记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and grammatical: begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler sounds (uh, um), correct verb forms and word choice, and limit to 3–4 sentences. Add a brief reason and one specific example using linking words (for example, because, so).

示例: I am not very good at memorising things at the moment because I feel mentally foggy after having a baby. As a result, I often forget small items, for example my phone charger or my house keys. This makes everyday tasks more difficult, so I try to use lists to help me remember.

建议: Start with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then give one clear, specific example with linking words. Correct grammar (singular/plural agreements) and reduce hesitations. State consequence briefly.

示例: Yes. As a school counselor, my mobile phone is vital for arranging appointments and staying in touch with students. Once I forgot my phone at home and missed an appointment, which caused inconvenience for both the student and me.

建议: Provide a clear topic sentence naming several important items to remember, use linking words, avoid repetition and fillers, and use correct verb forms. Limit to 2–3 sentences and give one brief reason.

示例: The most important thing I need to remember every day is my mobile phone, because it helps me contact students and manage appointments. I also try to remember my keys and any documents for meetings to avoid problems during work.

建议: Answer directly with a topic sentence stating your main method, then give specific details and an example using linking words. Use correct tense and avoid filler words. Mention one or two concrete techniques (alarms, lists, reminders).

示例: I usually use my phone to remember important things: I put appointments and events in my calendar and set alarms. For example, I create reminders for counselling sessions and awareness classes so I don't miss them.

× I am not good at memorizing things at this moment because after giving birth to baby, I feel foggy affecting my memory and uh, it caused some difficulty in my daily life.

✓ I am not good at memorizing things at the moment because after giving birth to my baby, I feel foggy and it is affecting my memory, which causes some difficulty in my daily life.

Mix of present and past tenses and missing possessive. Use present continuous 'am not good' and 'is affecting' for current state; use 'at the moment' (not 'at this moment') and 'my baby' (possessive). Replace 'it caused' (past) with 'which causes' to match present situation.

× For example, I will forgot to take my phone charger with me and oftenly I will uh, forget to take uh, door key, home key.

✓ For example, I forget to take my phone charger with me, and I often forget to take my door keys or house key.

Incorrect use of 'will forgot' (mix of future and past). Use simple present 'forget' to describe habitual actions. 'Oftenly' is incorrect; use 'often'. Use plural 'door keys' or 'house keys' depending on context and correct word order.

× Certainly as a school counselor, mobile phone play a significant role in my work life for connecting with children who need support and counseling and also for individual counseling session appointment booking.

✓ Certainly, as a school counselor, my mobile phone plays a significant role in my work life for connecting with children who need support and counseling and for booking individual counseling session appointments.

Missing possessive 'my' and singular subject 'mobile phone' requires verb 'plays' (third person singular). Also improve noun phrases: 'booking individual counseling session appointments' is clearer.

× Once I forgot my phone at home and that goes, uh, some appointment miss.

✓ Once I forgot my phone at home and I missed some appointments.

Unclear phrasing 'that goes' and 'some appointment miss'—use past simple 'forgot' and 'missed' and plural 'appointments' to state completed past events clearly.

× As I mentioned earlier about my mobile phone, it's, uh, play significant role in my work life, uh, this, umm, keeping gadget with me, help to connect with people who need support and individual counseling and important calls.

✓ As I mentioned earlier about my mobile phone, it plays a significant role in my work life; keeping the gadget with me helps me connect with people who need support, individual counseling, and important calls.

Use 'plays' (third person singular) and 'helps' to agree with singular subject. Add 'the' before 'gadget' and restructure sentence for clarity and parallelism ('helps me connect with...').

× Uh, so I need to, uh, remember, uh, mobile phone in my daily life.

✓ So I need to remember my mobile phone in my daily life.

Missing possessive 'my' and unnecessary fillers removed. Use simple present 'need' to express habitual necessity.

× Remembering important things play a crucial role in our life, uh, because as a counselor, it's very important.

✓ Remembering important things plays a crucial role in our lives because, as a counselor, it is very important.

Subject 'Remembering important things' is singular nominal phrase, so use 'plays'. Use plural 'lives' for general statement about people and avoid contractions and fillers for clarity.

× And I usually, uh, used my mobile phone to, uh, write down the, uh, daily schedule, uh, for example, any appointments or any awareness classes or events, It'll help me to remember.

✓ And I usually use my mobile phone to write down my daily schedule, for example any appointments, awareness classes, or events; it helps me remember.

'Usually used' incorrectly mixes time; use present 'use' for habitual action. Use 'it helps' (present) to match. Remove extra articles and fillers and make sentence concise.