记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，句子结构较复杂且有重复词汇，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更自然的表达方式。

示例: I was good at memorising things when I was in junior high school, but as I have grown older, it has become harder to remember important information.

建议: 回答中语法错误较多，句子不够连贯，建议使用更清晰的句子结构，并适当使用连接词使表达更流畅。

示例: Yes, definitely. Just last month, I forgot to buy a ticket for a concert I had been looking forward to for two months, which was very disappointing.

建议: 回答内容不够具体，表达不流畅且有语法错误，建议明确列举具体事项，使用正确的时态和词汇，并减少口头语。

示例: I need to remember many things in my daily life, such as the knowledge from my subjects, the times to take my medicine, and when to have video calls with my parents.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和口头语，建议使用更准确的表达，避免重复，并使句子更连贯。

示例: The most convenient way for me to remember important things is to take notes on my phone, which then reminds me when I need to do something.

× When I was in junior high school, I could memorize my knowledge quickly, but after I grow up, with the the age increased, it's hard to memorize some important things.

✓ When I was in junior high school, I could memorize my knowledge quickly, but after I grew up, with the age increasing, it's hard to memorize some important things.

这里“grow up”应该用过去式“grew up”，因为前半句是过去时态，后半句描述的是过去发生的事情。动词时态不一致导致语法错误。建议根据时间顺序使用正确的时态。

× When I was in junior high school, I could memorize my knowledge quickly, but after I grow up, with the the age increased, it's hard to memorize some important things.

✓ When I was in junior high school, I could memorize my knowledge quickly, but after I grew up, with age increasing, it's hard to memorize some important things.

“the the age”中重复使用了定冠词“the”，且“age”前不一定需要定冠词。这里应去掉多余的“the”，使表达更自然。

× Just the last month I forgot to buy the ticket of a concert that I expected for two months is very disappointing.

✓ Just last month, I forgot to buy the ticket for a concert that I had been expecting for two months, which was very disappointing.

“Just the last month”应为“Just last month”，去掉多余的定冠词；“expected”应使用过去完成时“had been expecting”，表示在过去某一时间之前已经持续期待；句子结构不完整，需调整使其完整通顺。

× There was so much things and the knowledge of my subjects and, uh, the time that I need to take my medicines and the time that I need to have the video phone with my parents.

✓ There were so many things, the knowledge of my subjects, the time that I need to take my medicine, and the time that I need to have a video call with my parents.

“so much things”应为“so many things”，因为“things”是可数名词；“medicines”通常用单数“medicine”表示药物；“video phone”应改为“video call”更符合表达习惯。

× There was so much things and the knowledge of my subjects and, uh, the time that I need to take my medicines and the time that I need to have the video phone with my parents.

✓ There were so many things, the knowledge of my subjects, the time that I need to take my medicine, and the time that I need to have a video call with my parents.

“There was”用于单数，后面跟复数名词“things”应使用“There were”，保持主谓一致。

× with the the age increased, it's hard to memorize some important things.

✓ with age increasing, it's hard to memorize some important things.

“with the age increased”结构不正确，应使用现在分词“increasing”表示“随着年龄的增长”，使表达更自然。

× Just the last month I forgot to buy the ticket of a concert that I expected for two months is very disappointing.

✓ Just last month, I forgot to buy the ticket for a concert that I had been expecting for two months, which was very disappointing.

“ticket of a concert”应为“ticket for a concert”，介词“for”用于表示票的用途。

× The most convenient way to remember important things is to take down as notes in my phones and when I need to do something, the phone would uh. Help me to remember it.

✓ The most convenient way to remember important things is to take down notes on my phone, and when I need to do something, the phone helps me remember it.

“take down as notes in my phones”表达不自然，应为“take down notes on my phone”；“phones”应为单数“phone”；“would help me to remember it”改为一般现在时“helps me remember it”，符合习惯用法。