记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答要更直接并避免重复，同时注意语法和流利度。可以用一到两句话给出观点，再用一两个具体例子或细节支持。注意避免多余填充词（如 umm, uh）并修正语法错误（例如 "it's brings" 改为 "it brings"）。尝试使用连接词使句子更连贯，例如 "because", "so", "for example"。

示例: I'm not very good at memorising things because I have poor short-term retention. For example, I often forget where I put my keys, which causes delays when I need to leave the house.

建议: 回答总体清晰，但句子可更简洁并注意时态与语法（如 "it's eventually made" 应为 "it eventually made me"）。可先概述事件，然后说明后果与感受，使用连接词如 "so" 或 "as a result"。避免冗长的重复表达。

示例: Yes. Last semester I forgot the exact date of my final exam, so I missed it and had to retake the course. As a result, I lost some marks that were important to my GPA.

建议: 回答思路正确，但用词和表达可以更自然、具体。把泛泛的词替换为更贴切的词（如 "deadlines for assignments" 而不是 "deadlines of assignment"），并可举一两个具体事项来丰富内容。保持两到三句以内，逻辑清晰。

示例: As a university student I need to remember deadlines for assignments and exam dates. I also try to remember appointment times and group meeting schedules because missing them can affect my grades and teamwork.

建议: 方法描述明确但表达不够地道，有语法和用词问题（例如 "stick it on my words" 应为 "stick it on my wardrobe/desk"）。建议先概述方法，再给具体工具和举例，使用连接词如 "for example" 或 "also"。尽量把句子缩短以提高流利度。

示例: I usually save important dates and reminders on my phone calendar. For example, I set notifications for exam dates and use sticky notes on my desk to keep important guidelines visible.

× No, I'm not really good at memorizing because I don't have a good retention.

✓ No, I'm not really good at memorizing because I don't have good retention.

句中“a good retention”使用了不恰当的冠词和形容词搭配。英语中“retention”作为不可数名词通常不与不定冠词“a”连用，且更自然的表达是去掉“a”。建议将冠词去掉："good retention"。

× Umm, for example, I often forget, uh, where I put my things and it's brings me a lot of trouble in my life.

✓ For example, I often forget where I put my things and it brings me a lot of trouble in my life.

句子里“it's brings”动词形式错误并且插入词杂乱。应为主语+动词形式“it brings”。此外口语填充词如“Umm, uh”在书面或正式回答中应删去或放在句首作为停顿词。本句将插入词去掉并修正动词形式。建议注意动词与主语的一致性并避免多余填充词。

× It can cause a lot of problems when I need them while I can find them.

✓ It can cause a lot of problems when I need them but can't find them.

原句逻辑混乱，用“while I can find them”与上下文矛盾。应该表示“当我需要它们却找不到时”，用对比连词but并将动词改为否定形式can't find。建议理清因果/对比关系，选择合适的连词并保持时态一致。

× So it's really hard, difficult to recall.

✓ So it's really hard to recall.

句中“hard, difficult”重复表达相同意思且标点不当。应选择其中一个形容词。此处用“really hard”即可。建议避免重复近义词，保持简洁。

× Yes I have, last semester I forgot the exact date of my final exam which made me miss it and have to retake that.

✓ Yes, I have. Last semester I forgot the exact date of my final exam, which made me miss it and have to retake it.

句中需加标点分隔独立句，并将指代“that”改为更自然的“it”。时态“forgot... made me miss”是正确的，但句子需要更清晰的连贯性。建议使用逗号连接定语从句并确保代词一致。

× I think that was very important because it's eventually made me lose some scores that I really valued.

✓ I think that was very important because it eventually made me lose some marks that I really valued.

原句混合了现在时“it's”与过去时“made”，造成时态不一致。应使用过去时“it eventually made”。另外“scores”在英式英语常用“marks”。建议保持时态一致，避免把“it”与“made”之间插入现在时助动词。

× As a university student, I need to remember dates such as the deadlines of assignment and the date of the examination, because those numbers are very crucial for me and they are relevant to my overall grades.

✓ As a university student, I need to remember dates such as assignment deadlines and examination dates, because those dates are crucial for me and are relevant to my overall grades.

“the deadlines of assignment”结构不自然，名词复数及搭配需调整为“assignment deadlines”；“the date of the examination”改为“examination dates”与前文保持一致。“numbers”应改为“dates”。建议使用固定搭配复数形式并保持名词一致性。

× I usually save important things in my phone.

✓ I usually save important information on my phone.

原句“save important things in my phone”中“things”太笼统，“in my phone”介词用法和名词搭配不够地道。更自然的表达是“save important information on my phone”。建议使用更准确的名词并用“on”表示设备上存储。

× For example, I would like to record those special important days on my phone calendar and sometimes I also use stickers.

✓ For example, I record important dates on my phone calendar, and sometimes I also use sticky notes.

“would like to record”表示愿望，与一般习惯性动作时态不符，改为一般现在时“record”。“special important days”冗余，简化为“important dates”。“stickers”可引起歧义，改为更自然的“sticky notes”。建议用现在时描述习惯，用准确词汇。

× I would like to use a paper to make a note about those important things such as guidelines of exam and stick it on my words.

✓ I also like to write notes on paper about important things, such as exam guidelines, and stick them on my wardrobe.

原句结构混乱：“use a paper to make a note”不地道，改为“write notes on paper”；“guidelines of exam”应为“exam guidelines”；“stick it on my words”应为“stick them on my wardrobe”（推测原意为衣柜或墙）。此外代词与数一致需调整。建议重组句子，使用自然搭配并确保代词一致。