记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (memorize → memorising/things) and avoid unnecessary info. Also keep to under five sentences.

示例: Not really. I find it hard to memorise long lists of words, even though my course requires it, so my grades sometimes slipped. To cope, I focus on learning words in context and use spaced repetition apps, which has helped me improve.

建议: Answer directly and clearly. Use correct tense and clearer expressions (forgot → forgot my sister's birthday; 'over the rooftop' unclear). Limit to one main incident, describe consequences briefly and a remedy. Use linking words like because or so. Keep sentences short and precise.

示例: Yes. Once I forgot my sister's birthday, which upset her because she had planned a small celebration. To make up for it, I apologised and bought her favourite cake and candies, and since then I set reminders to avoid repeating it.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence, then provide specific, coherent examples and a linking phrase. Remove casual phrases like 'Hilarious, right?' which reduce formality. Explain briefly why these things matter and one consequence if forgotten.

示例: I need to remember daily routines such as attending classes, doing chores, and eating regular meals because they affect my health and studies. For example, skipping meals makes me tired and missing classes harms my learning, so I use alarms to keep on track.

建议: Good basic strategy—state it clearly then give one or two specific methods and a brief reason why they work. Use correct, natural phrasing (write it down, put it on my phone, carry it with me). Keep within 2–3 sentences and use linking words like so or therefore.

示例: I usually write important tasks down in a notebook or set reminders on my phone, so I have them with me all day. This helps because seeing the notes or alarms prompts me to act and prevents me from forgetting important tasks.

× I am not really good at memorizing thing.

✓ I am not really good at memorizing things.

The noun 'thing' should be plural 'things' because it refers generally to multiple items or concepts to be memorized. Use plural after general statements or uncountable contexts where plurality is implied.

× Although I am an English gifted student, my field would require students to memorize a lot of new words and vocabulary but I was never good at it.

✓ Although I am a gifted English student, my field requires students to memorize a lot of new words and vocabulary, but I have never been good at it.

Use 'a gifted English student' for correct adjective order and article. Use simple present 'requires' to state a general fact about the field. Use present perfect 'have never been' to describe a continuing state up to the present.

× So my grades will slip and I was not top of the class but I'm OK.

✓ So my grades would slip and I was not top of the class, but I was OK.

The sentence describes past habitual/resulting actions, so use past tense 'would slip' and 'was OK' consistently rather than future 'will slip' and present 'I'm'. Maintain consistent past narration.

× Yes sometimes I forgot my sister birthday and she was over the rooftop for me so as a way to make up for her I would buy a lot of candies and her favorite food which eventually forgive me but that's the worst tab, I forgot something important.

✓ Yes, sometimes I forgot my sister's birthday and she was upset with me, so to make it up to her I would buy a lot of candy and her favorite food, which eventually forgave me. That was the worst time I forgot something important.

Use possessive 'sister's birthday'. 'Was over the rooftop' is incorrect; use 'was upset with me'. 'Make it up to her' is the correct phrase. 'Candy' is uncountable, not 'candies'. Use past tense 'forgave me' and rephrase 'worst tab' to 'worst time' for clarity. Ensure past tense consistency.

× What do you need to remember in your daily life? Student: I need to remember to do chores, to do small tasks, to go to school, to eat, to drink those.

✓ I need to remember to do chores, to do small tasks, to go to school, to eat, and to drink.

Remove 'those' which is unnecessary and awkward. Keep parallel infinitive forms ('to do', 'to go', 'to eat', 'to drink') for correct sentence structure. No -ing change needed here but maintain parallelism.

× And sometimes I forgot to do one of the aforementioned activities, which didn't result in a good consequence.

✓ And sometimes I forgot to do one of the aforementioned activities, which did not have good consequences.

'Didn't result in a good consequence' is unnatural; use 'did not have good consequences' or 'had negative consequences'. Maintain past tense 'forgot' with past result 'did not have'.

× I would write it all down to a note, or I would note it on my phone, but in a nutshell, I would note it on something as I will take with me the whole day and look at it whenever I need a reminder of my forgotten task.

✓ I would write it all down on a note or put it on my phone. In short, I would write it on something I would take with me all day and look at whenever I needed a reminder of a task I had forgotten.

Use correct preposition 'on a note' not 'to a note'. Use parallel verb forms 'write... or put'. Replace 'in a nutshell' with 'In short' for clarity. Use 'I would take' and 'all day' (not 'the whole day') and past conditional 'needed' and 'had forgotten' for consistent tense. Also correct word order and article usage ('a task').