time when I open the refrigerator, I feel, uh, warm and secure.

✓ Every time when I open the refrigerator, I feel, uh, warm and safe.

secure通常用作形容词表示“安全的”时，更多指防护措施，而描述人的感觉时，使用safe更合适。

× It gave me a strong sense of safety.

✓ It gives me a strong sense of safety.

这里描述的是现在的感觉，应使用一般现在时gives，而不是过去时gave。

× they help me to do a lot of choices which are tedious and boring.

✓ they help me to do a lot of chores which are tedious and boring.

choices（选择）不适合用来描述家务活，应该用chores（家务活）更准确。

× I have more time to do things that I really enjoy and passionate.

✓ I have more time to do things that I really enjoy and am passionate about.

passionate是形容词，需用完整结构“am passionate about”来表达“对……充满热情”。

× Nowadays, uh, the machines are becoming more artificial and intelligent, so I need to spend some time to read the instructions earnestly, uh, to avoid use them in a runway.

✓ Nowadays, uh, the machines are becoming more artificial and intelligent, so I need to spend some time reading the instructions carefully, uh, to avoid using them incorrectly.

avoid后应接动名词using，而不是不定式use；runway用法错误，应改为incorrectly或其他合适副词。

× because nowadays devices become more smarter and complex, so it's important to read the instructions to use them in a correct way to ensure the functions and lifespans.

✓ because nowadays devices become smarter and more complex, so it's important to read the instructions to use them in a correct way to ensure their functions and lifespans.

more smarter是双重比较级错误，应去掉more；correct前应加副词in a correct way；functions和lifespans前应加物主代词their。