记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting reasons with linking words. Reduce hesitations and repetitions and correct basic grammar (e.g. 'I find it difficult to memorise' not 'I I feel difficult to memorise'). Keep answers to no more than 4–5 sentences.

示例: Not really — I find it difficult to memorise study materials because I often get distracted. However, I’m quite good at remembering songs and movie plots because I enjoy them and listen to or rewatch them often.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence, then provide one specific example with brief details and a result. Use linking words such as 'for example' and avoid fillers like 'uh'. Correct verb forms (e.g. 'I forgot' not 'I forget').

示例: Yes, I have. For example, once I forgot to take my wallet when I left the market and I couldn’t pay for my groceries, which was very embarrassing and delayed me.

建议: Begin with a concise topic sentence naming the key things you must remember. Use linking words ('first', 'also') and give one short reason or consequence for each. Fix grammar (e.g. 'when I go to the office' and avoid repeating words). Keep it under 4 sentences.

示例: I need to remember a few basic things every day. First, I always check that the door is locked when I leave the house. Also, I make sure I have my phone and purse with me, otherwise I can’t work or pay for things.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence describing your method, then give spec

× Not really because I I feel difficult to memorise any lessons or study and uh, sometimes I also forget about some list.

✓ Not really because I find it difficult to memorise any lessons or study, and sometimes I also forget some things on my list.

The student used 'I feel difficult' which is incorrect; English uses 'find it difficult' to express difficulty with an activity. Also 'forget about some list' is unnatural; use 'forget some things on my list' or 'forget items on my list'. Use of simple present tense 'find' matches the habitual meaning. Suggestion: Use 'I find it difficult to [verb]' for general difficulty and 'forget some things on my list' for clarity.

× But if it is the fact of memorizing the songs or movies then I'm very good at it because I like the fact of the movies and songs.

✓ But if it is about memorizing songs or movie lines, then I'm very good at it because I like movies and songs.

Phrases like 'the fact of memorizing' and 'like the fact of the movies' are unidiomatic. Use 'about' to introduce the topic and 'memorizing songs or movie lines' is clearer. Keep present continuous 'I'm' for ability in general contexts. Remove unnecessary 'the fact of'. Suggestion: Use concise, natural phrases such as 'about memorizing' and 'I like movies and songs'.

× Yes, it happened to me several times.

✓ Yes, it has happened to me several times.

When referring to repeated experiences up to the present, the present perfect ('has happened') is more appropriate than simple past ('happened'). This ties the past events to the present. Suggestion: Use present perfect for life experiences: 'has happened to me several times'.

× Sometimes I forget my purse, sometimes I forget my phone.

✓ Sometimes I forget my purse; sometimes I forget my phone.

These sentences are grammatically acceptable but benefit from punctuation (semicolon) for fluency. The simple present 'forget' is correct for habitual actions. Suggestion: Combine related habitual actions with better punctuation for natural flow.

× One time I, uh, forget some money in the market and it hampers me a lot.

✓ One time I forgot some money at the market and it caused me a lot of trouble.

The event is a single past incident, so simple past 'forgot' is required instead of present 'forget'. Use 'at the market' (or 'in the market' regionally) and 'caused me a lot of trouble' is a natural way to express 'it hampers me a lot'. Suggestion: Use past tense for completed past events and choose idiomatic verbs like 'forgot' and 'caused'.

× The main thing I need to remember that when I'm going office that I, I have to lock my door then, uh, if, if I go somewhere, the phone is with me or not.

✓ The main things I need to remember are that when I'm going to the office I have to lock my door, and if I go somewhere I need to check whether I have my phone with me.

Several issues: missing 'to' in 'going to the office'; the clause requires a clear structure: 'The main things I need to remember are that...' so use plural 'things' and verb 'are'. 'Have to' expresses obligation in present/future contexts. Use 'check whether I have my phone with me' for clarity. Suggestion: Start with 'The main things I need to remember are that...' and use 'going to the office' and 'check whether I have my phone'.

× And another thing I, I always forget that I forget my purse at home.

✓ Another thing is that I always forget my purse at home.

The original is repetitive ('I always forget that I forget') and awkward. Use 'Another thing is that I always forget my purse at home' to state the habitual problem in simple present. Suggestion: Avoid repetition and use a simple clause: 'I always forget my purse at home'.

× So before going out from the home.

✓ So I check these things before leaving home.

The original fragment 'So before going out from the home' is incomplete and unnatural. 'Leaving home' is the idiomatic phrase and adding a subject and verb ('I check these things') completes the sentence. Suggestion: Use complete sentences with subject and verb, and prefer 'leave home' to 'go out from the home'.

× I maintain some notes to remembering thing which which I stick on my fridge.

✓ I keep some notes to remember things, which I stick on my fridge.

'Maintain some notes to remembering' incorrectly uses 'to' with a gerund; after 'to' an infinitive is expected or restructure to 'to remember' or 'for remembering'. 'Maintain' is less natural than 'keep' here. Also correct 'thing' to plural 'things' and remove duplicate 'which'. Suggestion: Use 'keep notes to remember things' or 'notes that help me remember things' and ensure correct verb forms.

× So uh, the fridge is in front of my bedroom, so whenever I go out from the room I can see the notes and I can see what I have to do in that day.

✓ The fridge is in front of my bedroom, so whenever I leave the room I can see the notes and see what I have to do that day.

Use 'leave the room' rather than 'go out from the room'. Also 'what I have to do in that day' is unnatural; use 'that day' or 'that day' without 'in'. Remove redundant 'I can' for conciseness. Suggestion: Use natural prepositions: 'leave the room' and 'that day'.

× After that I start my morning.

✓ After that I start my morning routine.

'Start my morning' is awkward and unclear; 'start my morning routine' is idiomatic. Present simple 'start' is acceptable for habitual actions. Suggestion: Use 'morning routine' to indicate daily activities and keep present simple for habitual actions.