记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise, natural and accurate. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g. “Not really, I’m not good at memorising things.”), avoid unclear or incorrect words (e.g. “double me as a fish”, “inhabit”), and limit to 2–4 sentences. Use a linking phrase to give a brief specific example.

示例: Not really — I’m not very good at memorising things. For example, my friends jokingly call me a “fish” because I often forget simple plans or daily routines. As a result, they sometimes have to remind me about weekend arrangements.

建议: Organise the answer chronologically and remove redundant words. Use clear linking words (e.g. “because”, “so”) and correct collocations (“forgot to pay the registration fee”, “reminded by the dean”). Keep it to 3–4 sentences and end with the result or lesson learned.

示例: Yes — once in senior high I forgot to pay the registration fee for an important English oral test required for language majors. Because of that I nearly missed the exam, but the dean reminded me and I was able to register in time. I learned to check deadlines more carefully after that.

建议: Provide a clear topic sentence and group related items; use precise phrasing (e.g. “I need to remember essentials like…”) and formal contractions (“I've got to” instead of “I got to”). Use linking words like “for example” and keep sentences concise.

示例: I need to remember a few everyday essentials. For example, I always make sure I have my keys, and I charge my phone and iPad before going out. I also try to bring dental floss to maintain my oral hygiene.

建议: Use clearer verb phrases and reduce hesitation. Say directly how you record and reinforce reminders (e.g. “I write them in my notes app and set alarms”). Mention specific tools and routine (e.g. calendar alerts, repeated reminders) to show control and organisation.

示例: Usually I write important dates in my notes app and set calendar reminders with alarms. For very crucial events, like exam dates or deadlines, I also ask family or friends to remind me a few days beforehand to be safe.

× My friends even double me as a fish cause according to some common saying, a fish only has a memory of seven seconds.

✓ My friends even call me a fish because, according to a common saying, a fish only has a memory of seven seconds.

The original uses 'double me as a fish' which is incorrect collocation; 'call me a fish' or 'tease me as a fish' is correct. Also 'cause' should be the conjunction 'because' in formal speech, and 'some common saying' is better as 'a common saying'. Use of prepositions and verbs that collocate correctly improves clarity.

× And they're often ****** *** about how many times I've forgotten their inhabit, daily routines and even on our plans on weekends.

✓ And they're often angry about how many times I've forgotten their habits, daily routines and even our weekend plans.

The original sentence has multiple errors: '****** ***' seems to be placeholder for an adjective; 'angry' fits. 'Forgotten their inhabit' is incorrect: 'inhabit' is a verb/noun unrelated to habits; the correct noun is 'habits'. 'Even on our plans on weekends' is awkward — use 'our weekend plans'. These are incorrect preposition and word choice issues and sentence structure fixes.

× I still remember that when I was in Senior High School, there was a really important English oral test which had to be taken if you wanted to major in any kind of languages in college.

✓ I still remember that when I was in senior high school, there was a really important English oral test that had to be taken if you wanted to major in any kind of language in college.

Use of 'which had to be taken' is acceptable but 'that had to be taken' is more natural. 'Senior High School' should be lowercased as 'senior high school'. 'Any kind of languages' is incorrect plural after 'kind of' — use the singular 'language'. This corrects tense/number and article usage.

× And I was the only one that forgot to pay the registration fee in the school.

✓ And I was the only one who forgot to pay the registration fee at the school.

'The only one that forgot' is grammatical but 'who' is preferred for people. 'In the school' is less natural than 'at the school'. This fixes pronoun choice and preposition for more natural usage.

× But finally I finished it under after being reminded by the Dean.

✓ But finally I completed it after being reminded by the dean.

'Finished it under after' is ungrammatical: remove 'under'. Use 'completed' or 'finished' followed by 'after being reminded'. 'Dean' should be lowercase unless a specific title is intended. This fixes sentence structure and word form.

× For example, I got to bring my key with me after leaving the dormitory.

✓ For example, I have to bring my key with me when leaving the dormitory.

'I got to' is informal and can mean 'I had the opportunity to' — incorrect here. Use 'I have to' or 'I must'. 'After leaving' is acceptable but 'when leaving' is more natural for habitual requirement. This corrects verb usage and preposition/time expression.

× It's also really important to ensure that my phone and iPad are full of battery if I'm going out.

✓ It's also really important to ensure that my phone and iPad have full batteries if I'm going out.

'Are full of battery' is unnatural; use 'have full batteries' or 'are fully charged'. 'Phone and iPad' require plural 'batteries' and diction change to be idiomatic.

× Besides, I gotta remember to bring my dental floss with me for the hygiene of my teeth.

✓ Besides, I have to remember to bring my dental floss for my dental hygiene.

'Gotta' is informal; use 'have to' or 'must'. 'Bring my dental floss with me for the hygiene of my teeth' is wordy — 'for my dental hygiene' is concise and natural. This corrects informal pronoun/colloquial usage and word choice.

× While in most cases I just tap them down in my memo, but if it's something extremely important like on the date of my examination or the deadline of my final assets, then I'll probably, umm, ask my friends and parents to remind me of them every few days.

✓ In most cases I just write them down in my memo, but if it's something extremely important, like the date of my examination or the deadline of my final assessments, then I'll probably ask my friends and parents to remind me every few days.

'While in most cases' + 'but' is redundant; use 'In most cases' or remove 'but'. 'Tap them down' is incorrect — 'write them down' is correct. 'On the date of' should be 'the date of'. 'Final assets' is wrong word choice; likely 'final assessments' or 'final assignments'. Remove filler 'umm' and unnecessary 'of them' after 'remind me'. This fixes verb+ing, word choice, and sentence structure issues.