记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答时语法和表达稍显不自然，且句子较长，建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，并使用更地道的表达方式。

示例: Yes, I was good at memorising things when I was younger. For instance, I performed well academically because of my strong memory. However, now that I'm in my 40s, I've noticed my memory isn't as sharp as before.

建议: 回答中有较多犹豫词和重复，表达不够流畅，建议减少填充词，使用连贯的句子，并补充细节使内容更具体。

示例: Yes, once I forgot my keys at home and got locked outside. I had to call a locksmith to help me open the door, and we waited for quite a long time.

建议: 回答内容较丰富，但表达略显重复和不够连贯，建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，并注意词汇准确性。

示例: I need to remember many things daily, such as shopping lists, paying electricity and car bills, and my son's hobby class schedule. For simple tasks, I remember them easily, but for others, I set reminders or make notes on my phone.

建议: 回答较简短且表达不够清晰，建议扩展内容，使用完整句子，并说明具体方法。

示例: I usually use the reminder app on my phone to remember important things. It sends me a notification on the day I need to do them, which helps me stay organized.

× Yeah, I think when I was younger, I'm good at memorizing things.

✓ Yeah, I think when I was younger, I was good at memorizing things.

这里描述过去的情况，应该使用过去时态。原句中使用了现在时态“I'm”，时态不一致。

× For example, I got good academic performance during my school days, which I think was benefited from a good memory.

✓ For example, I got good academic performance during my school days, which I think benefited from a good memory.

“was benefited”是被动语态，但这里应使用主动语态“benefited”，表示“得益于”。

× However, when it comes to my 40s, I just found my memory has been declining slightly.

✓ However, when it came to my 40s, I just found my memory had been declining slightly.

“when it comes to”应改为过去时“when it came to”，因为描述的是过去的情况；“has been declining”应改为过去完成时“had been declining”，保持时态一致。

× Yes, I once I forgot my key in my, I left my key at home, uh, and uh, I was locked outside Umm, and I have to call, umm, a guy to come to uh, open the door for me.

✓ Yes, I once forgot my key at home, and I was locked outside. I had to call a guy to come and open the door for me.

原句结构混乱，重复且断句不清晰。应简化句子，去除多余词汇，调整时态和句子结构，使表达更流畅。

× Uh, we wait for quite long.

✓ We waited for quite a long time.

描述过去发生的事情，动词应使用过去时“waited”；“quite long”应改为“quite a long time”更符合习惯表达。

× I need to remember a lot of things such as things I need to buy, charging my electricity, car and the timetable of my son's hobby classes.

✓ I need to remember a lot of things such as things I need to buy, charging my electricity bill, my car, and the timetable of my son's hobby classes.

“charging my electricity”表达不完整，应为“charging my electricity bill”；“car”前缺少所有格“my”，表示“我的车”。

× For some everyday things I can remember them easily without any tool.

✓ For some everyday things, I can remember them easily without any tools.

“any tool”应使用复数“any tools”，因为通常记忆工具不止一个。

× Well, for some others I usually remember them by setting reminders or making notes list note lists in my mobile.

✓ Well, for some others, I usually remember them by setting reminders or making note lists on my mobile.

“notes list note lists”重复且错误，应为“note lists”；“in my mobile”应改为“on my mobile”，符合习惯用法。

× I tend to put important things in the reminders of my mobile so a pop up, it will pop up on that day.

✓ I tend to put important things in the reminders on my mobile, so a pop-up will appear on that day.

“in the reminders of my mobile”应改为“in the reminders on my mobile”；“pop up”作为名词时应连写为“pop-up”；句子结构调整使表达更自然。