机器— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be clearer and more concise: start with a direct topic sentence naming the machine, then give one or two specific supporting details (purpose, how you use it) using linking words. Avoid off-topic questions and repetition. Improve grammar (articles, plurals) and sentence structure.

示例: My favourite machine at home is my leather-stitching machine. I use it every day for my small leathercraft business, mainly to sew wallets and bags, which saves me a lot of time. Because it is fast and reliable, I can finish orders quickly and keep customers happy.

建议: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and give one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., because, so). Correct vocabulary (sweeping machine, dishwasher?) and grammar (subject-verb agreement, avoid trailing incomplete sentences).

示例: Yes, I think washing machines and vacuum cleaners are very important. Because they save time and effort, people do not need to wash clothes or clean floors by hand. As a result, families can spend more time on work or rest, especially in cold weather.

建议: Start with a direct yes/no sentence, then explain one or two clear reasons using linking words. Improve grammar (read the instructions, Chinese machines, cheaper versions) and finish the thought—avoid leaving sentences incomplete.

示例: Yes, I always read the instructions carefully before using a machine. Because many inexpensive or imported machines have different safety rules and settings, reading the manual helps me avoid damage and use the correct power and attachments.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons with examples, using linking words (for example, because, so). Fix grammar (reading the instructions, electrical requirements) and avoid repeating phrases. Conclude the point briefly.

示例: Yes, it is important to read instructions because they explain how to operate the machine safely and which electricity rating to use. For example, if you use the wrong voltage, the motor can burn out, so following the manual prevents accidents and extends the machine's life.

× What is your favorite animal? My favorite machine is the four leather crafting machine.

✓ What is your favorite animal? My favorite machine is the leathercrafting machine.

The phrase 'the four leather crafting machine' uses 'four' incorrectly and is unclear; likely intended 'leathercrafting machine' or 'leather crafting machine'. Also 'leather crafting' should be combined as 'leathercrafting' or hyphenated. Remove the stray 'four' which is grammatically incorrect here. Suggestion: use 'the leathercrafting machine' or 'a leather-crafting machine.'

× I have a lot of machine 4 leather crafting because I have a small business for leather crafting.

✓ I have a lot of leathercrafting machines because I have a small business making leather products.

'a lot of' must be followed by a plural noun: 'machines' not 'machine'. '4' is numeric and misplaced; replace with 'machines'. Also 'for leather crafting' is awkward; use 'making leather products' or 'for leathercrafting.'

× So I love the machine and I love design leather product and I love process the order.

✓ So I love the machines, I love designing leather products, and I love processing orders.

Pronoun/noun number agreement: 'the machine' should be 'the machines' to match earlier plural. Verb forms require gerunds after 'love' when referring to activities: 'love designing' and 'love processing'. 'Leather product' should be plural 'leather products'.

× So yeah, that is the machine is my favorite machine in my.

✓ So yeah, that machine is my favorite in my home.

Original contains redundant 'is' and ends with incomplete phrase 'in my.' Reorder to 'that machine is my favorite in my home' or 'that is my favorite machine at home.' Ensure complete clause and remove redundancy.

× Yeah, washing machine and strip machine is really good for our life.

✓ Yeah, washing machines and sweeping machines are really useful in our lives.

When listing general items, use plural nouns 'washing machines' and 'sweeping machines'. Also plural subject requires plural verb 'are' not 'is'. 'Strip machine' likely intended 'sweeping' or 'street'—adjusted to 'sweeping machines.' 'Useful in our lives' is more natural than 'good for our life.'

× Because if there is no machine, we have to do by myself with with hand.

✓ Because if there are no machines, we have to do the work by ourselves by hand.

Use plural 'machines' with 'are' and pronoun 'ourselves' for plural subject. 'Do by myself' should match subject 'we' so use 'by ourselves'. Remove duplicate 'with'. Add 'the work' for clarity.

× It is kind of tricky because even the winter, it is very cold weather, we have to wash my clothing or.

✓ It is kind of tricky because in winter, the weather is very cold, and we still have to wash our clothes.

Use 'in winter' not 'even the winter'. 'My clothing' should match speaker's 'we' as 'our clothes'. Avoid trailing 'or'. Maintain present simple tense consistently.

× Of course, yes, I read instruction before using the machine and very carefully because in this day a lot of China machine in here.

✓ Of course, I read the instructions carefully before using the machine because nowadays there are a lot of Chinese machines here.

Use plural 'instructions'. Place adverb 'carefully' after verb. 'In this day' is unnatural; use 'nowadays'. 'China machine' should be 'Chinese machines'. Include 'there are' for existence.

× So we need to carefully read the instruction because the machine is try to make a more cheaper version.

✓ So we need to carefully read the instructions because manufacturers often try to make cheaper versions of machines.

Original has incorrect passive/active mix 'the machine is try'; use active 'manufacturers try'. 'a more cheaper' is wrong: 'cheaper' already comparative; use 'cheaper versions'. Also plural 'instructions'.

× So that means it could.

✓ So that means it could be unsafe or not work properly.

The original sentence is incomplete. Provide likely intended completion such as 'it could be unsafe or not work properly' to convey the consequence. Always complete clauses.

× Yes, it is. It is really it's really important reading instruction because the instruction says how to use I, how to use the machine and the correct size of electricity and the well, there's a lot of things that instruct instruction if you don't read instruction even if the machine doesn't have.

✓ Yes, it is. It is really important to read the instructions because the instructions say how to use the machine, the required electrical specifications, and many other details; if you don't read them, you may misuse the machine.

Use infinitive 'to read' after 'important'. Use plural 'instructions' consistently. Remove fragmented phrase 'how to use I'. 'Correct size of electricity' replaced with 'required electrical specifications'. The sentence was run-on and incomplete; reorganize into clear clauses and complete the thought.