机器— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“he is in my bathroom”不符合英语习惯，且句子结构不完整。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并且注意主谓一致和句子连贯性。

示例: My favorite machine at home is my computer. It is located in my bedroom because I enjoy playing computer games there. Using my computer makes me feel happy and relaxed.

建议: 回答中重复且缺乏具体细节，表达不够连贯。建议减少口头语，使用连接词使回答更流畅，并提供具体原因或例子来支持观点。

示例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they save time and effort. For example, washing machines help people clean clothes quickly, which allows them to relax more.

建议: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够清晰。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用连接词使内容更连贯。

示例: Yes, I often read the instructions before using a machine because it helps me understand how to operate it safely. Also, I can teach my parents how to use it properly.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，且有较多口头语。建议使用正确的语法结构，减少口头语，并且表达更具体的理由。

示例: Yes, I think reading instructions is very important, especially because my parents are elderly. I usually read the instructions carefully so I can help them understand how to use machines safely.

× My favorite machine in my home is my computer. He is in my bathroom because I very like play computer games.

✓ My favorite machine in my home is my computer. It is in my bathroom because I really like playing computer games.

这里“computer”是无生命物体，应该用代词“it”而不是“he”。另外，“I very like play computer games”结构不正确，应改为“I really like playing computer games”，动词“like”后应接动名词形式。

× I very like play computer games.

✓ I really like playing computer games.

动词“like”后面应接动名词形式，不能直接接动词原形。

× So computer let me feel happy and relax.

✓ So the computer makes me feel happy and relaxed.

“computer”前应加定冠词“the”，动词“let”用法不当，改为“makes me feel happy and relaxed”更自然，且“relax”应为形容词“relaxed”。

× Actually, I think it's very important, uh, like washing machines, uh, person can feel very relaxed and comfortable.

✓ Actually, I think it's very important. For example, with washing machines, a person can feel very relaxed and comfortable.

“like washing machines”用法不当，应改为“for example, with washing machines”更合适；“person”前应加不定冠词“a”。

× So I think it's important and I need to reading this.

✓ So I think it's important and I need to read this.

“need to”后应接动词原形，不能接动名词形式。

× Actually, I think readers is very important because my parents years is old, uh, so I need to read this and, uh, teach them what, uh, what do this.

✓ Actually, I think reading is very important because my parents are old, so I need to read this and teach them how to do this.

“readers”应为“reading”表示“阅读”；“parents years is old”结构错误，应为“my parents are old”；“teach them what, uh, what do this”表达不清，应改为“teach them how to do this”。

× So I usually to read this, Umm, my parents say this is very important.

✓ So I usually read this. Umm, my parents say this is very important.

“usually to read”结构错误，应为“usually read”。