唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise, correct grammar and use clear linking. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (where, what you sing, how it makes you feel). Avoid repetition and fix verb forms and articles.

示例: Yes, I love singing. I usually sit in the quiet corner of my room with headphones and sing my favorite pop songs because they lift my mood and make me feel relaxed.

建议: Give a clear, structured answer: state whether you learned, how, and a specific challenge. Use correct verb forms and linking words like 'however' or 'but'. Be specific about what was difficult.

示例: Yes, I tried to learn singing on my own using YouTube and Instagram tutorials. Although these videos taught breathing and pitch techniques, I found it hard to practise consistently and improve my tone without a teacher.

建议: Directly answer who you want to sing for, then explain why. Avoid vague phrases and filler words. Use linking words like 'because' and be specific (e.g., for myself, friends, family).

示例: I usually sing for myself because I am an introvert and singing alone helps me relieve stress and lift my spirits after a long day.

建议: Start with a clear opinion, then give a specific reason and an example. Correct collocations ('bright mood', 'after a hard day's work') and avoid repetition.

示例: Yes, I think singing brings happiness. For example, after a stressful workday I sing to myself to create a brighter mood and reduce stress and anxiety.

× I often find the corner of my room and put a headphone on and then I often some my some of my favorite music to sing that can light up my mood and I often feel the sense of comfort to whenever I listen and I sing those music.

✓ I often go to the corner of my room, put on headphones, and play some of my favorite music to sing; that lights up my mood and I often feel comfort whenever I listen and sing those songs.

Multiple issues: incorrect verb + -ing and verb forms and word choice. 'find the corner' should be 'go to the corner' (verb selection). 'put a headphone on' should be 'put on headphones' (correct collocation and plural). 'some my some of my favorite music to sing' is garbled; corrected to 'play some of my favorite music to sing'. 'that can light up my mood' simplified to 'that lights up my mood' to match present simple habitual action. 'I often feel the sense of comfort to whenever I listen' corrected to 'I often feel comfort whenever I listen' (remove unnecessary 'the sense of' and incorrect 'to'). Also changed 'those music' to 'those songs' (countable noun). Suggestion: simplify sentences, use correct collocations (put on headphones, play music, listen to songs), and maintain consistent present simple for habitual actions.

× Yes, I used to try to learn by myself by YouTube or Instagram.

✓ Yes, I used to try to learn by myself from YouTube or Instagram.

The preposition 'by' is incorrect with platforms; use 'from'. The tense 'used to try to learn' is acceptable for past habit, so keep past tense. Suggestion: use 'from' when referring to learning resources and keep past habitual form 'used to'.

× There was a lot of artists guiding to how to be acquire a stronger voice or the attonation better.

✓ There were a lot of artists showing how to develop a stronger voice or improve intonation.

Multiple errors: subject-verb agreement and preposition use. 'There was a lot of artists' should be 'There were a lot of artists' (plural subject with 'were') — this is subject-verb agreement (ID 27) but primarily fixed here. 'guiding to how to be acquire' is incorrect structure; use 'showing how to develop' or 'guiding on how to acquire'. 'the attonation' misspelling and wrong article; use 'intonation' without 'the'. Suggestion: use 'showing how to' or 'guiding on how to' and ensure verb forms are correct and plural agreement used.

× So I try to learn it, but it's really challenging for Gaines efficiently and I have to put.

✓ So I tried to learn, but it was really challenging to gain efficiency, and I had to stop.

Original sentence has unclear words and sentence fragments. 'Gaines' is misspelled and unclear; likely 'gain' or 'sing'—context suggests 'gain efficiency'. 'I have to put' is incomplete; likely 'I had to stop'. Tense should match previous past 'used to' so change to past: 'I tried... it was... I had to stop.' Suggestion: use clear verbs, complete clauses, and keep tense consistent.

× I love singing along because whenever I feel stressful, I feel boring.

✓ I love singing alone because whenever I feel stressed, I get bored.

Pronoun/word choice errors and adjective/adverb misuse: 'singing along' was likely intended 'singing alone' given context; 'feel stressful' is wrong — use 'feel stressed' (adjective describing person). 'I feel boring' is incorrect; 'bored' describes feeling. Suggestion: use 'stressed' and 'bored' for emotions and choose 'alone' vs 'along' correctly.

× I often sing it because I you know, there.

✓ I often sing because, you know, it helps me.

Sentence is fragmented and misuses pronouns and filler words. 'I often sing it' is vague; remove unnecessary 'it' and rephrase. 'I you know, there' is nonstandard. Suggestion: express purpose clearly: 'I often sing because it helps me' or 'I often sing to feel better.'

× I have to admit that I'm a introvert person, so I love the sense of being alone.

✓ I have to admit that I'm an introverted person, so I enjoy being alone.

Article and adjective form errors: use 'an' before a vowel sound and 'introverted' as the adjective rather than 'introvert person'. 'Love the sense of being alone' is wordy; 'enjoy being alone' is natural. Suggestion: use 'an introverted person' or simply 'introverted' and prefer 'enjoy being alone.'

× Definitely yes, take myself as an example and often sing for creating some light mode or I want to like reduce stress and anxiety after a hard working days.

✓ Definitely yes; take me as an example: I often sing to create a light mood and to reduce stress and anxiety after hard working days.

Tense and structure: 'take myself as an example' should be 'take me as an example' for spoken reference. 'creating some light mode' incorrect noun; use 'create a light mood'. 'I want to like reduce' is filler; use 'to reduce'. 'after a hard working days' has article and number issues; use 'after hard working days' or 'after a hard working day'. Suggestion: use infinitive 'to' for purpose (to create, to reduce), fix noun choice, and maintain present habitual tense.