唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và có nội dung rõ ràng, tuy nhiên bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy chú ý đến ngữ pháp và phát âm để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn.

示例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax after a busy day. For instance, when I feel stressed, I like to sing during my breaks to enjoy the rhythm and calm my mind.

建议: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng các từ ngữ thừa như "UMM" và nói rõ ràng hơn. Câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc mạch lạc, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng các liên từ để câu văn trôi chảy hơn.

示例: No, I haven't formally learned to sing. Since I was young, I have tried to imitate singers by listening carefully. However, I would like to take singing lessons in the future.

建议: Câu trả lời có nhiều lặp từ và sử dụng từ ngữ không cần thiết như "UMM". Bạn nên nói ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

示例: I would love to sing for my parents and friends because they are important to me. Usually, I sing alone in my room, so performing for them would be a special experience.

建议: Bạn cần tránh sử dụng các từ ngữ thừa như "umm" và chú ý ngữ pháp (ví dụ: 'singing can helps' nên là 'singing can help'). Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, mạch lạc và có cấu trúc tốt hơn.

示例: Yes, definitely. Singing helps people relax after a long day. Moreover, singers can energize their audience during performances, which lifts everyone's mood.

× whenever I feel stressed or being pressured

✓ whenever I feel stressed or pressured

The phrase 'being pressured' is incorrect here because after 'feel' we use the past participle 'pressured' to describe a state, not the continuous form 'being pressured'.

× I would love to sing whenever I I got the break time

✓ I would love to sing whenever I get a break

The phrase 'I got the break time' is incorrect because 'got' is past tense, but the sentence refers to a habitual action, so present tense 'get' should be used. Also, 'the break time' is unnatural; 'a break' is more appropriate.

× Actually I have not UMM because since I was young I would try to listen and then mimic UMM and imitate the artist, the singers.

✓ Actually, I have not, UMM, but since I was young I have tried to listen and then mimic and imitate the artists, the singers.

The use of 'would try' is incorrect here because it suggests habitual past action, but the context is about experience up to now, so present perfect 'have tried' is more appropriate.

× So I have not tried, but in the future I would love to try learning how to sing.

✓ So I have not tried, but in the future I would love to try learning how to sing.

This sentence is correct in modal verb usage; no correction needed.

× I will say that I will say that I would love to perform in front of my parents and my friends since they are my loved ones who I really appreciate UMM because I used to sing alone in my room so I feel like it'll be great if I sing in front of them.

✓ I would love to perform in front of my parents and my friends since they are my loved ones whom I really appreciate. I used to sing alone in my room, so I feel like it would be great to sing in front of them.

The sentence is repetitive and run-on. Removing the repeated phrase and splitting into two sentences improves clarity and grammar. Also, 'who' should be 'whom' as the object of 'appreciate'.

× Yes, definitely umm first singing can helps people unwind and relax after long day.

✓ Yes, definitely, umm, first singing can help people unwind and relax after a long day.

The modal verb 'can' should be followed by the base form of the verb 'help', not 'helps'. Also, 'after long day' needs the article 'a'.

× after long day

✓ after a long day

The phrase 'after long day' is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'long day'.

× through performances singers can help the their audience and fans to energize, to be energized and umm which is so which is help them lift up their mood.

✓ through performances, singers can help their audience and fans to be energized, which helps lift their mood.

The phrase 'the their audience' is incorrect; 'their audience' is correct. Also, 'to energize' is incorrect here because the audience is the receiver of energy, so 'to be energized' is correct. The sentence is also restructured for clarity.