巧克力— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中表达了喜欢巧克力的原因，但语言不够自然，且有语法错误，如“taste the sweetness of it”应简化为“taste its sweetness”。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并避免重复。

示例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes sweet and makes me feel happy and satisfied.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不流畅，如“Although... but”结构错误，且“3 days once”应为“once every three days”。建议简化句子结构，使用正确的连接词。

示例: Chocolate is delicious, but for my health, I usually eat a small piece once every three days to enjoy the taste without getting addicted.

建议: 回答中语法错误较多，如“attracts”应为“attract”，“stops”应为“stop”，且句子结构混乱。建议简化句子，注意主谓一致，并减少口头语。

示例: Yes, when I was a kid, I was attracted to sweets. Although my parents often stopped me from eating chocolates, I would secretly try to get some.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误，如“stuffs”应为“stuff”，“it'll takes”应为“it makes”。表达不够简洁自然。建议使用更准确的词汇和简洁的句子。

示例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it is sweet and helps our bodies release dopamine, which makes us feel happy.

建议: 回答中语法错误明显，如“black chocolate”应为“dark chocolate”，“tasted”应为“tastes”，“give”应为“gives”。句子结构不连贯，口头语较多。建议注意时态和主谓一致，减少口头语。

示例: My favourite flavour is milk chocolate because it tastes sweet and has a rich flavor. I don't like dark chocolate because it tastes bitter, even though it is healthy.

建议: 回答表达了观点，但句子结构不够流畅，如“in most condition”应为“in most cases”，“it does like chocolate”应为“likes chocolate”。建议使用更自然的表达和连贯的句子。

示例: In most cases, chocolate is a good gift, but we should make sure the person likes it. For example, my friend doesn't like chocolate, so I give her other presents instead.

× Eating chocolate makes me taste the sweetness of it and it often gives me a sense of satisfying and happiness.

✓ Eating chocolate makes me taste its sweetness and it often gives me a sense of satisfaction and happiness.

这里“a sense of satisfying”中的“satisfying”应为名词形式“satisfaction”，因为“a sense of”后面需要接名词。

× Although chocolate is delicious but for my health I usually eat one bit, just umm about 3 days once so I could feel the taste but not addicted to it.

✓ Although chocolate is delicious, for my health I usually eat a little, just about once every 3 days so I can feel the taste but not get addicted to it.

“Although”与“but”不能同时使用，二者都是转折连词，使用其中一个即可。

× ...the sweet things often attracts me...

✓ ...the sweet things often attract me...

主语“things”是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式“attract”，而不是单数“attracts”。

× ...my parents always stops me from eating those...

✓ ...my parents always stop me from eating those...

主语“parents”是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式“stop”，而不是单数“stops”。

× ...but I'll try to get them and eat it just secretly.

✓ ...but I'll try to get them and eat them just secretly.

前文提到的是复数“them”，后文应保持一致，不能用单数“it”。

× For most people, I think we all like sweet stuffs because it'll let our bodies create dopamine which gives us a kind of happiness.

✓ For most people, I think we all like sweet stuff because it lets our bodies create dopamine which gives us a kind of happiness.

“stuff”是不可数名词，不能用复数形式“stuffs”。

× It's easy to get dopamine from eating chocolate so it'll takes chocolate popular.

✓ It's easy to get dopamine from eating chocolate so it makes chocolate popular.

“it”作为主语时，谓语动词应为“makes”，而不是“takes”。

× I don't really like black chocolate because it tasted bitter umm, although it's uh, healthy, but milk chocolate it just give me the flavor of sweet and umm the chocolates umm, thick flavor.

✓ I don't really like black chocolate because it tastes bitter, although it's healthy, but milk chocolate just gives me the sweet and thick flavor.

描述现在的喜好时，动词应使用一般现在时，“tasted”应改为“tastes”，“give”应改为“gives”。

× ...but we have to ensure that the person we give chocolate to it does like chocolate.

✓ ...but we have to ensure that the person we give chocolate to does like chocolate.

“the person we give chocolate to”已经是完整主语，后面不需要再加“it”，否则造成重复。