记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve coherence by starting with a clear topic sentence, then use one linking phrase to add contrast and a brief specific example. Avoid filler like “So yeah.” Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I am good at memorising some kinds of information. For example, I can easily remember dates and numbers, but on the other hand I struggle to remember people's faces and names. Overall, it depends on what type of information I need to recall.

建议: Lead with a concise topic sentence describing the event, then add one or two specific consequences using linking words (for example, ‘as a result’). Reduce repetition (e.g., avoid saying ‘had to’ twice).

示例: Yes. Last year I forgot to collect an important document from the university office. As a result, I had to contact the administration and wait in line again, which delayed my application.

建议: Begin with a clear topic sentence naming categories of daily tasks, then give two specific examples connected with linking words (for example, ‘for example’ and ‘also’). Avoid vague phrases like ‘mundane things’ without specifics.

示例: I need to remember everyday tasks and health-related routines. For example, I remember to do the grocery shopping and pick up important items, and I also make sure to drink my coffee on time because missing it can trigger my migraine.

建议: Start with a direct topic sentence describing your strategy, then briefly explain why you use it and give a concrete example. Use a linking word such as ‘because’ or ‘so’ to show cause and effect.

示例: I usually set up reminders on my phone for important tasks. I do this because I once forgot a document and had to deal with the consequences, so reminders help me avoid repeating that mistake.

× I am good at memorizing things.

✓ I am good at memorising things.

The transcript mixes American and British spelling. Although not in the provided error list, keep spelling consistent with 'memorising' (British) since the examiner used 'memorising' in the prompt. This is a style consistency suggestion.

× Yes, I once forgot to collect an important document from the university office last year and that caused quite a hassle and I had to contact several people and had to wait in line again.

✓ Yes, I once forgot to collect an important document from the university office last year, which caused quite a hassle: I had to contact several people and wait in line again.

The original sentence is grammatically understandable but run-on and uses redundant 'and had to'. The main grammatical issue is sentence structure and past tense continuity. Use a relative clause 'which caused' to link results and simplify repeated past markers. Remove the extra 'had to' before 'wait' because the past context is already established.

× I think it's very mundane things that I have to remember on a daily life basis.

✓ I think it's very mundane things that I have to remember on a daily basis.

'On a daily life basis' is unidiomatic. Use 'on a daily basis' or 'in daily life'. This fixes article/phrase misuse and makes the expression natural.

× That is, go for grocery shopping, then collect anything important if I need to and take my coffee on time because if I don't it triggers my migraine.

✓ For example, I go grocery shopping, collect anything important if I need to, and take my coffee on time because if I don't, it triggers my migraine.

Original uses 'That is,' awkwardly and mixes verb forms. Recast as parallel verb phrases 'go grocery shopping, collect..., and take...' Add a comma before 'if I don't' to separate clauses. This corrects sentence structure and parallelism.

× I usually set up reminders for anything important because I wouldn't like to repeat the mistake I made once in the past.

✓ I usually set up reminders for anything important because I wouldn't like to repeat the mistake I made in the past.

'Once in the past' is redundant; 'in the past' is sufficient. The modal 'wouldn't like' is acceptable, but simplifying the time phrase improves clarity and naturalness.