巧克力— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and answer more directly. Also, keep your answer concise and avoid repeating the question. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then add a specific reason.

示例: Yes, I have liked eating chocolate since childhood because it satisfies my sweet tooth and helps me feel calm and relaxed.

建议: Avoid filler words and redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Be specific about frequency and effects.

示例: I eat chocolate almost every day after my meals because it helps me feel calm and relaxed.

建议: Use past tense consistently and avoid filler words. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

示例: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a kid. For example, my father used to bring chocolate for all of us siblings after work, and I also bought some myself.

建议: Improve grammar and avoid filler words. Use linking words to connect ideas clearly and be more specific.

示例: I believe chocolate is popular worldwide because of its sweet taste and its association with celebrations. People often give chocolate as a gift to show affection and strengthen relationships.

建议: Avoid filler words and grammatical errors. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly and be specific about your preferences.

示例: My favourite chocolate flavour is one with slightly roasted and salty nuts because they add a crunchy texture and enhance the overall taste.

建议: Correct grammar and avoid filler words. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons.

示例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because it appeals to people of all ages, not just children. Moreover, it makes the recipient feel special and helps strengthen relationships.

× Uh, yes I do. When I was a kid, I uh, often eat chocolate.

✓ Uh, yes I did. When I was a kid, I uh, often ate chocolate.

The sentence refers to a past time ('when I was a kid'), so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Do' should be 'did' and 'eat' should be 'ate' to maintain tense consistency.

× My father, whenever he came from uh, uh, work, he brought chocolate with us to, umm, all, for all us siblings.

✓ My father, whenever he came from uh, uh, work, he brought chocolate for all of us siblings.

The phrase 'with us to, umm, all, for all us siblings' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'for' and the pronoun should be 'us' preceded by 'all of' to indicate the group collectively.

× I believe chocolates are popular among around the world because of its sweet content and it also associated with, uh, celebrations.

✓ I believe chocolate is popular around the world because of its sweet content and it is also associated with, uh, celebrations.

'Chocolates' should be singular 'chocolate' when referring to the substance in general. 'Among around the world' is incorrect; 'around the world' suffices. 'Its' correctly refers to 'chocolate' (singular). 'It also associated' lacks the verb 'is'.

× So whenever a person want to treat another uh, he gives chocolate to the other person and it also makes uh, the relationship special.

✓ So whenever a person wants to treat another, he gives chocolate to the other person and it also makes the relationship special.

The verb 'want' should be in third person singular form 'wants' to agree with 'a person'.

× I like chocolate uh, with nuts uh, especially if they are slightly roasted and salty because it add a crunchy texture uh, to it and it also increases its taste burst uh, tastes.

✓ I like chocolate with nuts, especially if they are slightly roasted and salty because it adds a crunchy texture to it and it also increases its taste burst.

'Add' should be 'adds' to agree with singular subject 'it'. The phrase 'taste burst tastes' is redundant; 'taste burst' suffices.

× Yes, I think uh chocolate as a gift is an good idea because it appealable to all ages, not only children.

✓ Yes, I think chocolate as a gift is a good idea because it is appealing to all ages, not only children.

'An good' should be 'a good' because 'good' starts with a consonant sound. 'Appealable' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'appealing'. Also, 'it appealable' lacks the verb 'is'.