记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and avoid fillers (umm, well). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Use more accurate phrasing (e.g., "I remember vocabulary well" rather than repeating "well").

示例: I think I'm good at memorising, especially vocabulary. For example, when I study new words I use flashcards and review them every day, so I usually remember their meanings and usage. However, if I'm very tired or stressed, I sometimes struggle to recall them.

建议: Provide a clear, concise account with logical sequencing and fewer hesitations. Use linking words (for example, "for example", "because", "so") and correct verb forms. Include a brief consequence or what you did to fix it.

示例: Yes, I have. For example, two months ago I forgot a close friend's birthday, which made me feel disappointed and embarrassed. To make up for it, I apologised and bought a thoughtful gift, and I set reminders on my phone so it won't happen again.

建议: Give a focused, specific answer with clear examples of daily items you must remember (e.g., appointments, to-do tasks). Use linking words to structure: state main idea, then give reasons and examples. Avoid vague phrases like "moving spontaneously".

示例: I need to remember my daily routine and appointments. For instance, I keep track of work tasks, exercise sessions and mealtimes because they help me stay productive and healthy. I also note special occasions, like birthdays, in my calendar so I don't forget them.

建议: This answer is generally clear but reduce repetition and use precise vocabulary (e.g., "housekeeping books" -> "to-do lists" or "planner"). Mention one or two specific methods and how they help, using linking words.

示例: I usually write things down in a planner or diary to remember important tasks. For example, every night I update my to-do list and add appointments to my calendar, which helps me organise my day and avoid forgetting anything.

× Well, I've never thought about it before.

✓ Well, I have never thought about it before.

Use of contraction 'I've' is acceptable but maintain clarity; 'I have never thought about it before' is the full form and fits present perfect to indicate experience up to now. Keep tense to show current state.

× However, I think I'm I'm really good at memorizing well.

✓ However, I think I'm really good at memorizing.

Redundant words and repeated 'I'm' create a sentence structure error. Remove the duplicate 'I'm' and the unnecessary adverb 'well' because 'good at memorizing' already conveys the meaning.

× When I, umm, memorize some vocabulary, I tend to remember that words really well in addition well.

✓ When I memorize vocabulary, I tend to remember those words really well.

Use 'those' to refer to previously mentioned plural nouns (vocabulary items). Remove filler words and redundant 'in addition well.' Keep present simple for habitual action.

× However, when I feel really stressed or tired, I can't remember the moment.

✓ However, when I feel really stressed or tired, I can't remember things at the moment.

'The moment' is awkward; 'at the moment' is an adverbial phrase meaning 'right now.' Use 'things' as a general object. Maintain present tense for habitual or current state.

× Well umm 2 months ago it was my friend's birthday however I forgot it so I was really umm disappointed and frustrated for myself.

✓ Two months ago it was my friend's birthday, but I forgot it, so I felt very disappointed and frustrated with myself.

Use past simple ('forgot', 'felt') for a completed past event. Spell out numbers in speech transcripts for clarity. Use 'with myself' rather than 'for myself' to express self-directed frustration.

× So I really Sir, I was really sorry to my friends and I finally umm give gave a present for.

✓ So I was really sorry to my friend, and I finally gave a present.

Remove 'Sir' (unnecessary) and correct 'sorry to my friends' to 'sorry to my friend' since the context mentions one friend's birthday. Use past simple 'gave.' Omit trailing preposition 'for.' Avoid double verbs 'give gave.'

× Well, in my daily life it is really important to remember my daily routine because it keeps me awake and I can, umm, spend quality time.

✓ In my daily life, it is important to remember my daily routine because it keeps me alert and helps me spend quality time.

Replace 'keeps me awake' (literal) with 'keeps me alert' for intended meaning. 'Helps me spend' is a clearer structure than 'I can, umm, spend.' Maintain present simple for general truth.

× Then moving spontaneously umm in addition, well, the umm memorizing special occasion is.

✓ Also, remembering special occasions is important.

Original sentence is fragmented and ungrammatical. Simplify to a clear subject-verb-object structure: 'remembering special occasions is important.' Use gerund 'remembering' and present simple.

× Well, I tend to write the housekeeping books or Diaries to remember important things.

✓ I tend to write in a housekeeping book or diary to remember important things.

Use singular or uncountable forms correctly: 'a housekeeping book or diary' and the preposition 'in' with 'write.' Capitalization of 'Diaries' is incorrect; use lowercase.

× Well, every every night before I go to bed I tend to write the diary and I also write down the calendar too.

✓ Every night before I go to bed, I write in my diary and also note events on my calendar.

Remove duplicate 'every,' use 'write in my diary' and 'note events on my calendar' for natural phrasing. 'Tend to' is unnecessary; use simple present for habitual actions. Avoid 'write down the calendar' which is ungrammatical.