记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Good direct answer and relevant details. To improve, make the response more concise and natural (max 5 sentences), add a clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details, and use linking words for coherence (e.g., “because,” “so,” “therefore”). Also avoid slightly awkward phrasing like “made out plans” — say “made plans” or “planned steps.”

示例: I’m not very good at memorising things because I’m easily distracted, which has sometimes affected my academic performance. Therefore, I’ve made a few specific plans: I now study in short focused sessions and use flashcards to revise key points. These changes have already helped me remember information better.

建议: You answered directly and gave a personal example, which is good. To improve, make the story more specific (when/how it happened), add one linking word to show consequence, and avoid repetition like “forgot about something.” Keep it natural and succinct (max 5 sentences).

示例: Yes, once I forgot my friend’s graduation last year because I was overwhelmed with exams, and that made her very upset. As a result, I began keeping a shared calendar and setting multiple reminders so I would not miss important events again.

建议: The content is heartfelt, but the answer is repetitive and a bit vague. Improve by using a clear topic sentence, reduce repetition, and give one or two specific examples of daily things to remember (e.g., appointments, birthdays, chores). Use linking words like “also” appropriately and avoid overusing “I would love to.”

示例: In daily life I need to remember practical things like appointments and birthdays, and also to appreciate the support I get from family and friends. For instance, I note birthdays in my phone calendar and write short gratitude notes so I don’t forget to thank people.

建议: Good method descriptions and clear strategies. To improve further, make language more concise and natural (avoid “on some other occasions” and “would love to remember”); use linking words to sequence methods (e.g., “first,” “also,” “if necessary”). Add one brief example of a reminder type to be more specific.

示例: I use phone reminders for appointments and keep a journal for tasks and notes. If it’s really important, I also ask a close friend to remind me, for example, about an interview or a bill payment.

× No, I am not good at memorizing things because I am easily distracted.

✓ No, I am not good at memorising things because I am easily distracted.

In English (Nigeria) the gerund 'memorising' is correct but spelling should follow consistent British English if other text uses 'memorising'. The original had American 'memorizing'; change for consistency. Suggestion: choose one spelling system and apply consistently.

× This has affected my performance in my academics.

✓ This has affected my academic performance.

The phrase 'my academics' is unnatural here. Use 'academic performance' as a fixed noun phrase. Keep present perfect 'has affected' because it links past effects to present.

× I have made out plans to improve my memory.

✓ I have made plans to improve my memory.

The phrasal verb 'made out plans' is incorrect in this context. Use 'made plans' or 'worked out plans'. Suggestion: use 'made plans' for clear meaning.

× Yes, I have forgotten about something.

✓ Yes, I have forgotten something.

The preposition 'about' is unnecessary after 'forgotten' when indicating an item; it makes the sentence awkward. Use 'forgotten something'.

× For example, my friend had a very important occasion that I was to attend, but I forgot and this made my friend very unhappy.

✓ For example, my friend had a very important occasion I was supposed to attend, but I forgot, and this made them very unhappy.

'Was to attend' is formal/awkward; use 'was supposed to attend' for natural speech. Also use a singular gender-neutral pronoun 'them' if gender unknown. Add comma before 'and' connecting clauses.

× So I decided to consciously plan.

✓ So I decided to plan consciously.

Adverb placement: place adverb after main verb for natural flow. 'Decided to plan consciously' reads more naturally than 'decided to consciously plan' which splits the infinitive.

× In my daily life I would love to remember how supportive my friends and family have been to me and also I would love to remember important occasions and also I would love to remember the good things that I have enjoyed.

✓ In my daily life, I would like to remember how supportive my friends and family have been to me; I would also like to remember important occasions and the good things I have enjoyed.

'Would love to' is polite but repetitive; 'would like to' fits speaking test tone. Remove repeated 'also' and streamline with semicolon. 'That I have enjoyed' can be shortened to 'I have enjoyed'.

× I usually set my phone reminders and on some other occasions I have a journal where I write down important information that I would love to remember.

✓ I usually set phone reminders, and on other occasions I keep a journal where I write down important information I would like to remember.

Use present simple 'keep a journal' for habitual action. Remove 'my' before 'phone reminders' for concision and change 'would love to' to 'would like to' for consistency.

× On extreme occasions I tell my friends to remind me about something.

✓ On rare occasions, I ask my friends to remind me about something.

'Extreme occasions' is incorrect collocation; use 'rare occasions'. Also use 'ask' instead of 'tell' when requesting someone to remind you. This matches polite modal usage.