记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb forms and concise supporting details (max 3–4 short sentences). Avoid irrelevant fragments and unfinished thoughts. Add linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'because', 'so', 'therefore').

示例: Yes, I am good at memorising things because I pay close attention to details. For example, I can recall conversations and faces easily, which helps me in social situations. However, I sometimes prefer to forget unpleasant memories on purpose.

建议: Correct verb tenses and word choice; make the response concise and coherent. Begin with a direct statement, explain the situation with specific details, and mention the consequence or how you fixed it. Use linking words like 'for example', 'so', 'as a result'.

示例: Yes, I have. For example, last year I forgot my best friend’s birthday, which was very embarrassing. As a result, I apologised and surprised her with a belated gift to make amends.

建议: Provide a clear, structured answer: start with a topic sentence outlining key items, then give specific examples and use linking words. Fix grammar and remove repetition. Keep to 2–4 sentences total.

示例: In daily life I need to remember appointments and important dates such as birthdays and holidays. I also need to remember my work schedule and commute times, because being punctual is important for my job.

建议: Be more precise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the method, then explain briefly how it helps using linking words. Use correct noun forms and avoid repetition.

示例: I use my iPhone calendar and reminder apps to remember important things. For instance, I set alerts for birthdays and appointments, so the app notifies me in advance and I can plan accordingly.

× Yes I really good at memorizing things because I always notice the details about what I saw so I can remember a lot and easy to throw bad memories so when someone.

✓ Yes, I am really good at memorizing things because I always notice details about what I see, so I can remember a lot and easily discard bad memories.

Missing verb 'am' for present simple; tense inconsistency ('saw' should be 'see' to match habitual present); adverb form 'easy' should be 'easily'; unnecessary articles and word order tightened. Suggestion: use present simple for habits and pair verbs with correct auxiliary verbs and adverb forms.

× To be honest, yes, unless last year I forgot my best friend's birthday and it's really embarrassed and I feel so sorry to her.

✓ To be honest, yes. Last year I forgot my best friend's birthday and it was really embarrassing and I felt so sorry for her.

Tense and form errors: 'it's really embarrassed' incorrect—should be past 'it was really embarrassing' (adjective form), and 'I feel so sorry to her' should be past 'I felt so sorry for her' using correct preposition. Also 'unless' is incorrect in context and removed. Suggestion: use past tense consistently for past events and use 'embarrassing' and 'sorry for'.

× So yeah, I think it's the best things I have ever forgot.

✓ So yeah, I think it's the worst thing I have ever forgotten.

Incorrect word choice and verb form: 'best' contradicts context; should be 'worst'. Present perfect requires past participle 'forgotten' not 'forgot'. Also change 'things' to singular 'thing' to match 'worst'. Suggestion: use present perfect with past participle for life experiences and ensure noun number matches adjective.

× And in general, I need to remember on like today, whether I make some appointment with my friends or family, especially holidays or someone's birthday.

✓ In general, I need to remember things for each day, whether I make an appointment with friends or family, especially holidays or someone's birthday.

Preposition 'on' before 'like today' is incorrect; use 'for' or rephrase 'each day'. 'Make some appointment' should be 'make an appointment' (article). Also unnecessary filler 'like' removed. Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('for'/'each day') and include articles before singular countable nouns.

× And also I when I need to go to work because every time, every time.

✓ Also, I need to remember when I have to go to work because the time changes often.

Fragment and tense issues: original is incomplete ('I when I need to go to work'). Use present simple 'I need to remember when I have to go to work'. 'Because every time, every time' is unclear; clarified to 'the time changes often'. Suggestion: complete the clause and provide a clear reason phrase.

× I use iPhone schedule and and the app.

✓ I use my iPhone calendar and an app.

Missing possessive 'my' before iPhone and incorrect noun 'schedule' better as 'calendar'. Duplicate 'and and' removed. Use 'an app' (indefinite article) unless a specific app is named. Suggestion: include possessives for personal items and correct articles.

× The app will remind me what I need to keep tracks or I need to remember which is the special days like on someone's birthday or important appointment with friends.

✓ The app reminds me what I need to keep track of or what special days I need to remember, such as someone's birthday or an important appointment with friends.

Verb form and collocation errors: 'will remind' acceptable but present simple 'reminds' fits habitual action; 'keep tracks' should be 'keep track of' (singular and preposition); 'which is the special days' incorrect structure—use 'what special days I need to remember'; 'on someone's birthday' unnecessary 'on' here and 'important appointment' needs article 'an'. Suggestion: use correct collocations ('keep track of') and clearer relative clause structure ('what ... I need to remember').