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建议: Perbaiki penggunaan tata bahasa dan hindari pengulangan kata seperti 'love to'. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dan jelas untuk menjawab langsung pertanyaan. Misalnya, mulai dengan menyatakan apakah Anda membuat daftar atau tidak, lalu jelaskan alasannya dengan kalimat yang efektif dan alami.

示例: I usually don't make a list when I shop because I enjoy browsing around the store. I prefer to buy things spontaneously, including items I need and some extras for enjoyment.

建议: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan struktur kalimat agar lebih jelas dan efektif. Hindari pengulangan kata 'uh' dan lengkapi kalimat yang terputus. Gunakan kata penghubung untuk menjelaskan alasan dengan lebih logis.

示例: I don't usually make a list for my work because creating one can sometimes lead to burnout. Instead, I prefer to prioritize tasks based on their urgency to manage my workload better.

建议: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami dan jelas. Gunakan kata penghubung untuk menghubungkan ide dan berikan alasan yang spesifik dan logis.

示例: Some people dislike making lists because they can distract them. Sometimes, unexpected urgent tasks arise that are not included in the list, which makes it hard to concentrate on the planned activities.

建议: Perbaiki penggunaan kata dan tata bahasa, serta buat kalimat lebih singkat dan jelas. Gunakan kata penghubung untuk menjelaskan alasan preferensi dengan lebih terstruktur.

示例: I prefer to make lists on paper because it's easier to find them quickly. When I use my phone, sometimes I struggle to locate the list promptly.

× Not really because I love to, uh, window shopping.

✓ Not really because I love to, uh, window shop.

The verb 'love to' should be followed by the base form of the verb, not the '-ing' form. 'Window shopping' is a gerund, but after 'love to' the base verb 'shop' is correct.

× Every time I go to supermarket or shopping mall I just love to sing around and buy anything I think I need and also buy some additional for pleasures.

✓ Every time I go to the supermarket or shopping mall, I just love to look around and buy anything I think I need and also buy some additional items for pleasure.

The phrase 'go to supermarket' requires the definite article 'the'. 'Sing around' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'look around'. 'Some additional' needs a noun after it, such as 'items'. 'For pleasures' should be 'for pleasure' as an uncountable noun.

× Not really because I think, uh, when we creating, uh, some list, uh, for our job desk, it's sometimes, uh, makes us, uh, burnout.

✓ Not really because I think, uh, when we create, uh, some list, uh, for our job desk, it sometimes, uh, makes us, uh, burn out.

The verb 'creating' should be in base form 'create' after 'when we'. 'It's sometimes makes' is incorrect; 'it sometimes makes' is correct. 'Burnout' as a verb should be two words 'burn out'.

× And also I think it's more proper to, uh, use a priority based on their urgency rather than.

✓ And also I think it's more proper to, uh, use priorities based on their urgency rather than something else.

'Use a priority' is incorrect; 'use priorities' is better. The sentence is incomplete; 'rather than' should be followed by a comparison object.

× Because sometimes A to do list or a test list is just makes us unconcentrated when doing something because sometimes there are things that more urgent than the things that stated in the list.

✓ Because sometimes a to-do list or a test list just makes us unconcentrated when doing something because sometimes there are things that are more urgent than the things stated in the list.

'Is just makes' is incorrect; 'just makes' is correct. 'Unconcentrated' is not a standard word; 'unfocused' or 'distracted' would be better. 'Things that more urgent' needs 'are' before 'more urgent'. 'That stated' should be 'that are stated'.

× When I had to prepare a lease, I prefer to make a lease in a paper because when I put a lease in my phone sometimes I cannot find it as soon as possible, but when it stated in the paper I just easily can find it anywhere.

✓ When I have to prepare a list, I prefer to make a list on paper because when I put a list in my phone sometimes I cannot find it as quickly, but when it is stated on paper I can easily find it anywhere.

'Had to' should be 'have to' for present tense. 'Make a lease in a paper' should be 'make a list on paper'. 'As soon as possible' is not appropriate here; 'as quickly' fits better. 'Stated in the paper' should be 'stated on paper'. 'I just easily can find' should be 'I can easily find'.