唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Fix repetition and pronunciation-related wording (e.g. "false sound" → "off-key voice").

示例: I don't enjoy singing because I'm usually off-key, and I worry it might irritate listeners. However, I love listening to music because it helps me relax and feel calm.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and add one specific detail about the learning. Avoid filler words and repeat ideas. Use linking words like "because" or "after" to connect points.

示例: Yes, I started learning to sing when I was four because I was inspired by a local Indonesian music programme. After that, I practiced regularly and performed in a few school events.

建议: Make the answer grammatically correct and complete. Provide one reason and a brief explanation using a linking word. Avoid unfinished sentences—clearly state the reason for lack of confidence.

示例: I prefer to sing for myself because it makes me happy and helps me relieve stress. I don't feel confident singing in front of others because I worry about my pitch and technique.

建议: Start with a direct answer, then give a specific example. Correct noun/pronoun use and be concise. Use linking words like "for example" or "for instance" when giving the song example.

示例: Yes, singing can bring people happiness, especially when the lyrics are positive. For example, the song "Never Give Up" inspired me to live fully and keep striving in life.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence, correct facts, and one specific detail about why you like that singer or band. Avoid vague phrases and fillers, and keep to two or three sentences max.

示例: Yes, I enjoy listening to other people sing. My favorite band is The Beatles because their melodies and lyrics are timeless and calming.

建议: Answer directly and give a clear reason or future plan. Replace unclear words ("autoly") with correct terms (e.g. "self-taught") and use one linking word to state intention to improve.

示例: No, I'm self-taught and haven't taken formal singing classes. Because I feel my technique is weak, I plan to take private lessons to improve my voice.

× Actually I don't like singing because I realise I have a a false sound which is irritated to someone who listen to my music.

✓ Actually I don't like singing because I realize I have a false sound that irritates people who listen to my music.

The sentence has duplicate 'a a' and uses 'which is irritated to someone who listen' incorrectly. Use 'that' as a relative pronoun for defining clauses and active verb 'irritates' with plural 'people' to match 'who listen'. Also 'realise' to American spelling 'realize' depending on variety; keep consistent. Suggestion: remove duplicate article, use 'that irritates people who listen to my music'.

× But I love listening music because it it makes me become more relaxed and calm.

✓ But I love listening to music because it makes me feel more relaxed and calm.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by its object 'music' (this is an article/preposition error type 11 but also involves article use), and 'it it' is duplicated. Use 'feel' rather than 'become' for a natural collocation: 'feel relaxed'. Remove duplicate word and add 'to'.

× I learned how to sing when I was four years old.

✓ I learned how to sing when I was four years old.

This sentence is grammatically correct. It uses the past tense appropriately to describe a past event. No correction necessary.

× Uh, I got inspired by Indonesia Bencharika uh certificate programme and it inspired me to learn the how to sing.

✓ I was inspired by Indonesia Bencharika's certificate programme, and it inspired me to learn how to sing.

Use passive 'was inspired by' or active 'I got inspired by' is acceptable but 'Indonesia Bencharika uh certificate programme' needs possessive or clearer noun phrase: 'Bencharika's certificate programme'. Remove extra 'the' before 'how to sing' and eliminate filler 'uh'. Suggest: 'I was inspired by Indonesia Bencharika's certificate programme and decided to learn how to sing.'

× I would like to sing for myself because it makes me happy and I can relieve the stress.

✓ I would like to sing for myself because it makes me happy and helps me relieve stress.

'Can relieve the stress' is not wrong but sounds awkward; use 'helps me relieve stress' for natural expression. Remove definite article before 'stress' unless referring to specific stress.

× I actually not confident when I singing in front of people because uh due to the due to lack of my.

✓ I am actually not confident when I sing in front of people because of my lack of confidence.

Missing auxiliary verb 'am' for present tense 'I am not confident'. Use base form 'sing' after 'when I'. 'due to the due to lack of my' is ungrammatical; restructure as 'because of my lack of confidence'. Remove filler words. This fixes pronoun/possessive placement and sentence structure.

× Singing can bring happiness to people especially with the positive lyrics.

✓ Singing can bring happiness to people, especially with positive lyrics.

Sentence is mostly correct; remove unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'positive lyrics' and add a comma for clarity. This fits present participle noun 'Singing'.

× I heard a music called Never Give Up and he in this song inspired me how to live to the fullest and keep striving for our life.

✓ I heard a song called 'Never Give Up', and the singer in this song inspired me to live life to the fullest and keep striving.

Use 'song' not 'music' when referring to a specific titled piece. 'He in this song' is unclear; use 'the singer' or 'the song' inspired me. Use infinitive 'inspired me to live' not 'inspired me how to live'. 'Our life' is vague; use 'life' or 'my life'. Also add commas and proper title punctuation. This fixes pronoun reference and verb pattern.

× Yes, I love listening other singing and the most favorite band is uh, The Beatles, which famous in the era of 80.

✓ Yes, I love listening to other people singing, and my favorite band is The Beatles, who were famous in the 1980s.

Use 'listening to' with preposition 'to'. 'Other singing' should be 'other people singing'. 'The most favorite' is redundant; use 'my favorite'. Use relative pronoun 'who' for people/bands and past tense 'were famous'. 'Era of 80' should be 'the 1980s'.

× I love I collect they're so especially black bear and I love uh, it makes me become.

✓ I love collecting their songs, especially 'Blackbird', and they make me happy.

The original is confusing: 'I love I collect they're so' likely means 'I love collecting their songs'. 'Black bear' seems to be 'Blackbird' (a Beatles song). Use plural pronoun 'they' for the band's songs and complete the clause 'they make me happy' rather than 'it makes me become'. Clarify vocabulary and structure.

× No I have not.

✓ No, I have not.

Add a comma after 'No' for natural spoken punctuation, though grammatically it's acceptable. No tense error.

× I haven't even ever taken a singing class but I only learned autoly and I know it is lack of of the good voice so I need to improve more by taking a course through private lesson.

✓ I have never taken a singing class; I only learned autodidactically, and I know my voice is lacking, so I need to improve by taking private lessons.

Use 'have never taken' rather than 'haven't even ever taken' for clarity. 'Learned autoly' is unclear; use 'learned autodidactically' or 'self-taught'. 'It is lack of of the good voice' is ungrammatical; express as 'my voice is lacking' or 'I lack a good singing voice'. Use plural 'private lessons' for general courses. This addresses tense, word choice, and article errors.