记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Tapai ko uttar ma thap spashta ra prabhavit bhanne tarikale topic sentence ra supporting details sametnu parcha. Tapai le 'But it depends' bhanera dherai choti dohrayeko cha, jasle uttar lai asamarth ra avashyakta bhanda dherai lamo banayeko cha. Tapai le linking words jastai 'however' ya 'for example' prayog garera uttar lai ramro tarikale jodne prayas garnu parcha.

示例: I'm not very good at memorising things generally; however, it depends on the topic. For example, if it's about football, which I love, I can remember details quite well.

建议: Tapai ko uttar ma grammar ra sentence structure ma sudhar garnu parcha. 'I do have forgotten' jasto galat prayog hataunu parcha ra sentence lai spashta ra sankshipta banau. Tapai le linking words jastai 'because' ya 'so' prayog garera uttar lai logical banauna saknu huncha.

示例: Yes, I recently forgot my ID card, which was essential for my health smoke test exam because I was in a hurry and misplaced it.

建议: Tapai ko uttar ma clarity ra coherence ko kami cha. Tapai le topic sentence sanga suru garera, supporting details ra linking words jastai 'because' ya 'therefore' prayog garera uttar lai ramro banau. Tapai le 'better person of me' jasto galat phrase ko sato 'a better person' bhanne prayog garnu parcha.

示例: I need to remember discipline and punctuality in my daily life because these qualities help me become a better person. However, I admit that I am sometimes careless, which I am trying to improve.

建议: Tapai ko uttar ma redundancy cha ra sentence haru spashta chaina. Tapai le clear topic sentence ra supporting details sanga uttar dinu parcha. Linking words jastai 'also' ya 'for instance' prayog garera uttar lai logical banaunu parcha. 'Dragging down' ko sato 'writing down' ya 'noting down' bhanne prayog garnu parcha.

示例: I remember important things by memorizing them, but if I find it difficult, I write them down in my mobile's notebook app. For instance, I make memos to remind myself of important tasks.

× I won't say I'm good at memorizing things.

✓ I wouldn't say I'm good at memorizing things.

The modal verb 'won't' indicates future refusal, which is incorrect here. The correct modal verb is 'wouldn't' to express a polite or hypothetical statement about ability.

× But it depends upon the topic whether I love it or not.

✓ But it depends on the topic whether I love it or not.

The correct preposition to use with 'depends' is 'on' rather than 'upon' in this context for natural English usage.

× Some sort of cases, if they are the things about football, I memorize it really well.

✓ In some cases, if the things are about football, I memorize them really well.

The original sentence has awkward structure and incorrect plural agreement. 'Some sort of cases' should be 'In some cases', and 'it' should be 'them' to agree with plural 'things'.

× But if the topic is about.

✓ But if the topic is about something else, I don't memorize it well.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a main clause. Adding a completion clarifies the meaning.

× Yes, I do have forgotten something important this recently.

✓ Yes, I have forgotten something important recently.

The phrase 'do have forgotten' is incorrect. The present perfect tense is formed with 'have forgotten'. Also, 'this recently' is incorrect; 'recently' alone suffices.

× Few days before I forgot my ID card which was essential for me to give my health smoke test exam.

✓ A few days ago, I forgot my ID card which was essential for me to take my health smoke test exam.

The phrase 'Few days before' is incorrect; 'A few days ago' is the correct expression. Also, 'to give my exam' should be 'to take my exam'.

× I was in such a hurry that I forgot where I keep my ID card.

✓ I was in such a hurry that I forgot where I kept my ID card.

Since the forgetting happened in the past, the verb 'keep' should be in past tense 'kept'.

× For me, I think discipline and punctuality should be remembered by me in order to be the better person of me.

✓ For me, I think discipline and punctuality should be remembered in order to be a better person.

The phrase 'remembered by me' is awkward and unnecessary. Also, 'the better person of me' is incorrect; 'a better person' is appropriate.

× I think I'm really a careless person.

✓ I think I'm really a careless person.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× Umm, it is my own bad habit, but I'm considering it as a real.

✓ Umm, it is my own bad habit, and I'm considering it a real problem.

The sentence is incomplete and awkward. Adding 'problem' completes the thought and 'considering it as' should be 'considering it'.

× I just remember important things by memorizing them.

✓ I just remember important things by memorizing them.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× If not, I remember this.

✓ If not, I use other methods to remember.

The sentence 'If not, I remember this.' is unclear and incomplete. Clarifying the alternative method improves understanding.

× I just remember things by memo and by just dragging down in my mobiles notebook.

✓ I just remember things by making memos and by writing them down in my mobile's notebook.

'By memo' is incorrect; 'by making memos' is correct. 'Dragging down' is incorrect; 'writing them down' is appropriate. Also, 'mobiles notebook' should be 'mobile's notebook'.

× Usually I just remember important things whenever I have to.

✓ Usually, I just remember important things whenever I have to.

Adding a comma after 'Usually' improves sentence clarity.