记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, and give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Correct tense and articles (e.g., "most of the time", "note" instead of "tips paper").

示例: Yes, I am fairly good at remembering things. Most of the time I write important tasks on a small notepad and, at the end of the day, I spend about ten minutes reviewing the list to make sure I haven’t missed anything.

建议: Answer directly with a clear stance and give a specific example if possible. Use correct verb forms and avoid repetition. Use a linking phrase (e.g., "However" or "For example") to make it coherent.

示例: I have occasionally forgotten important things, but not often because I write them down. For example, once I nearly missed a meeting, so now I always write tasks on a list and set reminders on my phone.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and organize supporting points with linking words (e.g., "Firstly", "Also"). Be specific about examples and correct collocations ("do housework", "take breaks"). Avoid vague phrases like "so so busy."

示例: I need to remember several daily tasks. Firstly, I must remember my homework and study deadlines; secondly, I need to remember chores such as cleaning and cooking. Also, I try to remember to take short breaks because my study schedule is very busy.

建议: Provide a clear, structured answer: state methods, then give specific examples and link them. Use correct tense and smoother phrasing (e.g., "I write notes on paper" and "I use reminder apps on my phone").

示例: I use a combination of paper notes and phone apps to remember things. At school I write tasks on sticky notes and put them on my desk, and at home I use a reminder app on my phone that sends notifications so I don't forget important appointments.

× And at the most of the time I would uh, write it down on my tips paper and uh, after the whole day finished, I will have a 10 minute to check it out.

✓ And most of the time I write it down on my notes, and after the whole day finishes, I take 10 minutes to check them.

Original has problems with article usage and noun choice ('the most of the time' -> 'most of the time'; 'tips paper' -> 'notes'), tense consistency (mixing would and will) and incorrect phrase 'have a 10 minute' which needs a plural noun and a verb that fits the habit. Use simple present for habitual actions, plural 'minutes' and plural 'them' for notes.

× Uh, probably not because I said that I will have a tip paper that write down every important mission I would have to do, but I think it's normal to forgot something.

✓ Probably not, because I said that I would have a note where I write down every important task I have to do, but I think it's normal to forget something.

Errors: wrong noun ('tip paper' -> 'note'), incorrect verb forms and tense consistency ('write down' should be 'where I write down' or 'to write down'), 'mission' is inappropriate for tasks, 'would have to do' should be 'have to do', and 'forgot' is past instead of base form 'forget' after 'to'. Use base form after 'to' and maintain correct tenses.

× So I witnessed the importance of, uh, writing down the things on the paper and I will I'll.

✓ So I realised the importance of writing things down on paper, and I always do that.

Original is incomplete ('I will I'll' unfinished) and awkward phrasing ('witnessed the importance of' is odd). Use 'realised' or 'found' and rephrase to complete the thought. 'Writing things down on paper' is the standard expression.

× For study I need to remember my homework and for my family I need to memorize the time when I need to do housework.

✓ For my studies I need to remember my homework, and for my family I need to remember when I should do the housework.

Use 'for my studies' (plural) and 'remember' is more natural than 'memorize' for tasks/times. 'the time when I need to do housework' is clumsy; 'when I should do the housework' is clearer. Prepositions and word choices adjusted for natural English.

× So there are many things for me to remember, but the most of the things I think I must remember to break sometimes because my study is so so busy.

✓ There are many things for me to remember, but I think I must sometimes take a break because my studies are so busy.

Original has 'the most of the things' (should be 'many things' or 'most things'), incorrect word order and wrong noun number ('study' -> 'studies'), and incorrect verb phrase 'remember to break' which should be 'take a break'. Adjusted to plural and natural phrasing.

× Uh, in my school, I will write it down the papers and stick it on my table.

✓ At school, I write it on notes and stick them on my desk.

Use simple present for habitual actions. 'Write it down the papers' is incorrect word order; use 'write it on notes' or 'write it down on paper'. 'Table' is better as 'desk' in this context and pronouns must agree ('them' for plural notes).

× And when I was in my home, I will have my phone.

✓ And when I am at home, I have my phone with me.

Use 'at home' not 'in my home' for general statement; maintain present tense for habits ('am' and 'have') rather than mixing past and future. Add 'with me' for clarity.

× I will use some apps to help me to memorize and uh, maybe the apps can uh, remind you sometimes by some messages.

✓ I use some apps to help me remember, and the apps can remind me sometimes with notifications.

Use simple present for habitual actions. 'Help me to memorize' is unnatural for tasks/times; 'help me remember' is preferred. Use correct pronoun 'me' not 'you', and 'notifications' is a more natural word than 'messages' for app reminders.