列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm' to make your speech more fluent and natural. Also, improve sentence structure for clarity, for example, say 'I think it helps me shop more effectively and find what I need easily.'

示例: Yes, I am quite an organised person, so I always make a list before I go shopping. I think it helps me shop more effectively and find what I need easily.

建议: Focus on clearer sentence construction and correct word choice. For example, say 'I am an organised staff executive, so I make lists for my work. This helps me work efficiently and stay focused on my objectives.'

示例: I am an organised staff executive, so I make lists for my work. This helps me work efficiently and stay focused on my objectives.

建议: Avoid excessive hesitation and incomplete sentences. Use clear linking words and complete your ideas. For example, say 'Some people may dislike making lists because they are not naturally organised and prefer a more spontaneous approach to work and life. Also, they might not consider lists necessary.'

示例: Some people may dislike making lists because they are not naturally organised and prefer a more spontaneous approach to work and life. Also, they might not consider lists necessary.

建议: Reduce filler words and improve sentence flow. For example, say 'Nowadays, I prefer to make lists on my phone because I carry it everywhere. It's very convenient to check my schedule and manage tasks on the go.'

示例: Nowadays, I prefer to make lists on my phone because I carry it everywhere. It's very convenient to check my schedule and manage tasks on the go.

× Yes, I'm a typically organized person so I always make a list before I go for shopping.

✓ Yes, I'm a typically organised person so I always make a list before I go shopping.

The adverb 'typically' is correctly used, but 'organized' should be spelled 'organised' in British English. Also, the phrase 'go for shopping' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'go shopping' without 'for'. This is a common prepositional error.

× I think it will make the uh, make me effective and uh, umm can easy to get what I want.

✓ I think it will make me effective and make it easy to get what I want.

The phrase 'can easy to get' is grammatically incorrect. 'Easy' is an adjective and cannot be used directly after 'can'. The correct structure is 'make it easy to get'. Also, 'make me effective' is acceptable, but the sentence needed restructuring for clarity and correctness.

× I'm an organized executive of staff, so I will make a list for my work.

✓ I'm an organised executive staff member, so I make a list for my work.

In British English, 'organized' should be 'organised'. The phrase 'executive of staff' is awkward; 'executive staff member' is more natural. Also, 'will make' suggests future tense, but the context implies a habitual action, so 'make' is more appropriate.

× I think it makes me work efficient and more object orientation and it can avoid me.

✓ I think it makes my work efficient and more objective-oriented, and it helps me avoid mistakes.

'Work efficient' should be 'work efficient' with 'efficient' as an adjective modifying 'work'. 'Object orientation' is likely intended as 'objective-oriented'. The phrase 'it can avoid me' is incorrect; the subject cannot avoid a person. The intended meaning is probably that it helps avoid mistakes or errors.

× I think 1 main reason is about their character may be, uh, they are, uh, not the type of organized person, uh, they love cardio rhythm in, uh, working and uh, life.

✓ I think one main reason is about their character; maybe they are not the type of organised person; they love a cardio rhythm in working and life.

The number '1' should be written as 'one' in formal speech. 'Organized' should be 'organised' in British English. The phrase 'cardio rhythm' is unclear but assumed to be correct as a noun phrase. The sentence structure is fragmented and could be improved with proper punctuation.

× And uh, I think secondly, maybe they, uh, don't think too much about their.

✓ And I think, secondly, maybe they don't think too much about it.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'about their' which is incomplete. It likely intends to say 'about it' or 'about their lists'. The sentence structure is incomplete and needs a proper object to complete the thought.

× In modern society, uh, I will choose, uh, make a list on my phone because I will, uh, take my phone, uh, everywhere.

✓ In modern society, I choose to make a list on my phone because I take my phone everywhere.

The phrase 'make a list on my phone' is acceptable, but 'choose, make' is awkward; 'choose to make' is correct. The phrase 'take my phone, uh, everywhere' is correct but the commas and fillers should be removed for clarity. Also, 'will choose' and 'will take' suggest future tense, but the context implies habitual action, so present tense is better.

× I can't go a day without my mobile phone.

✓ I can't go a day without my mobile phone.

This sentence is grammatically correct and requires no correction.

× It's very convenient to check my schedule and uh, you know, take the take every tasks.

✓ It's very convenient to check my schedule and, you know, take on every task.

The phrase 'take the take every tasks' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'take on every task'. Also, 'tasks' should be singular or plural consistently; 'every task' is correct. The pronoun usage is acceptable but the verb phrase needs correction.