唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more concise and better structured. Avoid redundancy and improve coherence by using linking words. Also, correct minor grammatical errors and clarify your points for naturalness.

示例: I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and recharge. For instance, when I'm tired, singing along to songs on YouTube boosts my energy and improves my work performance later.

建议: Your answer addresses the question but lacks clarity and contains some awkward phrasing. Try to organize your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, and avoid repetition. Use linking words to improve flow.

示例: Yes, singing was a compulsory subject in my school curriculum for several years. However, the lessons focused mainly on theory rather than practical vocal training, so I didn't improve much. Therefore, I rely mostly on my natural talent when I sing.

建议: Your answer is engaging and relevant but could be more formal and structured. Avoid informal phrases like 'gonna' and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, clarify your points for better coherence.

示例: I like to sing for people who enjoy listening to me, especially my friends who share my interest in music. For example, we often go to karaoke together, where singing and dancing help us feel connected and enjoy each other's company.

建议: Your answer has good ideas but contains grammatical errors and unclear expressions. Avoid vague phrases like 'blow up the negative thinking' and 'strengthen the bones.' Use precise vocabulary and linking words to make your answer more natural and coherent.

示例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it is a key part of social gatherings. It helps people connect and enjoy the moment without worrying about their problems. Moreover, singing can lift spirits and strengthen relationships among participants.

× You know when I am so tired a song, singing along to a song on YouTube can really make my day.

✓ You know when I am so tired, singing along to a song on YouTube can really make my day.

The original sentence is missing a comma after 'tired' which causes confusion. Adding the comma clarifies that 'singing along to a song on YouTube' is the action that makes the day better when tired.

× It boosts my performance as work.

✓ It boosts my performance at work.

The preposition 'as' is incorrect here. The correct preposition to indicate location or context of performance is 'at'. 'At work' is the standard phrase.

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

Both 'learnt' and 'learned' are past participles of 'learn', but 'learned' is more common in American English. Since the rest of the transcript uses American English conventions, 'learned' is preferred here.

× You're seeing it as a compulsory subject in our school curricula, and we have learned that for years.

✓ You see it as a compulsory subject in our school curricula, and we have learned that for years.

The present continuous 'You're seeing' is incorrect here because the statement is a general fact or habitual action. The simple present 'You see' is appropriate.

× Unfortunately, the lessons mostly focused on theory rather than offering a practical vocal training, so I didn't really improve my singing skills.

✓ Unfortunately, the lessons mostly focused on theory rather than offering practical vocal training, so I didn't really improve my singing skills.

The phrase 'a practical vocal training' is incorrect because 'training' is an uncountable noun here and should not have an article 'a'. Removing 'a' corrects the sentence.

× Everything I do right now is just based on my instinct, my natural talent to have to have.

✓ Everything I do right now is just based on my instinct, my natural talent to have.

The phrase 'to have to have' is redundant and incorrect. Removing the repeated 'to have' makes the sentence grammatically correct and clearer.

× Those who are willing to listen to me, I'm gonna sing for them.

✓ For those who are willing to listen to me, I'm gonna sing for them.

The sentence is missing the preposition 'For' at the beginning to properly introduce the object of the action. Adding 'For' improves sentence structure and clarity.

× You turn on music, sing and dance together.

✓ You turn on music, sing, and dance together.

A comma is needed after 'sing' to separate the items in the list properly. This is a punctuation issue related to clarity.

× At that time, I know that our souls are connected by singing.

✓ At that time, I knew that our souls were connected by singing.

The tense should be past ('knew' and 'were') to match the past context indicated by 'At that time'.

× Obviously, yes, singing is an integral part of almost every party.

✓ Obviously, yes, singing is an integral part of almost every party.

No correction needed here; the sentence is grammatically correct.

× I guess so, because singing can help people connect with others and also they can enjoy the atmosphere with their worrying too much about all things.

✓ I guess so, because singing can help people connect with others and also they can enjoy the atmosphere without worrying too much about everything.

The phrase 'with their worrying too much about all things' is incorrect. It should be 'without worrying too much about everything' to express the intended meaning properly.

× A singing can blow up the negative thinking and strengthen the bones, the connections among other people.

✓ Singing can blow away negative thoughts and strengthen the bonds, the connections among other people.

The article 'A' before 'singing' is incorrect because 'singing' is an uncountable noun here. Also, 'blow up the negative thinking' is awkward; 'blow away negative thoughts' is more natural. 'Strengthen the bones' is likely a mistake for 'strengthen the bonds'.