记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make your answer more direct and correct tense and reduce repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific example with linking words and keep it under five sentences. Correct grammar (use past/present appropriately) and avoid redundant phrases like “always used to”.

示例: Yes, I am good at memorising things. For example, at school my social studies teacher gave us a short passage to learn every day, and I would revise it several times each evening, which helped me get high marks. Therefore, regular revision became my most effective memorising strategy.

建议: Be concise and use correct past tense and clear sequence words (first, then, finally). Give one specific detail about consequence and resolution. Fix grammar and avoid vague words like “always” when referring to a single event.

示例: Yes, once I missed an important exam because I misread the timetable and thought it was two days later. Luckily, a friend reminded me before the exam started, so I managed to arrive on time after all, but I felt very embarrassed and now double-check dates.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and group items logically. Use correct phrasing and avoid filler words (uh, like). Use linking words (for example, also) and be specific about why each item is important.

示例: I need to remember a few essentials every day. For example, before class I always take a pen and notebook, and when I go to work I also bring my laptop, phone, and a portable charger because I often need to type reports and keep my devices charged.

建议: Use complete sentences and explain your methods with clear linking words and one specific example. Improve grammar (use gerunds and correct word order) and replace vague phrases with precise ones (non-negotiable → essential).

示例: I usually write notes or create reminders on my phone for essential tasks, and I set alarms to alert me at a specific time. For example, I put a reminder to submit reports at 5 pm and also ask a family member to call me as a backup so I don't miss important deadlines.

× Yes, I am very good at memorizing things when I was in school, our social teacher used to give us a paper to read every day and I always used to read that in different time and I always passed it so I am always great revising and memorizing things for a long.

✓ Yes, I am very good at memorizing things. When I was in school, our social studies teacher used to give us a paper to read every day, and I always read it at different times and passed, so I was always good at revising and memorizing things for a long time.

The original sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly and has run-on structure. Split into sentences and use past tense consistently for past habits (used to, read, passed). 'used to read that in different time' is corrected to 'read it at different times'. Add articles and connectives for clarity. Suggestion: Keep past habitual actions in past tense and separate ideas into shorter sentences.

× Once it was a very silly mistake. One time I always forgot my own exam. I thought the exam was the day after tomorrow and I read the week schedule wrong My but fortunately my friends confront me earlier.

✓ It was a very silly mistake. One time I forgot my own exam. I thought the exam was the day after next and I had read the weekly schedule incorrectly, but fortunately my friends informed me earlier.

Mixes past simple with an inappropriate use of 'always' and incorrect time expressions. Use past simple 'forgot' for a single past event. 'Day after tomorrow' should be 'day after next' in reported past; 'read the week schedule wrong' should be 'had read the weekly schedule incorrectly'. 'Confront me earlier' is incorrect verb choice; use 'informed me earlier'. Suggestion: For single past events use simple past; use past perfect for an action that happened before another past action.

× In my daily life, I have to remember certain things like before going to my class I have to usually carry pen and paper.

✓ In my daily life, I have to remember certain things, like before going to my class I usually have to carry a pen and paper.

Incorrect word order and missing article. 'have to usually carry' should be 'usually have to carry'. 'pen and paper' needs an article: 'a pen and paper' (or 'a pen and a notebook'). Suggestion: Place adverbs like 'usually' before the main verb and include articles where needed.

× Uh, similarly, when going for work I have always have to carry portable charger, my mobile phone and laptop, which is like very essential.

✓ Similarly, when going to work I always have to carry a portable charger, my mobile phone, and my laptop, which are very essential.

Pronoun and agreement errors: 'have always have to' is duplicated; correct to 'always have to'. Missing articles: 'a portable charger'. List items require plural verb agreement with 'which are very essential' because it refers to multiple items. Also use parallel structure and include 'my' consistently. Suggestion: Avoid duplicate auxiliaries, include articles, and match verbs to plural subjects.

× Write note down the tags or activity I have to do on my mobile phone which is like non negotiable or is very important.

✓ I write notes or tag the activities I have to do on my mobile phone that are non-negotiable or very important.

Original lacks subject-verb agreement and has awkward word order. Change to active first-person 'I write' and pluralize 'notes'. Use 'that are' for defining relative clause and hyphenate 'non-negotiable'. Suggestion: Use clear subject-verb structure and parallel nouns; make relative clauses agree in number.

× Sometimes I even remind my family members to tell me in the afternoon so I don't forget it.

✓ Sometimes I even ask my family members to remind me in the afternoon so I don't forget.

Pronoun and verb choice problems: 'remind my family members to tell me' is awkward—better: 'ask my family members to remind me'. 'don't forget it' is redundant; use 'don't forget'. Suggestion: Use 'ask someone to remind me' for clarity and avoid redundant pronouns.