记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答时应更直接回应问题，避免冗长且不够聚焦的叙述。可以简化内容，突出记忆力强的事实，并用连贯的连接词使表达更自然。

示例: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things. For example, I can clearly remember many childhood experiences, such as my first day at kindergarten when I had to say goodbye to my parents.

建议: 回答内容较具体，但语言表达略显重复和不够流畅。建议使用连接词如“however”或“unfortunately”来增强逻辑性，同时避免重复词汇。

示例: Yes, I have forgotten something important before. For instance, last month my supervisor asked me to submit a data analysis report on Tuesday; however, I forgot and submitted it on Wednesday, which led to criticism.

建议: 回答中存在语法和表达不够准确的问题，且句子较长且重复。建议简化句子结构，使用更准确的词汇，并用连接词使表达更连贯。

示例: In my daily life, I need to remember the delivery times for my online purchases, such as clothes and glasses, to make sure I receive them on time and avoid returns.

建议: 回答内容较完整，但句子结构复杂且有语法错误。建议简化句子，正确使用动词形式，并用连接词使表达更自然。

示例: When I need to remember important things, I usually write them down on my mobile phone. It has useful features like reminders, notes, and a calendar that help me keep track of my schedule.

× Yes, I'm good at memorizing many things.

✓ Yes, I'm good at memorising many things.

这里使用的是英式英语，原句中的memorizing是美式拼写，若保持英式拼写应为memorising。

× I can clearly recall some of my experiences, even the childhood memories.

✓ I can clearly recall some of my experiences, even my childhood memories.

“the childhood memories”中的定冠词“the”不合适，应去掉或改为“my”表示特指自己的童年记忆。

× It occurs to me that when I had to go to the kindergarten at the age of 4, I had to say goodbye to my parents, but I relied on them so much that I couldn't independently go to the kindergarten.

✓ It occurs to me that when I had to go to kindergarten at the age of 4, I had to say goodbye to my parents, but I relied on them so much that I couldn't go to kindergarten independently.

“the kindergarten”前不需要定冠词，且“independently”应放在动词“go”之后。

× Yes, I remembered it was last month that my supervisor of the company asked me to submit a report of data analysis on Tuesday, but I forgot that thing.

✓ Yes, I remember it was last month that my supervisor at the company asked me to submit a data analysis report on Tuesday, but I forgot about it.

“remembered”应用现在时“remember”表示回忆事实；“supervisor of the company”应改为“supervisor at the company”；“report of data analysis”应改为“data analysis report”；“forgot that thing”表达不自然，应改为“forgot about it”。

× I submitted the report on Wednesday, so my supervisor criticized me.

✓ I submitted the report on Wednesday, so my supervisor criticized me.

此句语法正确，无需修改。

× In my daily life, I have to remember the time when I have to receive the express delivery because I usually shop online and purchase many things such as clothes and some specs.

✓ In my daily life, I have to remember the time when I have to receive express deliveries because I usually shop online and purchase many things such as clothes and some specs.

“the express delivery”应改为复数“express deliveries”，且不需要定冠词“the”。

× So I have to receive the goods online so that they can avoid being sending back.

✓ So I have to receive the goods online so that they can avoid being sent back.

“being sending back”应改为被动过去分词形式“being sent back”。

× If something is important to remember, I usually write down these things on my mobile phone since there are many useful functions such as the reminder, the memorandum and the calendar which can help me to take some notes and feature my schedule so I can memorizing many things.

✓ If something is important to remember, I usually write down these things on my mobile phone since there are many useful functions such as the reminder, the memorandum and the calendar which can help me take some notes and organize my schedule so I can memorize many things.

“help me to take”中“to”可省略；“feature my schedule”用词不当，应改为“organize my schedule”；“so I can memorizing”应改为“so I can memorize”，动词原形。