列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence fluency. Use a complete sentence with correct grammar and avoid repeating phrases unnecessarily.

示例: Yes, I usually make a list when I go grocery shopping to ensure I don't forget anything important.

建议: Focus on clearer sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and explain how the list helps you. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences.

示例: Yes, I make a list for my work because it helps me remember many tasks. I usually organize them in order of priority, such as first, second, and third, to manage my time effectively.

建议: Avoid hesitation sounds like 'uh' and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons why some people avoid making lists.

示例: I think some people prefer to remember their tasks mentally because they feel writing lists takes too much time and can be burdensome.

建议: Work on sentence fluency and avoid repetition. Use linking words to contrast past and present habits clearly.

示例: I used to write lists on paper, but now that smartphones are common, I prefer making lists on my phone because it is more convenient and efficient.

× Yes, I usually make list when I go for my when I go for shopping, grocery shopping especially.

✓ Yes, I usually make a list when I go for shopping, especially grocery shopping.

The noun 'list' is countable and singular here, so it requires the article 'a' before it. Also, the phrase 'when I go for my when I go for shopping' is redundant and incorrect; it should be simplified to 'when I go for shopping'.

× Yes I make a list for my work because it will helpful and and it makes me remember a lot of things.

✓ Yes, I make a list for my work because it is helpful and it helps me remember a lot of things.

The modal verb 'will' is incorrectly used here; 'will helpful' is ungrammatical. Instead, the correct form is 'it is helpful'. Also, 'makes me remember' is better expressed as 'helps me remember' for clarity and correctness.

× I usually make number wise like sequence wise first is second is and 3rd the other works so.

✓ I usually make it number-wise, like in sequence: first, second, and third, then the other tasks.

The phrase 'number wise' should be hyphenated as 'number-wise' to function as an adverb. Also, 'works' should be 'tasks' or 'works' if plural, but the sentence structure is unclear and needs rephrasing for clarity.

× I think some peoples, uh, are, some peoples are usually remember their work and they don't have a time to write down their task and even they feel like it's uh, like burden or something like that.

✓ I think some people usually remember their work and they don't have time to write down their tasks, and they even feel like it's a burden or something like that.

The word 'peoples' is incorrect here; the correct plural form is 'people'. Also, 'a time' should be 'time' without an article, and 'task' should be plural 'tasks' to match the context.

× Back then I used to write down on the paper but now has we all have a smartphone so I usually I already I use my phone to make a list.

✓ Back then, I used to write down on paper, but now, as we all have smartphones, I usually use my phone to make a list.

The phrase 'write down on the paper' should be 'write down on paper' without 'the' because 'paper' is uncountable here. Also, 'has we all have' is incorrect; it should be 'as we all have'. The sentence is also corrected for clarity and fluency.