列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答较为自然且内容完整，但句子较长且有些重复，建议简化表达，避免冗余，同时注意语法，如“making lists on”应为“making lists is”。

示例: I usually don't make a list before shopping because I find it time-consuming and mentally tiring. Instead, I prefer to shop spontaneously, which helps me feel more relaxed and less stressed.

建议: 回答结构清晰，内容具体，但部分表达略显口语化且有重复，建议使用更正式的表达并减少重复，如“does it work well? Absolutely, I have to”可简化。

示例: Yes, I always make lists for my work because I have many tasks to handle simultaneously. These lists help me organize and prioritize my work effectively.

建议: 回答内容较好，但“composite shopping”用词不准确，建议使用更恰当的词汇如“impulsive shopping”，并注意句子连贯性。

示例: Some people dislike making lists because they find it time-consuming and mentally exhausting. Instead, they prefer to act on impulse, which can be more relaxing but may lead to impulsive shopping.

建议: 回答不够完整，最后一句不完整且表达不清晰，建议完整表达观点并避免口语化，如“That's quite demanding mentally”可改为更正式表达。

示例: I prefer making lists on paper because using a smartphone often leads to distractions like calls and messages, which can interrupt my focus.

× Well, actually I avoid making list before I go to a store, but this is because I find making lists on really time demanding and some kind of mentally tiring, which is why I refuse to do so and instead I choose to walk around the store and shop spontaneously, which makes me feel much more relaxed and less stressed.

✓ Well, actually I avoid making lists before I go to a store, but this is because I find making lists really time demanding and somewhat mentally tiring, which is why I refuse to do so and instead I choose to walk around the store and shop spontaneously, which makes me feel much more relaxed and less stressed.

这里的“list”应该用复数形式“lists”，因为前文提到的是“making lists”，表示制作多个清单的行为。英语中，表示泛指的可数名词复数形式更合适。

× I find making lists on really time demanding and some kind of mentally tiring

✓ I find making lists really time demanding and somewhat mentally tiring

短语中“on”使用不当，正确表达应直接用形容词修饰“making lists”，去掉“on”更符合英语习惯。

× Does it work well? Absolutely, I have to.

✓ Does it work well? Absolutely, I have to use it.

“I have to”后面缺少动词，导致句子不完整。应补充动词“use it”使句子完整，表达清晰。

× And I would say that in many cases or more often than not, they do work well because it helped me to organize the things and sort everything out.

✓ And I would say that in many cases or more often than not, they do work well because they help me to organize things and sort everything out.

前半句用现在时态“do work well”，后半句却用过去时“helped”，时态不一致。应统一用现在时态“help”，因为描述的是习惯性动作。

× So instead they prefer to do things based on their feelings or decisions at the moment, which could make them more relaxed and less stressful than before.

✓ So instead they prefer to do things based on their feelings or decisions at the moment, which could make them more relaxed and less stressed than before.

“less stressful”形容词“stressful”用于描述事物，表示“有压力的”；这里应使用“less stressed”形容人的状态，表示“感到压力较小”。

× On the other hand, this could lead to more negative things like composite shopping.

✓ On the other hand, this could lead to more negative things like compulsive shopping.

“composite shopping”用词错误，应为“compulsive shopping”，表示“强迫性购物”，是正确表达。

× This is because that when you are trying to create something with your smartphone, there are usually many distractions.

✓ This is because when you are trying to create something with your smartphone, there are usually many distractions.

“because that”结构不正确，应去掉“that”，直接用“because”引导原因状语从句。

× So use a piece.

✓ So I use a piece of paper.

句子结构不完整，缺少主语和宾语，导致表达不清。应补充完整，明确表达“我使用一张纸”。