记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to give a clear and direct answer first, then add specific examples or reasons. Avoid filler words like 'umm' and incomplete sentences to sound more confident and natural.

示例: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things. For example, I usually remember important dates and appointments by repeating them several times. However, I sometimes find it harder to memorise long lists, so I use notes to help me.

建议: Make sure your answer is complete and clear. Avoid confusing phrases and incomplete thoughts. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and provide specific details about the event.

示例: Yes, I once forgot to bring some special jewelry that someone asked me to take to another country. It was very important to them because it was a family heirloom. Unfortunately, I realized my mistake only after arriving, which made me feel very sorry.

建议: Avoid repeating words and incomplete sentences. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details using linking words to improve coherence.

示例: In my daily life, I need to remember to take good care of my daughter. For instance, I sometimes forget to give her milk on time, so I write reminders and place them where I can easily see them.

建议: Avoid filler words like 'umm' and express your ideas clearly. Use linking words to connect your points and provide specific reasons why your method is effective.

示例: I remember important things by making a daily to-do list. This method helps me stay organized and ensures that I complete all my tasks without forgetting anything.

× I often find myself spending some time and memorizing things, but some things can be harder than others so I spend more time umm I.

✓ I often find myself spending some time memorizing things, but some things can be harder than others, so I spend more time, umm, I.

The phrase 'spending some time and memorizing things' is awkward because 'spending some time' should be directly followed by the gerund verb 'memorizing' without 'and'. This is a common structure where 'spend time' is followed by a verb in the -ing form. Also, adding commas improves clarity.

× Well, there was this one time when someone had asked me to get some of the jewelry to a different country.

✓ Well, there was this one time when someone asked me to get some jewelry to a different country.

The past perfect 'had asked' is unnecessary here because the simple past 'asked' suffices to indicate a past event. Also, 'some of the jewelry' is better as 'some jewelry' unless referring to specific jewelry previously mentioned.

× I was the only one travelling between 2:00 between those two particular countries.

✓ I was the only one travelling between those two particular countries at 2:00.

The preposition 'between' is repeated unnecessarily. The time '2:00' should be introduced with 'at' and placed appropriately in the sentence for clarity.

× But I happen to fool.

✓ But I happened to make a mistake.

The phrase 'I happen to fool' is ungrammatical and unclear. The intended meaning is likely that the speaker made a mistake, so 'I happened to make a mistake' is a clearer and grammatically correct expression.

× I often forget to give her her milk on time, so I try to make a note of that and stick it somewhere where I can see. See.

✓ I often forget to give her milk on time, so I try to make a note of that and stick it somewhere where I can see it.

The repetition 'her her milk' is redundant; 'her milk' suffices. Also, the pronoun 'it' is needed after 'see' to complete the sentence properly.