记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the answer more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add a brief specific example. Use linking words to connect ideas. Fix grammar (e.g. 'when I meet someone' not 'when I met other person').

示例: Yes, I think I'm quite good at memorising things. For example, I usually remember people's names after meeting them once, which helps me build rapport quickly. This is because I focus closely when I am introduced and repeat the name quietly in my head to reinforce it.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and one coherent specific example with correct vocabulary and grammar. Avoid unclear phrases (e.g. 'crime school' is likely incorrect). Explain briefly why it happened and what you learned using linking words (e.g. 'because', 'so').

示例: Yes, once I missed an important work shift when I was a university student. I was working at a retail store and, because I misread my schedule and overslept, I failed to get there on time. After that I started using my phone calendar with alarms so it would not happen again.

建议: Begin with a direct personal statement and give specific daily tasks you need to remember. Use clear linking words and avoid filler words and repetition. Correct tense and word choice (e.g. 'routinely' instead of 'rotationally').

示例: I need to remember my daily routine, such as going for a 60-minute walk and walking my dog every morning. Also, I keep track of appointments and study sessions in a planner, so I stick to my schedule and feel more organised.

建议: Provide a clear structure: state the method in one sentence, then list concise steps with linking words (first, then, finally). Use natural phrases (e.g. 'I focus on it' instead of 'pay strong attention') and give a brief reason why it works.

示例: I use a three-step method to remember important information. First, I focus carefully on the detail to understand it; then I repeat it aloud or in my head several times; finally, I write it down or set a reminder on my phone so I can review it later.

× I reckon I'm better at memorizing things than other people 'cause when I met other person I could, I could remember their name easily. Other ones.

✓ I reckon I'm better at memorizing things than other people because when I met other people I could remember their names easily.

The sentence uses singular 'other person' and 'their name' inconsistently; it should use the plural 'other people' and 'their names' to match. Also 'Other ones.' is unnecessary and unclear. Use 'because' instead of informal ' 'cause' in formal contexts. Suggestion: ensure nouns and pronouns agree in number and remove redundant fragments.

× Yes, I had an experience that I missed the shift of the my part time job.

✓ Yes, I had an experience when I missed a shift at my part-time job.

The original mixes articles and word order: 'the my' is incorrect. Use past simple 'missed' is fine, but rephrase to 'missed a shift at my part-time job' for natural English. Hyphenate 'part-time' as an adjective.

× It was when I was a university student and I worked at crime school and I missed the schedule and I forgot to commute there.

✓ It was when I was a university student and I worked at a cram school; I missed the scheduled shift and forgot to go to work.

'Crime school' is likely a misspelling of 'cram school'. 'Missed the schedule' is unnatural; use 'missed the scheduled shift' or 'missed my shift'. 'Commute there' is odd in this context; 'go to work' is clearer. Also combine clauses for clarity.

× I guess people shouldn't forget about their own routine.

✓ I guess people shouldn't forget their routines.

'Their own routine' is wordy; plural 'people' pairs better with plural 'routines'. Also 'forget about' is less natural than 'forget' in this context. Ensure pronoun and noun number agree.

× For example, walking around 60 minutes or or or go walking with my dogs or something like that.

✓ For example, walking for about 60 minutes or going for a walk with my dogs.

Mixed forms 'walking' and 'go walking' create inconsistency. Use parallel gerund forms: 'walking' and 'going for a walk', and 'around' should be 'for about'. Remove filler 'or or or' and 'or something like that' for clarity.

× I had a routine and do a rotationally and I think it's important.

✓ I have a routine and do it regularly, and I think it's important.

Tense inconsistency: student uses past 'had' then present 'do'; keep present 'have' to describe current routine. 'Rotationally' is incorrect; use 'regularly' or 'on a rotating basis'. Add object 'it' for clarity.

× I had several steps to memorize important things.

✓ I have several steps to memorize important things.

Tense mismatch: describing current method should use present 'have' rather than past 'had'. If referring to past, keep past tense consistently. Use present simple for habitual actions.

× First, I pay strong attention to what to memorize.

✓ First, I pay strong attention to what I need to memorize.

The phrase 'what to memorize' is grammatically possible but sounds awkward; adding 'I need to' clarifies the object of attention. 'Pay strong attention' is acceptable but 'pay close attention' is more natural.

× Then I repeat the phrase or words or things in my mind many times.

✓ Then I repeat the phrases, words, or information in my mind many times.

Use plural forms to match 'many times' and make the list parallel: 'phrases, words, or information'. This improves clarity and grammatical consistency.

× That is what I.

✓ That is what I do.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks the main verb. Add 'do' to complete the clause and convey the intended meaning. Ensure sentences have a verb to be grammatical.