记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: ปรับโครงสร้างให้ชัดเจนขึ้น โดยเริ่มด้วยประโยคหัวข้อสั้นๆ ตอบตรงคำถาม แล้วใช้รายละเอียดสั้นๆ ไม่เกิน 3 ประโยคเสริมความชัดเจน ควรแก้ไขไวยากรณ์เล็กน้อย (เช่น 'forgot' → 'forget') และลดคำซ้ำเพื่อให้เป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น

示例: Yes, I’m generally good at memorising things. For example, I can still recall lessons from months ago and funny remarks my friends made. However, I sometimes forget where I put small items, so I use designated spots for them.

建议: ปรับให้ประโยคเล่าเหตุการณ์มีความลื่นไหลและถูกไวยากรณ์ ใช้ linking words เพื่อเชื่อมเหตุการณ์อย่างเป็นระบบ และลดคำฟุ่มเฟือย ควรระบุผลลัพธ์อย่างชัดเจน (what happened next)

示例: Yes, once I missed an important notice. Our school was closed for junior exams, but I didn’t know and still went in. When I found out, I immediately took a bus home, which was inconvenient and a bit embarrassing.

建议: ควรเริ่มด้วยประโยคตอบตรงคำถาม แล้วให้ตัวอย่างที่เป็นรูปธรรมและเชื่อมด้วยคำเชื่อม เช่น 'for example' หรือ 'so' แก้ tense ให้ถูกต้อง (had → have) และลดความยาวประโยคให้อ่านง่าย

示例: I need to remember several daily tasks, especially homework deadlines and guitar practice. For example, I set timers on my phone and ask my parents or friends to remind me, which helps me stay on track.

建议: แก้ไวยากรณ์และโครงสร้างประโยคให้เป็นธรรมชาติ เช่น 'by putting a to-do list' ใช้ linking words เพื่ออธิบายขั้นตอนและผลลัพธ์ให้ชัดเจน และหลีกเลี่ยงการพูดซ้ำคำว่า 'important things'

示例: I remember important things by using a to-do list app on my phone and setting reminders. I also ask friends or family to prompt me, which ensures I start tasks on time.

× I would say I'm pretty good at memorizing things like lessons at school from months ago or maybe something funny that my friends said, but sometimes I also forgot where I place my belongings.

✓ I would say I'm pretty good at memorizing things, like lessons from months ago or something funny that my friends said, but sometimes I also forget where I put my belongings.

Uses present/past tense inconsistently. 'forgot' and 'place' are incorrect for habitual or general present ability; use simple present 'forget' and past/simple form 'put'. Also 'place my belongings' is unnatural; use 'put my belongings'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent for general statements by using present simple; use common collocations (forget where I put something).

× I have forgotten something very important before.

✓ I have forgotten something very important before.

This sentence is correct. Present perfect 'have forgotten' correctly indicates an experience at an unspecified time in the past, so no change needed.

× There's this one time I forgot that our school closed because our juniors were supposed to have tests on that day.

✓ There was one time I forgot that our school was closed because our juniors were supposed to have tests that day.

Mix of tenses and phrasing error: 'There's this one time' (there is) is present while the event is past; change to past 'There was one time'. 'School closed' needs past continuous/state 'was closed'. 'On that day' can be 'that day' for reported past. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently for recounting past events.

× So I came to school unknown that I don't have to come and so I just have to take a bus home.

✓ So I came to school without knowing that I didn't have to come, and then I had to take a bus home.

Multiple problems: 'unknown that' is incorrect—use 'without knowing that'. Mix of present 'don't have' with past narrative—change to past 'didn't have'. 'Just have to take a bus home' should be past 'had to take a bus home'. Suggestion: maintain past tense and use correct idiom 'without knowing'.

× Sometimes I need a reminder of when to do my homework that is due tomorrow or when to practice my guitar because I am a little bit forgetful and so I put a timer on my phone.

✓ Sometimes I need a reminder about when to do my homework that is due tomorrow or when to practice my guitar because I am a little forgetful, so I set a timer on my phone.

Use of 'of when to do' is less natural than 'about when to do'. 'A little bit forgetful' is acceptable but 'a little forgetful' is more natural. 'Put a timer' is a literal calque; 'set a timer' is correct collocation. Suggestion: use natural prepositions and collocations and keep concise phrasing.

× Or maybe I had my friends or parents to warn me.

✓ Or maybe I ask my friends or parents to remind me.

Original mixes tenses and incorrect verb form 'had ... to warn me' is awkward. For general present habit use present simple 'ask ... to remind me'. Also 'warn me' is wrong verb; 'remind me' is appropriate. Suggestion: use correct verb for the intended meaning and present simple for habitual actions.

× I remember important things by put A to do list on my phone so I know when I should do something and also I tell other people to remind me of when I should start doing important things.

✓ I remember important things by putting a to-do list on my phone, so I know when I should do something, and I also ask other people to remind me when I should start doing important things.

After 'by' use the -ing form 'putting' not base form 'put'. 'A to do list' should be 'a to-do list'. 'Tell other people to remind me of when' is awkward; use 'ask other people to remind me when'. Maintain parallel structure and correct verb forms. Suggestion: use gerund after 'by' and natural collocations ('to-do list', 'ask someone to remind me').