记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains hesitations and grammatical errors. To improve, try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, avoid filler words like 'uh', and provide a specific example with correct grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: I'm not very good at memorising things because I often struggle to recall exact details. For example, when studying history, I find it difficult to remember the correct order of events in a timeline.

建议: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and lacks coherence. To improve, use the correct verb tenses, avoid repetition, and organize your answer logically with linking words. Provide a clear sequence of events to make your story easier to follow.

示例: Yes, I once forgot the visa application deadline. After a few days, I realized my mistake and immediately called the visa centre to cancel the application.

建议: Your answer is understandable but contains some awkward phrasing and lacks linking words. To improve, use clearer sentence structures, avoid repetition, and connect your ideas with linking words for better coherence.

示例: I need to remember to bring my key every day because I use it to unlock both my apartment door and the elevator. If I forget it, I have to ask the building manager for help.

建议: Your answer has many hesitations and unclear phrases. To improve, speak more fluently, avoid filler words, and organize your answer with clear linking words. Provide a specific example to illustrate your method.

示例: I usually set reminders on my phone to remember important tasks. For instance, I set an alert a day before the rent payment is due so I don't forget to pay on time.

× I'm not very good at memorising because it's quite hard for me to remember the thing I exactly need to do.

✓ I'm not very good at memorising because it's quite hard for me to remember exactly the things I need to do.

The phrase 'the thing I exactly need to do' is awkward and incorrect. 'Thing' should be plural 'things' because usually multiple tasks are involved, and 'exactly' should come before 'the things' to modify it properly. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Just like the, uh, historical wealth study, I feel hard to, uh, remember the timeline order in that thing happened.

✓ Just like the historical wealth study, I find it hard to remember the timeline order of what happened there.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and incorrect structure. 'I feel hard to remember' is incorrect; it should be 'I find it hard to remember.' Also, 'in that thing happened' is unclear and ungrammatical; it should be 'of what happened there' to clarify the timeline being referred to.

× I used to forgot the visa application date.

✓ I used to forget the visa application date.

After 'used to,' the base form of the verb should be used, not the past tense. 'Forgot' is past tense, but 'used to' already indicates past habitual action, so the verb should be 'forget.'

× I just forgot that and after a few days later and then I just realised that I make a mistake and immediately to call the visa centre to cancel it.

✓ I just forgot that, and after a few days, I realised that I had made a mistake and immediately called the visa centre to cancel it.

The sentence is run-on and has tense and structure errors. 'After a few days later' is redundant; use 'after a few days.' 'I make a mistake' should be past perfect 'I had made a mistake' to show the sequence of events. 'Immediately to call' is incorrect; it should be 'immediately called.' Proper punctuation and conjunctions improve clarity.

× I need to bring my key, just remember bring it every day because I need to use that key to unlock the door.

✓ I need to bring my key; I just remember to bring it every day because I need to use that key to unlock the door.

The phrase 'just remember bring it' is missing the preposition 'to' before 'bring.' Also, the sentence is a run-on and needs proper punctuation or conjunctions. Adding 'to' and separating clauses improves grammatical correctness.

× Also the evaluator and the front door also need to use the key to access.

✓ Also, the elevator and the front door need the key to be accessed.

The word 'evaluator' is incorrect; it should be 'elevator.' The phrase 'need to use the key to access' is awkward; better phrased as 'need the key to be accessed.' This clarifies that the key is required for access.

× If I didn't bring I have to find the building manager to help me.

✓ If I don't bring it, I have to find the building manager to help me.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since this is a habitual action, present tense 'don't bring' is appropriate. Also, 'bring' needs an object 'it' referring to the key. Adding a comma improves readability.

× I will set a reminder, uh, by using my phone, so it will send me a reminder before that thing happen so that I can note, uh, second day I need to uh, uh, tomorrow I need to do that thing just like the rents payment.

✓ I will set a reminder by using my phone, so it will send me a reminder before that thing happens, so that I can note that the next day I need to do that thing, like the rent payment.

The verb 'happen' should be in the third person singular present tense 'happens' to agree with 'that thing.' The phrase 'second day I need to uh, uh, tomorrow' is unclear and should be rephrased as 'the next day I need to do that thing.' Also, 'rents payment' should be 'rent payment.' These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.